bounty hunter2's Review on Eternal Glory -Chapter I-
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Eternal Glory -Chapter I- is a cinematic such as many others that deals with the concerns of war. Two brothers are needed in an army to fight the vile creatures who are threating a kingdom. Their parents disagree however they must go, telling to their parents everything will be allright. Will it?
First of all, don't ever mass units and use wind. It will cause huge amounts of lag just as it did on my computer. And what were the birds doing on the barren territory. The bunny aswell, I didn't see the fitting at all. Aswell as the sudden meteor, what was that for? Cool? Not really.
The terrain wasn't much. The barrens and the dead trees didn't seem to fit. The swamps lacked trees better then Ashenvale ones, aswell as lily pads and every other dodoad that belongs to the swamp. More rocks and shrubery. When the camera panned to the temple there were a lot of floating corpses. Then the camera went through a wall or two that should be fixed.
The terrain around the house was just plain ugly. Flat areas and trees, too much dirt tile and not one dodoad. The house had no windows, it seemed more as a prison then a house. The indoor was too cold, lacking more inside props to make it feel like someone is actually living there. And the camera went through the wall and the door, that should be avoided since it looks ugly. On the end there were a lot of floating trees.
I was surprised with the cameras since they were quite fluid. They weren't to fast, either to slow, and you changed the angles enough times. Good job here.
There were some typos: It's calm down, not just calm. And on English you don't need two questions marks like in Spanish, only one on the end of the sentence. (PS: I learn Spanish
) It's not the undeads, its the undead, it has no plural. We must arrive to the city, not we must arrive the city.
Other then that, I can't add much, the cinematic isn't original, atleast not much. You could and should develop it into more, as the story evolves. Don't take this to harsh, rather use it to improve your skills. You should also include some screenshots with your submission and should use VBulletin tags to make it look all nice and clean.
You have some potential, keep it up,
Approved with a 2/5 (Lacking) rating.
PS: Zelda has written some useful tips aswell, don't forget to read that aswell!