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Bump - fixing guitar right now.
EDIT - Fixed. Commencing recording.
EDIT - Fixed. Commencing recording.
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@Wherewolf: why don't you add some reverb to your piece? Verb can make a huuuuuuge difference in how something sounds.
K, I finally got my music setup working properly but it put me back a while
I'm going to request a week extension, I already talked to Watchman about it and he was fine with it
Watchman said:You can take a few hours extra I guess. I don't think Waldbaer would notice.
Theme | Your piece fits the theme very well, you take multiple styles especially from rock and metal genres and put your materials besides each other mainly with cuts, your "random breakdown" is simply the theme presented in an extreme way, very fitting approach, I think. | 15/15 |
Creativity/Originality | You change styles very sudden. This is a way to realize a juxtaposition, but it's not the most original one, too, I think. Your instrumental and vocal parts (including the text) are very varied, though and always know to present something new, especially concerning your solos you succeed in giving each one a special and original character. | 9/10 |
Dynamic/Tonation | Sometimes you just ignore the chords you have, which does not need to be bad, but in case of your piece, does not always work for me. Especially the clear vocals often have a melodic line which is not understandable for me (vocal lines from 0:19 and 3:00 on I don't understand where you want to go). You don't have much dynamics in it, but this is due to the style you chose (for your final mix, you might nevertheless consider to turn the intro before the solo a little down, it sounds louder than the metal part at the moment). In the very most parts, your piece flows well (the hard cuts are again the theme and wanted, I suppose, as well as mostly persuading, so no negative factor, too). | 8/10 |
Composition | I really like your overall concept with a long calm rock introduction (very nice guitar solo there, congrats!) opposed to a metal main part with many changes in itself carrying the challenge's theme to the extreme in the (as you call it) "random breakdown". All your parts are in a logical order and your piece really fills its seven minutes with structure, not unnecessary repititions. Also the text is kinda weird but very fitting, I think. There are just some details, that I don't like that much, e.g. the echo on the piano in the beginning is completely outside the meter and therefore too loud (maybe this is a postproduction issue, but it's too obvious to be ignored, I think). The "random breakdown" is fitting the theme in itself but I don't understand its connection to the piece and the text. | 13/15 |
Conclusion | A very interesting crazy collage in rock/metal style knowing to entertain and structure its whole 7 minutes of length. | 45/50 |
Theme | Your song fits the theme mainly through the different sounds you use. In your piece, things are flowing very well, but this is also because the contrasts are not as big as they could have been. The characters of the different layers and parts of your piece are not too different (except the sound), e.g. the changes in meter don't feel like a big contrast, since the musical character itself does change only slightly. Since the theme was "a very sharp contrast" I cannot give you full points here. | 13/15 |
Creativity/Originality | Your approach to the juxtaposition is not the first I would think of and working with different sounds and rythmical patterns while maintaining the tempo is interesting and a challenge in itself, if you still want to express a sharp difference. Your patterns fit well to each other, but the variation in the musical material could have been bigger and the motives themselves are often not that strong for me, too. | 9/10 |
Dynamic/Tonation | Really nothing to complain here, your piece flows perfectly in every moment | 10/10 |
Composition | Your piece is a round thing formally. The transition to the 7/4 meter is persuading, but the change out of it not that much in my opinion. The problem is that somehow there is just rarely something that really attracts the listener and takes him with it. Most of your piece is a good background, but not very interesting if you listen to it separately. By the way, what do you do with your first motif? It seems to have no development; when it comes again in the 7/4 part, it even sounds somehow out of place and in the end it is alone, nearly exactly as in the beginning. The polyrythmical passage again is not really recognized, it's simply too short to impress and appears to be just another thing that begins and is new and has nothing to do with the parts before, but is not developed, too. So all in all consequence is missing. Probably this is also why you yourself named it "the OMG this is so bad Edition" although it definitely has some nice aspects: e.g. I like especially the beginning and the 7/4 patterns until the motif from the beginning again joins. One just notices because of these inconsequencies that you did it in a hurry in the end. | 12/15 |
Conclusion | A mostly relaxing instrumental rock piece playing with many different sounds. | 44/50 |
Yes, I know this looks a little artificial. But this is what was the result of the part scores which were not the same between the pieces; well it fitted quite well in the end.by 1 point... lol