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General Coil

Submitted by Tumostide
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Tumostide Presents

GENERAL COIL
Created by TUMOSTIDE

Map Info


The battle of mount Hyjal ended with Night elfs victory and the world prosper again.
However, the dreadlords Varimathras, Detheroc and Tichondrius fled to Lordaeron in order to summon a new legion of undead.
But this act was nearly impossible because the humans already gather their forces leaded by Magroth the defender.
On his way to Lordaeron Tichondrius has desovered a powerful artifact benneath Nordrassil, which posses a great power.
Tichondrius used the artifact on a Death Knight, General Coil, making him the most powerful Death knights ever exist.
They were about to begin attack but a few settlements was destroyed by humans and Tichondrius and the others dreadlords went to solve the problem.
Tichondrius ordered Coil not to use his new powers yet, and to wait for their arrival, General Coil disobeyed his orders which drives Tichondrius mad...


Features



  • New music
  • 1 Cinematic, 1 Interlude, and 7 Chapters
  • New Skins/ Models
  • New spells





Characters list, Credits and Ghange Log


  • Eldin Livermoor [​IMG]
  • General Coil [​IMG]
  • Sylvanas Windrunner [​IMG]
  • Naze the Eternal [​IMG]
  • Tichondrius [​IMG]
  • Nilas [​IMG]
  • Magroth the defender [​IMG]


Credits



Special Thanks:

  • DarkRanger Alice
  • My brother Marius Pana



Thanks to :

Models/Skins:

  • PeeKay
  • Kuhneghe
  • Sin'Dorei300
  • Telebis
  • 67chrome
  • Tranquil
  • CloudWolf
  • kangyun
  • Saikann
  • Elenai
  • Blizzard Entertainment
  • horusrogue
  • Kapca2

Sounds/Buildings:



  • SinisterX
  • Mr. bob
  • Blizzard Entertainment

Icons:

  • PeeKay
  • General Fran
  • 67Chrome
  • Blizzard Entertainment



Ghange log:

Version 1.2
You can train Frost Wyrm and gargoyle at chapter 3
Grammar mistakes solved
Sylvanas soundset, changed
New model of Sylvanas
General Coil, Sylvanas and Eldin have new spells
Some bugs are solved and I added new screenshots



Also thanks to:


Map Description Template Created by -Kobas-
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General Coil (Campaign)

Reviews
Paillan
Description is extremely lacking, there's no info aside from "death knight something something, Tichondrius something something". What are the origins of this guy? were is the campaign played? how many scenarios are there? The campaign preview is......
Wardota2 Gamer
-camera placement needs to be fixed -your dialogs are awfawl need to be fixed -the names of the chapter are not specific with the chapter need to be fixed -your discription is lacking -General Coil is not a very good name for you campgain I recommend...
deepstrasz
[ATTACH] (forgot about this) Rename the file to what the campaign is supposed to be named not to cool campaign.w3n. Play music through its proper channel not the one for sound. [spoiler] It's an alternate part RoC with no real custom material. Set...
  1. Paillan

    Paillan

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    Description is extremely lacking, there's no info aside from "death knight something something, Tichondrius something something". What are the origins of this guy? were is the campaign played? how many scenarios are there?
    The campaign preview is... MEH.
    Adding screenshots would greatly help people too see your campaign without opening it.

    Set to Awaiting Update.

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  2. Tumostide

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    ok i will update it
    My first map :)
     
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    Another campgain Im gonna test this one

    Some tags are broken and your discription is extremely lackin as Paillan said.lol:p
     
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    -camera placement needs to be fixed
    -your dialogs are awfawl need to be fixed
    -the names of the chapter are not specific with the chapter need to be fixed
    -your discription is lacking
    -General Coil is not a very good name for you campgain I recommend you should be more spicifec with the campgain
    -You should bring more info about the main character of the story like putting a characters tab
    -Screenshots would attract more players to download your campgain

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    well I do not want to discourage you as not many people tend to make campaigns (which I like to play mostly) but please fix your punctuation and its "POWER" not "Pawor"!!.You need to work on your terrain as mostly it is entirely plain but overall as it is a first map I congratulate you on your hard work and hope you fix the problems (add more doodads as it a map look more lively and interesting).
     
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    Lol his right I agree with KINGOFCHAOS the spelling it's POWER not Pawor hahahhah.lol I do notice that and some dialogs are also wrong but I understand this is your first map good job for your hard work!!!
     
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    GraphicsGlitch.jpg (forgot about this)

    Rename the file to what the campaign is supposed to be named not to cool campaign.w3n.
    Play music through its proper channel not the one for sound.

    Intro:
    -the battalion in the back realized far too late what was obviously going on

    Chap1:
    -would suggest letting the player choose the first spell; the hero's abilities are normal Warcraft III ones
    -a rescuable Ghoul near the Castle in the west. Why didn't the nearby humans kill it!?
    -linear level
    -why would they keep undead in cages? (except for gameplay)
    -don't think fighting the last "boss" near the Fountain of Health is a good idea
    -they took him hostage to negotiate with other undead leaders, hopefully

    Chap2:
    -Coil doesn't even know what an elf looks like...
    -this level's purpose is just to have a map with a dungeon and "escape" gameplay
    -there's no reason to keep a spellcaster unchecked in a cellar
    -the elf is also a witchcraft user; why didn't he try to escape sooner?
    -again, why not let the players choose the spells (for the elf hero)?
    -Coil's spell choices have been changed... I chose level two for Life Drain in chapter one not level 1 Frost Nova...
    -where did Coil find a Potion of Divinity :D?
    -Mortar Teams can and will shoot from behind walls
    -the Spell Breaker and the High Elf Lieutenant have the same icon
    -some ramps where the orcs battle the humans are look weird
    -the Brigands can shoot and be shot at from behind the wall where the lever is
    -linear and short level; again

    Chap3:
    -items disappeared from Coil's inventory? At least, the ring was still there
    -how did he get a horse before reaching the base?
    -again.... changed the spell levels I chose
    -somehow, the elves got themselves workers, buildings and hawks! :D And Eldin also reached level 6 :p
    -for some reason, the ally left a Priest in the middle of the road between their base and the blue AI's
    -kind of tiring, this level is
    -brown AI stops attacking after a while
    -better change the victory condition to killing Magroth and the blue castle instead of all the blue buildings

    Chap4:
    -why are Brigands in undead territory? And the other neutral hostile units too
    -Dragonhawk Riders and Dragon Hawks look quite alike. What about another model and some more unit differentiation? Plus, they have the same icon
    -heroes could be green and not teal to make the eyes more relaxed
    -the Castle's selection cirlce is small
    -I don't understand how could the well rejuvenate his demonic energies that were taken away by the Dreadlords; plus the well didn't suffer any damage?

    Chap5:
    -how does he know he will find Tichoundrius in Northrend?
    -although I have a Graveyard, the Sacrifical Skull cannot be bought; neither can the Scroll of Healing and other items bigger than tier 1
    -yet again, linearity; the player is forced to attack Terrodar first
    -I think the level starts leaking after a while; frames/pauses can bee seen
    -Tichondrius stops attacking after a while or there is a big pause between attacks
    -the purple undead had a main building and a Graveyard in the south near (literally) a neutral hostile camp; trolls work together with Infernals...
    -game lags very much when the screen is on/near an obelisk
    -what's the reason for the Dreadlords to have somewhat high damage if they don't even attack; they stand there in the circle while they are being hit; I suggest they become a threat when the player reaches them (their HP under 80%?)
    -for some reason the obelisk zones create graphics glitches (see attached image); how much wind did you put there?
    -silly: why didn't Tichondrius do that before the other Dreadlords had to die?

    It's an alternate part RoC with no real custom material.

    Set to Approved. Borderline Substandard.
    @Paillan if you think otherwise, please do tell.
     
    Last edited: Apr 29, 2017
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    Thank you very much for your review guys i will take care of my mistakes :). I promise that in the future my campaigns will be better :)
     
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    [List of spelling mistake that i want to point out]
    It's spell chosen you spelled chooseen
    It's spell revenge you spelled revange
    It's spell together you spelled toghether
    It's spell between you spelled betwen

    your welcome.
     
    Last edited: Apr 30, 2017
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    if I di
    lol if I did what you did I can go on for quite a long time :D

    though I agree the campaign needs a major punctuation and spelling check
     
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    This needs major and i mean major help from the difficulty being off the charts (I refer to lvl 3) from there being no time to recover from assaults the story is boring it reminds me of twilight movie two but to be honest if you put way more work into it then I can see going back to it and giving it a solid review and a full play through
     
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    You updated the bundle but I don't know what's the changes can you put a change log pls so I can know or we can know what is the changes in your campgain
     
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    Yes, this should be substandard. Grammar is crap, story is not that crap, but still crap, chapters aren't really... interesting, and there is some stuff here that makes no sense, just like deepstrasz pointed out. And description is crap.
     
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    I agree with you the campgian has a lot of bugs like the grammars and the storyline doesn't makes sense put some details about the story in the discription and that chapters names are particular too what Coil needs to do next and what about the terraining too flat for me and can't you add a change log and characters log in the discription and put some credits on some of the models,icons and effects you used.
     
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    Instead of using BElieutenant model and rename HElieutenant, why not use captain model instead or you could find one here in hive there is plenty.
     
  16. Tumostide

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    :) at least I tryed :))
     
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    Try direfury model.
     
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    Story is very unique! Gameplay is very cool, all chapters are great, chapter 4 and 5 is the best. it is worth to put my time on your campaign. Overall, your campaign is very Awesome! Good job! I give 5/5 for your campaign!
     
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    Thank you very much i really worked very hard at it :).I'm very glad that you like it.