The Plague

[Moderator]

11:46, 22nd Jul 2013
Orcnet:

 

[Legal_Ease]

Is it historically accurate? +rep

 

[Wa666r]

Woooooo. There was a lot of grammar problems. Otherwise, its ok. But I say do more work on it. +rep

 

[Palderian]

what is rep

 

[UndeadImmortal]

You should add some screenshots in the description.

what is rep

http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/site-discussion-97/reputation-faq-94520/

 

[-Kobas-]

Rejection won't remove file from the hive, just make thread invisible to regular users.

 

[Palderian]

there will be a continue.Im working on it just give me a little time after all i work alone with no friends.its not so easy.Every think is made step by step.the music is perfect i wont touch it.next part you will see what happen to the boy just give me a little time.If this cinematic is rejected,i don`t see the point of making part 2.About the grammar i`ve just watched the movie again and i saw there is a little bugg when the paladin and the captain were talking ill try to fix it up,but since there is no chance of being approved,don`t see the point of working on it.

 

[Palderian]

thanks for that i didnt know it.

 

[StoPCampinGn00b]

Oh boy a cinematic. Too bad you can't watch these on a mobile device.

Abgm, *cough* spoiler much?

There shouldn't be any extra parts added after upload, works in progress aren't allowed. I may be wrong for cinematics though.

Grammar is a not very good in your description, try to copy how I write my sentences, I live in America and speak good English. (Well not online sometimes).

 

[Tal'Rarity]

Some suggestions, fix the spelling of some of your mistakes.
Maybe convert the kid at the end to a zombie? Afterall Mal'ganis does do stuff like that.
3/5, it was an accurate cinematic.

44 mb!!!!!

i will see why is so big but, sure will be rejcted because is really to much size

edit: my download will be of 8 mins


edit2: music, always music, try to delete the unecesary music and also reduce quality, because 44 mb is to much. i will see it

1) 44 mb is to much
2) bad grammar in many parts
3) just when i was getting penetrated, all ended, what happen with the boy that loose his parents, because he was stand there and it wasnt killed, i feel the history of the boy and the scourge doesnt have that good mix,

voting for rejection

Five words to say to you.

Take a look at this...

 

[Tal'Rarity]

Meh it should be lowered in filesize if he doesn't increase the size and length of it.

 

[Palderian]

Thank you for that and your vote.Im working on part2 from last night i hope to the end of the other week to be finished and you will see and give your appinion.just give me a little time after all i work alone

 

[WolfFarkas]

after re-read i decided to change my vote to pending, i think i wasnt acurate. Not the first time and sadly, probably it wont be the last
1)i think size should be significally reduced to 5 mb - 10 mb
2) fix grammar (example you put "perents" and should be parents)
3) resolve the ending like Dat-C3 said, or dont know something that give a proper ending to the boy history
thats the only 3 things i have in mind, enviroment is okay to me

4) maybe you can put some screens to sell the map

 

[Palderian]

its 21 MB now,sorry but i cant remove more music, c`z it`s a part from the cinematic

 

[PublishedShadow]

well thats a really improve, more than half

now i sugest to reduce quality, music doesnt need to be HQ, it can be HM,

i sugest this tool
Format Factory is a freeware(i wont put a link here to avoid link a questionable page, i sugest to you to look it by your self)
that allows to change videos and audios file type, and in that way you can reduce size
i tested only with videos, for example from avi to mp4
of course there a lot of tools that will allow you to do the same, i only tested Format Factory and is really recommended

if you can reduce 10 mb more by reducing quality of the music it will worth the time to do it

File size really doesn't matter. Since this is just a single player cinematic the size of the map isn't a big deal...

As for the cinematic itself -
-Grammar mistakes definitely need to be fixed.
-I liked the first song that you started with; it had a sort of "epic" feel to it.
-The second song killed it for me; I just didn't like it. This is just me though.
-I disagree with everyone's comments about the end; I feel like it was done on purpose

Spoiler

though the way Malganis doesn't even face the kid I don't understand.

-I didn't like how you had characters talking still after they had been killed Example: *The Necromancer and Paladin*
-You had smooth camera transitions which is a plus.
-I wouldn't use blight in this map as the undead are the ones who created it. Rough dirt would fit better in my opinion.
-Why do the villagers not try to flee when the undead appear? It seems logical from a civilian's stand point.

 

[Palderian]

well they cant protect themselves,but i`m agree ill fix it up about the grammar also from tomorrow,also in the end of the other week part 2 is coming up

 

[eubz]

Creator and uploader indifferent name?

 

[Binsu]

@Dat-C3
Well, Chosen Ones has big size but is worth to play due to the complex systems and cool plot it has.

@Author
BTW, size is now 20 MB but do please lower it maybe to 10MB lower because 20 is still not yet an unacceptable size for a small map, hope you understand. Maybe if you used custom resource, lower those that has big sizes.

 

[Binsu]

Well, if that is only the music, I suggets to him is to further reduce it if it can still be pushed through because mostly small maps with higher than 20 MB is quite unacceptable (just saying).

 

[Palderian]

I`v just upgraded it again.I think the grammar is better now,say your appinion.
About the size well,its because of the music
Disturbed-Haunted
Man on Fire(Movie Soundtrack)
Two steps from hell
Hello Zepp Saw(Movie Soundtrack).
if i have to remove them it will sucks.

 

[Orcnet]

The cinematic is totally a non-wonderwall experience.

I like your effort in adding 3 imported musics here but all of them doesn't really fit to all the scenes, speaking of scenes its quite a mess.

Some of the speakers doesn't look to each other, there movements are cracked and the dialogues is somewhat awful.

Think about it why would soldiers listen to children? there are so many possible authorities that handles people and children, and obviously its the villagers, a soldier being discriminant to an undertaker is actually bad eventhough in medieval times undertakers are reference as human grim reapers they should be scared not angry.

The paladin's dialogue is worse, In warcraft 3 lore speaking, paladin's are the counterparts of necromancers(higher degree they are called death knights) so why would he not know what's the difference between who's reviving them and who's in charge reviving them?

getting attacked by a 4 deadman scene is quite bazaar for the whole village to not evacuate while this so called 'plague' has arrived.

In total, this cinematic needs enough attention in both storyline and scripting. For now please do not continue part 2 but forge yourself with this. I'm not discouraging but its hope for the best.

 

[rahulk]

its 21 MB now,sorry but i cant remove more music, c`z it`s a part from the cinematic

There's a program called AppGeeker that you can use to convert video/audio files to much smaller sizes (among other things) -- You can shrink that by manually set the size of music in its output settings panel.

http://www.appgeeker.com/how-to/convert-mp4-to-mp3-mac.html

And it's easy to use.