General Coil

[Paillan]

Description is extremely lacking, there's no info aside from "death knight something something, Tichondrius something something". What are the origins of this guy? were is the campaign played? how many scenarios are there?
The campaign preview is... MEH.
Adding screenshots would greatly help people too see your campaign without opening it.

Set to Awaiting Update.

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[Tumostide]

ok i will update it
My first map

 

[Wardota2 Gamer]

Another campgain Im gonna test this one

Some tags are broken and your discription is extremely lackin as Paillan said.lol

 

[Wardota2 Gamer]

-camera placement needs to be fixed
-your dialogs are awfawl need to be fixed
-the names of the chapter are not specific with the chapter need to be fixed
-your discription is lacking
-General Coil is not a very good name for you campgain I recommend you should be more spicifec with the campgain
-You should bring more info about the main character of the story like putting a characters tab
-Screenshots would attract more players to download your campgain

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[KINGOFCHAOS]

well I do not want to discourage you as not many people tend to make campaigns (which I like to play mostly) but please fix your punctuation and its "POWER" not "Pawor"!!.You need to work on your terrain as mostly it is entirely plain but overall as it is a first map I congratulate you on your hard work and hope you fix the problems (add more doodads as it a map look more lively and interesting).

 

[Wardota2 Gamer]

Lol his right I agree with KINGOFCHAOS the spelling it's POWER not Pawor hahahhah.lol I do notice that and some dialogs are also wrong but I understand this is your first map good job for your hard work!!!

 

[deepstrasz]

(forgot about this)

Rename the file to what the campaign is supposed to be named not to cool campaign.w3n.
Play music through its proper channel not the one for sound.

Spoiler: rev

Intro:
-the battalion in the back realized far too late what was obviously going on

Chap1:
-would suggest letting the player choose the first spell; the hero's abilities are normal Warcraft III ones
-a rescuable Ghoul near the Castle in the west. Why didn't the nearby humans kill it!?
-linear level
-why would they keep undead in cages? (except for gameplay)
-don't think fighting the last "boss" near the Fountain of Health is a good idea
-they took him hostage to negotiate with other undead leaders, hopefully

Chap2:
-Coil doesn't even know what an elf looks like...
-this level's purpose is just to have a map with a dungeon and "escape" gameplay
-there's no reason to keep a spellcaster unchecked in a cellar
-the elf is also a witchcraft user; why didn't he try to escape sooner?
-again, why not let the players choose the spells (for the elf hero)?
-Coil's spell choices have been changed... I chose level two for Life Drain in chapter one not level 1 Frost Nova...
-where did Coil find a Potion of Divinity ?
-Mortar Teams can and will shoot from behind walls
-the Spell Breaker and the High Elf Lieutenant have the same icon
-some ramps where the orcs battle the humans are look weird
-the Brigands can shoot and be shot at from behind the wall where the lever is
-linear and short level; again

Chap3:
-items disappeared from Coil's inventory? At least, the ring was still there
-how did he get a horse before reaching the base?
-again.... changed the spell levels I chose
-somehow, the elves got themselves workers, buildings and hawks! And Eldin also reached level 6
-for some reason, the ally left a Priest in the middle of the road between their base and the blue AI's
-kind of tiring, this level is
-brown AI stops attacking after a while
-better change the victory condition to killing Magroth and the blue castle instead of all the blue buildings

Chap4:
-why are Brigands in undead territory? And the other neutral hostile units too
-Dragonhawk Riders and Dragon Hawks look quite alike. What about another model and some more unit differentiation? Plus, they have the same icon
-heroes could be green and not teal to make the eyes more relaxed
-the Castle's selection cirlce is small
-I don't understand how could the well rejuvenate his demonic energies that were taken away by the Dreadlords; plus the well didn't suffer any damage?

Chap5:
-how does he know he will find Tichoundrius in Northrend?
-although I have a Graveyard, the Sacrifical Skull cannot be bought; neither can the Scroll of Healing and other items bigger than tier 1
-yet again, linearity; the player is forced to attack Terrodar first
-I think the level starts leaking after a while; frames/pauses can bee seen
-Tichondrius stops attacking after a while or there is a big pause between attacks
-the purple undead had a main building and a Graveyard in the south near (literally) a neutral hostile camp; trolls work together with Infernals...
-game lags very much when the screen is on/near an obelisk
-what's the reason for the Dreadlords to have somewhat high damage if they don't even attack; they stand there in the circle while they are being hit; I suggest they become a threat when the player reaches them (their HP under 80%?)
-for some reason the obelisk zones create graphics glitches (see attached image); how much wind did you put there?
-silly: why didn't Tichondrius do that before the other Dreadlords had to die?

It's an alternate part RoC with no real custom material.

Set to Approved. Borderline Substandard.
@Paillan if you think otherwise, please do tell.

 

[Tumostide]

Thank you very much for your review guys i will take care of my mistakes . I promise that in the future my campaigns will be better

 

[MouMou]

He was choseen by Tichondrius.After he decided to take actions by himself without obeying Tichondrius his powers were taken.He now seeks revange and in his quest to kill Tichondrius he meets Eldin a prisoner taken by the Humans,and they work toghether.Sorry for the mistakes that i made during the dialog betwen characters.

[List of spelling mistake that i want to point out]
It's spell chosen you spelled chooseen
It's spell revenge you spelled revange
It's spell together you spelled toghether
It's spell between you spelled betwen

your welcome.

 

[KINGOFCHAOS]

if I di

[List of spelling mistake that i want to point out]
It's spelled chosen you spelled chooseen
It's spelled revenge you spelled revange
It's spelled together you spelled toghether
It's spelled between you spelled betwen

your welcome.

lol if I did what you did I can go on for quite a long time

though I agree the campaign needs a major punctuation and spelling check

 

[TechnoWolf]

This needs major and i mean major help from the difficulty being off the charts (I refer to lvl 3) from there being no time to recover from assaults the story is boring it reminds me of twilight movie two but to be honest if you put way more work into it then I can see going back to it and giving it a solid review and a full play through

 

[Wardota2 Gamer]

You updated the bundle but I don't know what's the changes can you put a change log pls so I can know or we can know what is the changes in your campgain

 

[Michael the Boombringer]

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Set to Approved. Borderline Substandard.
@Paillan if you think otherwise, please do tell.

Yes, this should be substandard. Grammar is crap, story is not that crap, but still crap, chapters aren't really... interesting, and there is some stuff here that makes no sense, just like deepstrasz pointed out. And description is crap.

 

[Wardota2 Gamer]

I agree with you the campgian has a lot of bugs like the grammars and the storyline doesn't makes sense put some details about the story in the discription and that chapters names are particular too what Coil needs to do next and what about the terraining too flat for me and can't you add a change log and characters log in the discription and put some credits on some of the models,icons and effects you used.

 

[MouMou]

Instead of using BElieutenant model and rename HElieutenant, why not use captain model instead or you could find one here in hive there is plenty.

 

[Tumostide]

at least I tryed )

 

[MouMou]

at least I tryed )

Try direfury model.

 

[DEB1234]

Story is very unique! Gameplay is very cool, all chapters are great, chapter 4 and 5 is the best. it is worth to put my time on your campaign. Overall, your campaign is very Awesome! Good job! I give 5/5 for your campaign!

 

[Tumostide]

Story is very unique! Gameplay is very cool, all chapters are great, chapter 4 and 5 is the best. it is worth to put my time on your campaign. Overall, your campaign is very Awesome! Good job! I give 5/5 for your campaign!

Thank you very much i really worked very hard at it .I'm very glad that you like it.

 

[Deleted member 247165]

This one can actually turn into an awesome set of campaigns. Just played it a while ago and I really enjoyed it, but you gotta fix some issues. They were already mentioned above in the comments so there's no need for me to mention them again. The description here also, might be better. You can find description templates in Hive. 4/5 from me now, looking forward for the next update.

 

[khoing]

I certainly enjoyed your campaign. Things get excited right at the beginning, with your intro cinema - undoubtedly well made, to show how powerful the General is. Like wtf? With such ability, this guy should be on the same level of Archimonde or even close to Sageras the demon lord of W3, just couldn't wait to try out this guy

The story is not superb, but still attractive, though it can be improved again... with spelling & conversation. Those like: You do that & I kill you, I do this & you kill me stuff... lol... It's like 2 nagging wives fighting each other. This's a cruel world, make it cool: "If you ever make such a mistake again, I ensure your punishment will be far more... unpleasant" - Dreadlord to Coil for example. You can ask for help from your friends or some ppl here, cuz after all, we still understand what you were trying to say. Sometimes it just let my mood down when reading lol

The gameplay is based on old school style - which is ok. However, I don't like Coil's spells so much, the most I find it useful is the Life drain as it substitutes healing ability - which is a very crucial one in campaign play, the other 2 just cost too much mana for constant use. You may want to add something like heal/mana regen or unit buff. Also I don't understand why I couldn't train obsidian statue in the last mission (though I met the condition), did you purposely deny it, or is it a BUG (because the Destroyer upgrade is still there, doesn't make any sense)??

Add in some optional quests with some extra items - easy way to make it more fun. Anything: killing a mob, get an specific items...

The biggest bonus of the campaign for me is the new "General Coil" in mission 4. Now that's I call entertainment lol, you did something no one ever done before, though it's just spamming spell, still a lot of fun But the final ending is .... disappointment for me, you don't need to give a troll you know

4.5/5 for your hard work & all the fun I had. Great job pal

 

[Tumostide]

thank you

 

[Michael the Boombringer]

2/5

 

[MnjauTheCat]

Well.. So far the only thing. Sad that the hero was so dependant on the army :''D And that it's such a short campaign, yet it was a good first try Was interesting if anything :''D
As a campaign itself I would give 3,5/5 But as a first try. 5/5 :''D

 

[Warseeker]

I just came by to say this is an intreseting campaign, I played it a few days ago, and I find it enjoyable and fun to play
This had inspired me to continue playing it, the story is quite intreseting, the characters and the terrain as well.
In my opinion, I'd suggest you fix a little your grammar mistakes, but it's not a such thing after all and by the way, in chapter four, it will be nice if you could reduce a little the time length between the waves. it's just too fast, man.

Regardless, I enjoyed playing your campaign, you did an excellent work on it, and I wish to see more campaign from you in the future

Overall : 4/5

 

[DarkSword123]

I love playing campaign like this first times are always a pain in the ass because there are so many mistakes you wouldn't notice like the grammar but it's still enjoyable because of the story i loved general coil for some reason many might say it's bad but i'm willing to go all the way for those who work hard to earn respect from people
in overall : 4/5 nice campaign would play again after grammar is fixed

 

[StoPCampinGn00b]

2/5

When giving a more negative rating, you should explain it. If you can't explain it, you shouldn't give a rating at all or change it.

 

[Michael the Boombringer]

Haven't I?

 

[deepstrasz]

Haven't I?

If you mean one random phrase some 10 posts back.... That's not how you should do it. Delete your 2/5 post and write that in that other post.

 

[Mechanical Man]

Campaign isn't even that bad, but poor grammar and spelling kinda kills it.

 

[Michael the Boombringer]

Always bad grammar.

 

[Negan 2.0]

good but not crappy
0.5/5 .. improve it and i will give you a hell of a 6/5 .. oright?

Improve this and beat turnro and aerobltycos!

 

[Tumostide]

good but not crappy
0.5/5 .. improve it and i will give you a hell of a 6/5 .. oright?

Improve this and beat turnro and aerobltycos!

Man I'm not a good campaing maker

 

[Wc3Bestfanalsosc2]

Hey. Can you create the part 2 now?
i love the campaign
pls create the part 2
i would love it if you create part 2 i love it

and ur a good campaign maker man
dont say your not i love your campaign

Edit:make it voice acted as well i love voice acted campaigns

Make Sure you read this
if you cannot do voice act i dont force you to do it

 

[Tumostide]

Hey. Can you create the part 2 now?
i love the campaign
pls create the part 2
i would love it if you create part 2 i love it

and ur a good campaign maker man
dont say your not i love your campaign

Edit:make it voice acted as well i love voice acted campaigns

Make Sure you read this
if you cannot do voice act i dont force you to do it

Well...I need more time.

 

[WarLord69]

It's actually pretty entertaining.

 

[deepstrasz]

You should really make an informative changelog. I've no idea what you've added this time...

 

[Tumostide]

You should really make an informative changelog. I've no idea what you've added this time...

Well I've made chapter three easier I saw that it was impossible to win

 

[Tumostide]

It's actually pretty entertaining.

Thank you

 

[DarkRanger2]

Not bad, not bad at all.
The story turns and urns and turns without loosing sens ... I like this. You still need a lot of exp for camera and dialogues.

 

[Tumostide]

Yes I know my english is bad

 

[arthas981]

please continue please please so beatifull campaing ı love general coil and eldin <3

 

[Verb8im]

What was updated?

 

[DarkRanger2]

please continue please please so beatifull campaing ı love general coil and eldin <3

Some kinda romance in the air.

 

[Tumostide]

What was updated?

I fixed some bugs at chapter three, I played again my campaing and I saw that it is impossible to win at chapter 3
look at changelog

 

[Tumostide]

I will do part 2. but i do not know how long it will take untill I finish it

 

[arthas981]

I will do part 2. but i do not know how long it will take untill I finished it

Waiting Impatiently

 

[Tumostide]

I will do my best

 

[arthas981]

I will do my best

You are a man <3 ı love you <3