The Adventures of Lorand

[deepstrasz]

A credits list in the map description with the names of the authors whose resources you've used is mandatory. That includes models, skins, icons, custom spells, systems. Also, sounds, music and everything outside this site.
This helps you with the models, skins and icons from Hiveworkshop: Resources in use by The Adventures of Lorand
You can also upload your map here to generate a list: Asset scanner

Also please write a more detailed description pertaining the gameplay and background story.

Awaiting Update.

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• A credits list in the map thread description is required where the names of the resource (models, skins, icons, spells, sound etc.) authors are mentioned along with the specific resource. It would be a luxury to have links leading to the used resources. Credits in the Quest Log would be appreciated too.
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GENERAL MAPPING
A Beginner's Guide to Map Making
The Ultimate Beginners Terrain Tutorial
Advanced Terraining Tutorial
A Guideline to Terraining and the Hive's Terraining Section
Various Terraining Tips!
Basic Mapping Video Tutorial
WE Map Editor for Newbies!
The Path Of Proper Map Making - What to do and what should be avoided

MELEE MAPPING
How to create Melee Maps
General - Melee Maps like the Professionals
Competitive Melee Map
Melee mapping - The reasons behind common aspects of competitive 1v1 maps
Melee Do's and Dont's

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Pathing - Everything about it
[Terraining] Alternative Pathing Technique

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[Johnson Tanuwijaya]

well okay, i do my best bro

 

[deepstrasz]

well okay, i do my best bro

Good start but there's way more names/resources to credit than those.

 

[Johnson Tanuwijaya]

are you mean just names/resources and not the link import?

 

[deepstrasz]

are you mean just names/resources and not the link import?

Yes, you can write the names of the users whose resources you've used. That link helps. The Asset Scanner can make an automatic list. Also credit stuff from outside the site that wasn't made by you.
To see examples of credits list, look at recent maps which were approved.

 

[Valtheron]

Hi! Take this as positive criticism from my part.
I know this is your first published work but there was only 1 mission and it comprised of only killing bandits scattered across the map.

-The dialogues do not make that much sense. Grammar and punctuation could be improved.

-Missing tooltip icon on Lorand's 3rd ability of Command Aura.

-IMO The starting footman could have the defend ability already unlocked.

-Map and terraining could use some work as there's too much unused map space.

I hope you use this as motivation if you want to finish your campaign.

 

[Johnson Tanuwijaya]

Thank you for the advice, i will repair it as suppose i can

 

[arthas981]

Good job bro 5/5

 

[Johnson Tanuwijaya]

Good job bro

thanks you bro

 

[deepstrasz]

1. The third ability has no description. Also, ability descriptions are not that good. Some mention duration for instance only when learning not after as well. Please take a look at the original game's descriptions and try learning from them.
2. Too bad Judge's Power only affects the hero and not his troops as well.
3. Abilities are pretty much known ones.
4. Villagers have no names. Why are they addressing him simply as Lorand? Are they that familiar with him?
5. Lorand's unit name/rank is his name.
6. Units selected during cinematic mode.
7. From the start it feels like the first level of the RoC human campaign.
8. Somehow the bandits kidnapped crossbowmen (expecting ransom for captured soldiers? Why go through the trouble when taking villagers is easier? Villagers aren't important?) and took them to their hideout through a murloc camp.
9. As always, the captured are caged with all their armours and weapons. And they're always ready to fight too, not tired, neither hungry, nor thirsty.
10. No time to see what's in the crates and barrels near the bandit leader and co. since you have to kill the enemy and after you get immediately into the ending.
11. Villagers simply call him Lorand which seems definitely disrespectful while his troops call him sir.

Rather an Arthas overwrite rather than a side story. Quite unoriginal and much lower quality than the original campaign. Also, not finished.

Simple.

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MELEE MAPS
Description Guide - Melee Maps
Describing Your Melee Map
Melee Map Description Generator v1.3

MAPS IN GENERAL
The importance of a Description
Description Guide - Maps
Map Thread Guide
Map Description Making: Good & Bad
Map Description - Templates
Map Description Generator [1.2]

How to Add a Screenshot to your Map Description

ADDITIONAL NECESSARY INFORMATION

• A credits list in the map thread description is required where the names of the resource (models, skins, icons, spells, sound etc.) authors are mentioned along with the specific resource. It would be a luxury to have links leading to the used resources. Credits in the Quest Log would be appreciated too.
• A detailed changelog in the first post would be helpful to reviewers and notify fans about the newest implementations to your map.
• Map thread tags are important. Please use those that fit and not more or none.

M A P - C R E A T I O N - G U I D E S

Details

GENERAL MAPPING
A Beginner's Guide to Map Making
The Ultimate Beginners Terrain Tutorial
Advanced Terraining Tutorial
A Guideline to Terraining and the Hive's Terraining Section
Various Terraining Tips!
Basic Mapping Video Tutorial
WE Map Editor for Newbies!
The Path Of Proper Map Making - What to do and what should be avoided

MELEE MAPPING
How to create Melee Maps
General - Melee Maps like the Professionals
Competitive Melee Map
Melee mapping - The reasons behind common aspects of competitive 1v1 maps
Melee Do's and Dont's

PATHING
Pathing - Everything about it
[Terraining] Alternative Pathing Technique

LEAKS
Triggers - Memory Leaks and Custom Scripts

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[789789]

Is there currently only two chapters?

 

[Johnson Tanuwijaya]

Is there currently only two chapters?

yes bro

 

[Fyar]

Not every Hive Campaign needs to be the next Malfurion's Quest or Curse of the Forsaken. This was a cool short map featuring a Paladin from the Silver Hand. I just wish it had been longer. It may not quite qualify as a full "campaign," but it's still nice to play a short, well-crafted map against the bandits.

It seems you're not active on Hive anymore, so I just want to wish you all the best.