deepstrasz
Map Reviewer
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Ow me gawd! What is that thing?
Yep, me likes it a lotI hope you like the progress and ideas so far!
It's amazing what you can do to WarCraft III.And it goes on!
I wasn't expecting a story for an AoS but that doesn't make it an impossibility. As far as its content goes I can't decide only from this excerpt of its quality.
The first chapter surely is a little bit different from the rest, because we wanted to create a mysterious feeling.I wasn't expecting a story for an AoS but that doesn't make it an impossibility. As far as its content goes I can't decide only from this excerpt of its quality.
Exactly.Everything needs a story, you can't just pop up into a map with no clue what's going on.
I respect your belief but I am not going to share it. Needless to say that when you're in a ring the last thing you'd want to know about your opponent is the story rather than the weaknesses.Everything needs a story, you can't just pop up into a map with no clue what's going on.
That is honourable. Would that include a little of their way of acting in the characters as well?Also, I am terrible in giving the charackters names. So I will simply alter the names of people who are working on the project or commented in this thread somehow.
So, maybe you find yourself in this story.
I'll try but can't promise that.That is honourable. Would that include a little of their way of acting in the characters as well?![]()
Nah, there would be some information missing in the following chapters otherwise ^^The second chapter is better imo. I would've started with that, directly.
It developed really fast from a short background explanation to a novel-ish thing. I may want it to become a full cinematic in the distant future but we already talked about making a short trailer video of the map. Crigges is working on a way of recording and rendering Warcraft 3 material quite differently from the way people are doing it now. But this is future talk for version 2.0 or soOh, very cool!
One can see you're clearly enjoying the process of storywriting, and I like this feeling when reading something. Anyways I didn't expect that the lore behind the map would come off as a novel-like narrative, I thought that it would be more like the regular overview (about the characters and events) we're used to see in games.
Not complaining though, I like how it is going![]()
So, you found yourself?Oh... I see what you did there...
I never played Might and Magic. Nearly all of my influence came from the books written by Brandon Sanderson.Although the story resembles some things from Chinese mythophilosophy, Might and Magic Heroes VI, the way the story is told somewhat backwards is what gives artistic touch to it. Now you do the story how you want, not how we want no matter what the community writes against it.
Yes, I may rushed this chapter too hard, because I started writing it from my notes yesterday evening and finished it the moment I puplished it. So, no proofreading was given^^Are you using a translating software or a spelling corrector program? Some forms of words are just badly placed. This has strongly begun in this chapter.
Okay, that makes sense.About the linking to previous chapters. You could do it for every new chapter. It's hard enough as it is to remember or have to reread older fragments of the story to get the full view of it.
Also, schon Arbeit.
father'slistening to my fathers soft voice
All that was created by Iasa was bound to OR All created by Iasa was bound toAll was created by Iasa was bound to
did not bringthe destruction of Me'nag did not brought
not really sure about this one...she saw the caring of love a mother to her children.
the whole pride?became the whole proud of my father
I don't think "of being crushed by two fronts" works after destruction. Maybe situation or peril (as an example).save our island from the destruction of being crushed by two fronts.
cost (yeah for the past form of the verb)the transport of this mighty and heavy stone costed a lot
soon would be to diehe soon would be die.
official descendant of Ael to bind withfather made me the official descendant of Ael who bounds with the Heart of
Funny how you've put "she" instead of her.I never saw she again.
=/= in; change with no d at its end.people started to changed in their appearance
hurt (past form)It hurted
a bountyI had to raise bounty on
That's grand! It's better to keep all links in one post for the final chapter as you firstly wrote.I also added links to the previous and next chapters for the navigation.
It is not impossible and would make sense for a decreasing community. But it is unlikly to happen due to the immense effort one has to put in.Looking good, are you thinking of implementing AI?
The arena (or s?) look(s) fit for such. Would you include obstacles and maybe even put some bushes that dim sight?What grass do you mean exaclty?