After I post the second comment, I soon discovered you are a Chinese and a Malaysian too! I'm happy to greet you, just because you are a Malaysian, and I'm a Malaysian too! You are the first Malaysian I saw in this community. So, welcome here. I like to make cinematic and you can watch my two cinematic from http://www.hiveworkshop.com/resources_new/maps/?user=138539
I have comments on your map. Firstly, your must be careful of your minor grammar mistakes. For example: "I will help you take it.", and it should be "I will help you 'to' take it". Although you are good in English, but the minor mistakes are still very important. Secondly, there is a bug, after Rylai, Bloodmage's gf, shout "Help me, please, I trapped inside the cage!" then the cinematic mode is not being turned off, so the cinematic can't go on and I've to press Alt+F4 to exit Warcraft. I hope you can fixed it! Anyway, the story is funny, and I give you a 5/10 rate. Bring it on!