Blasphemy! MY BLASPHEMY!

[Darkfang]

What if I told you the story?
What if I told you the truth behind the old ones lies?
What if make you see the angels falling to the ground?
Do you see the black feathers all over the ground?
Does the lascury of the sky rain?
Is it blood on your eyes?
Do you see the black wings being took by Terra to the forgottens kingdom?
Do you want to know?
It catched you like thorns from whom you can't scape.

I'll leave the last poem of the five.

OH! watch the mortals defend the gods while those spread their blood of their veins all over the ground for the unstopable times, the sands had turned in to red, turning in to blood that falls down through the walls of the hourglass drying on them. Look at the mutilated demons, with insatisfaction tore the flesh of the mortals on madness, look at the withe wings curse the demons and the sons of earth, watch the beasts of Terra eat their remains and !Look! that there is the mortal begging on them for redemption.

Between the light of the promised sun are revealed the black wings that will open the way for the new eclipse of the eons.

Eclipsum No-Sancti

 

[X.e.r.e.X]

Teehee^^

Sage

 

[Darkfang]

xD it's a part of the book I'm writting =D, just want your opinion, the book is kind of serius but its a total blasphemy huashuashuas

 

[X.e.r.e.X]

http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/screenwriting-storyboarding-concept-creation-291/

 

[Darkfang]

u.u me be fool mon xD

 

[Steel_Stallion]

Does the lascury of the sky rain?

What's a lascury?

 

[Zombie]

Er, no offense but you may want to learn English first before going for a book, there are grammatical errors in almost every sentence. :|

That aside, I recommend you write about the Russian Military instead.

 

[Paladon]

And i advise you to write about something you understand.
Don't clash words together just because they sound like being taken from fantasy movies.
Correct me if i am wrong.

 

[TwistedImage]

Yeah, learn English before going for a book in English. Write it in your native language instead.

Alternatively, don't use google translator.

 

[Darkfang]

am i write in spanish, not in english...and this words are not from movies -.-"!