At part 1:
Change 'There is a entrance go to inside the citadel' to There is an entrance that goes inside the Citadel'
Change 'That named Citadel of Lost' to 'That Citadel's name is the Lost Citadel'
Change the last sentence to: 'The Ghosts that defend the citadel are very skilled, defending every nook and cranny, all bases, and they defend the main gate also,makig it hard to penetrate!
At part 2:
I found it hard to understand but change it to this:
'Well, I'm going to listen to you so you and your fellow people go through the portal. Afterwards I'll send my ships to transport and send my warriors through the portal'
At Part 3:
Change 'You came at my need time' to 'You came at my time of need'
Change 'You are only my ally' to 'You're my only ally.'
Change 'The Ghost in this land is attacked us and we are in danager' to 'The Ghosts in this land are attacking us and we are in danger'
Change 'Now we are peparing for battle but the enemies are really strong!' to 'We are now preparing for battle, for the enemies are strong!'
At Part 4:
Change 'and I escape' to 'and I escaped'
Change 'My base is contrusted at east of this citadel' to 'My base is located/constructed (< you choose which) at the east of this citadel'
Change the last sentence to: 'So you and I must go to the Citadel entrance and strike an attack.'
At Part 5:
Change 'bastard ghosts' to 'Ghost bastards'
Change 'will be feel our wrath!' to 'will feel our wrath'
At Part 6:
Change the last sentence to: 'We need to push back the humans that came here'
At Part 7:
Change the two sentences to: 'We need to ambush them now, and fast. Else, all will be... lost.'
At Part 8:
Change the first sentence to: 'Derondora, you're the strongest son so I think you're worthy of defending the gate'
Change the next sentece to: To the other two sons, watch and defend Derondora from his west and east of his location, and be vigilant so you can attack the outlanders. Don't let them past the gate.'
Change the last sentence to: 'Derondora will aid you in battle'
At Part 10:
Change 'Good luck all' to 'Good luck to all!'
Sorry if some of these have been mentioned before me, it took me a while.