Asian lightning master

[DarkKnight]

Here is a picture of a Chinese guy shooting lightning, please give me some constructive critique of what I should improve, except the lightning itself, I already know that ^^.

 

[Nudl9]

Hmm... more practise? ^_^

 

[DarkKnight]

I know XD .

 

[Pyritie]

Neck and arms are too skinny.

 

[Kimbo]

Yes the arms and most other stuff are just far too skinny and thin, for the arms they seem too long, here is the basic proportions:
http://www.animatedbuzz.com/tutorials/images/proportion04.jpg

 

[DarkKnight]

Ah yes, the neck is almost as thick as the face... I noticed afterwards.. the arms are too long but not too skinny in my opinion... further any things that are wrong? (and I know the right hand is in an impossible way, I also noticed afterwards...)

 

[Naze]

1)Practice - as said above,

2) (Everything that was said above)

3)Head is too circular, take a look at a real head, and try to figure out where you can improve.

4)Try to add more details at his clothes.

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[DarkKnight]

1) I know, and am doing XD

2) are you lazy? (sorry^^)

3) The head was originally made for a frontal view... woops XD

4) The clothes are simple becouse it's a man of disiplin, monks or any other martial artists most of the time don't have detail on their clothes

(And I know that I mis-spelled Disipline (or however it's spelled)

 

[Pyritie]

Just because the robes are simple doesn't mean they don't have folds in them.

 

[DarkKnight]

There you have a point... ... ... how do I make folds?

 

[Pyritie]

You draw them...

 

[DarkKnight]

Ok, how do I draw them in a way that I can actualy see that it are folds?

 

[Pyritie]

Just take some cloth and drape it. It kinda folds funny. And the bottom of it sorta goes in a curvy pattern when looking at it from below.

http://search.deviantart.com/?section=browse&qh=boost:popular+age_sigma:24h+age_scale:5&q=cloth might have some good references.

 

[DarkKnight]

I'll try, looks... possible ^^

 

[Naze]

1) I know, and am doing XD

2) are you lazy? (sorry^^)

3) The head was originally made for a frontal view... woops XD

4) The clothes are simple becouse it's a man of disiplin, monks or any other martial artists most of the time don't have detail on their clothes

(And I know that I mis-spelled Disipline (or however it's spelled)

lol

Well, Py already helped you with the 4th. It is easy to draw folds on clothes... If you fail at the 1st time, you'll probably not fail at the 2nd. But if you do, keep trying you'll get it one of these days

*lol again about the quote*

 

[Sansui]

DUDE
LEARN proportions!
1. the head is hideous: for a side view think of a skull seriously that head wouldn't work in any view. LOOK at SOME RL references or PICS

2. the arms and hands are far too skinny. Are you drawing a stickman? people have bones and on top of the bones is muscle and flesh.

3. his legs look extremely short.

4. THE FACE IS HIDEOUS seriously sit down at a sketch book and draw 50 faces at various angles




There I think that was constructive enough, now keep trying!

 

[DarkKnight]

... Realy, such a post makes me almost want to quit ever drawing again, but being me, I wont XD, I have almost never done anything better than this, the best looking thing I ever drew was my own hand, and it was also bad.. I think I'm just not that good, but please, next time you give someone hints, do it on a more kind way, ok? Thank you.

 

[Sansui]

I did do it kind, if you think my crit was mean you seriously need to toughen up.

anyway, no one is just bad at drawing keep drawing and you will get better.
JUST PLEASE PLEASE do not try to copy manga and anime it will do nothing but teach bad mechanics.

PLEASE look at real life references and try to create realism and figures before ever trying to cartoonize things.

 

[DarkKnight]

I did not cartoonize, I actualy tried to make it even a bit realistic ^^, only some things kinda... went wrong. I once tried manga, too hard for me... and too boring. too much work for only a little bit of good looking in my oppinion...

 

[Naze]

Only work if you get inspired, otherwise your work will suck.

And practice more.

I suggest you to practice (draw) whenever you're bored. That works.

 

[DarkKnight]

I always draw when I'm bored, but I'm always bored at school so it become little drawings made with pen, and those don't realy help...

 

[Sansui]

a pen is just as good as a pencil. If not better to practice with, as it encourages less mistakes.

 

[Naze]

I'm aways drawing at the school (yes, I pay attention to the class while drawing) and that helps a lot. Depends on what I am drawing, I prefer pen.

My "school draws" helps me a lot because I use this logic:

Let's suppose that my drawing skills are 50. I'll try to draw something that requires a 52.5 drawing skills. I mean, you must try to be better then yourself, and that helps.

Because if your drawing skills are 50 and you spend your time drawing things that requires 45 of skills... You'll never improve.
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I'll suggest you to draw something like this, and then this.

You'll never get close to them, but if you try your abilities will surely iimprove.

 

[DarkKnight]

Well, most of the time I can't make detail becouse I'm doing it in courners of papers and that stuff^^. so, I can't get realy good at detail...

 

[ike_ike]

You don't have to draw an entire object every time. It helps if you just focus on one aspect.

1 small,detailed picture > 1 massive blob

 

[DarkKnight]

I sometimes do, but I can't practice anatomy that well, as I can't just stand up in class, look at my arm how it looks and then go sit down again and draw it you know =D

 

[konerboy]

try to borrow a "How to draw manga" book/comic at your local libary that seem to fit what your drawing.

also check this link

howtodrawmanga.com/

 

[DarkKnight]

I once tried manga, too hard for me... and too boring.

Please, read before you post.

 

[Pyritie]

Manga's not very good for anatomy anyway. Best to get a real anatomy book.

 

[DarkKnight]

True, or make a very hot girl strip for y... never mind, XD