Translation Request 2

[Aeroblyctos]

Hey there once again!

I have been making my campaign for four months now. I have already released Alpha Test from it and soon I will release Alpha Test 2. Some of the testers have said to me that the english is bad so here I am: translation request 2. I have couple of texts and if you even can translate one text I would be greateful. I will give you credits at the campaign and also some rep in here. Thank you beforehand.

Here are the texts:

Phodom, 42, born in Michie Village father was carpenter and family was poor.
Phodom's dream was to become dragon slayer. First he was a regular guard in Michie Village. He slowly rise his reputation and in age of 30, he became dragon slayer.
Phodom was excellent dragon slayer: he was strong, brave, friendly and very helpful. He killed many dragons and saved many villages from certain doom.
After the war Phodom quit to be dragon slayer and met Birgitta. They made a happy family with three children: Mathias, Dark and Zell.
Twelve year later after the war Phodom funds are zero. He needs to go work to survive coming winter...

Fradz, 32, born in Nacha Forest. His father was a warrior of the clan called Wolfier.
When he born he was retarted. He had somekind of brain injure. Because of injure, he couldn't speak and he didn't had a name. He were just called "X".
When Fradz was age of 25 he and some other members of Wolfier clan were in hunt. They met legendary Fradz dragon who was dying. Barbarians couldn't kill the dragon because they shame so they healed the dragon. After that, he suddenly dissapeared.
After the dissapear of the dragon some said that dragon gave a present that the X could speak. X's first words was "My name is Fradz". Since, he have been called Fradz.
Only couple of months later Fradz became very strong warrior. He killed many many dragons and saved many villages and other very important persons such as dragon slayers from certain doom. Then he was invited to be dragon slayer, he accepted.
Fradz's dragon slayer career was indeed excellent. He always knew best tactics to win dragons, in other words: he was perfect soldier. However, he had one bad side: his annoying attitude.

Galeoth, 58, born in Terdoom castle. His father was famous dragon slayer. The family was very rich and Galeoth had excellent training from best soldiers in world including his father: Vandart.
Galeoth's father died front of his eyes when he was only 5 years old kid. Dragon killed his father. From since on, Galeoth had promised to be dragon slayer and kill the dragon who killed his father.
He trained very hard and he became one of the best dragon slayers ever, like his father. However, he never met the dragon who killed his father.
After the war Galeoth believed that dragons were not killed to extinction. Galeoth had obsession to find some more dragons so he have been travelled around the world since on. He have not find any dragons, not even a clue.
Now he is going to final trip to Icy Mountains. The only place where he still thinks dragons could be. After this trip, he is going to end his career and start to live peacefully life.

To become dragon slayer person must be very powerful fighter and also have to be master of one element(Fire, Lightning, Ice, Heal or Mystic). Training to be dragon slayer takes 10-20 years.
The dragon slayer's job is extremely dangerous. The main point is to kill most powerful creatures in the world: dragons.
After the war, most of the dragon slayers went to other jobs such as guards. There is no need to have dragon slayers anymore because the war is won and dragons do not exist anymore.

Dragons are the most powerful creatures in the world. They live almost everywher, but mostly in quiet places like caves. Dragons can live very long. There have been rumours that dragons can live even over 1000 year old.
They can use the basic elements(Fire, Lightning, Ice, Heal, Mystic) like human aswell. Of course dragons are far stronger using different elements. Sometimes dragons use more than one element. Killing one dragon is extremely hard, that is why humans need to be in a group to kill one dragon.
Dragons fight with their powerful magic skills, but sometimes thei use their big and long claws and tail.
Dragon owns many special skills but turning into human or merge to human are the most famous and feared skills.
Dragons can easily turn into human or any other animal. However, when they are turned into a other form they are weak and can be killed easily. Only the most powerful dragon slayer can see through.
Merge between dragon and human is extremely rare. It needs the will of both and if they separate human will always die. When they are in merge human is in control, both can speak to other but dragon have the power to separate.
Only dragon can go inside human because they have the skill, human cannot go inside dragon.
When dragon and human are in merge, dragon can heal illness' from human such as cancer, poison and paralysis.

Balgaron is one of the greatest kingdoms in world of Oelivert. It born about 400 year ago. Four little kingdoms join together to become one great kingdom Balgaron.
North of Balgaron is sea of Terra. East of Balgaron is neighbour Saoloth kingdom. South of Balgaron is Icy Mountains. West of Balgaron is Great Swamps.

The war between humans and dragons ended 12 year ago. Many people died and most of them were innocent farmers and other workers.
There is no easy to say who started the war because it has been always on. However, last ten year it have excited and in the end: humans won and finally peace came. But how humans won the war?

 

[donut3.5]

Phodom, age 42, was born in Michie Village. His father was a carpenter and his family was poor.
Phodom's dream was to become a dragon slayer. First, he was a regular guard in Michie Village. His reputation slowly began to rise, and at the age of 30, he became dragon slayer.
Phodom was excellent dragon slayer: he was strong, brave, friendly and very helpful. He killed many dragons and saved many villages from certain doom.
After the war Phodom quit to be dragon slayer and met Birgitta. They made a happy family with three children: Mathias, Dark and Zell.
Twelve year later after the war, Phodom's riches are running short. He needs to go work to survive the coming winter...

Fradz, age 32, was born in Nacha Forest. His father was a warrior of the Wolfier Clan.
When he was born, he was retarded. He had a brain injury. Because of injury, he couldn't speak and he didn't had a name. He was just called "X".
When Fradz was age of 25 he and some other members of Clan Wolfier were hunting. They met the legendary Fradz dragon who was dying. The barbarians couldn't kill the dragon because they pitied the beast, so they healed it. After that, the dragon suddenly disappeared.
After the dragon disappeared, some said that the dragon gave X the gift of speech. X's first words were, "My name is Fradz". Ever since, he has been called Fradz.
Only couple of months later, Fradz became a very strong warrior. He killed many, many dragons and saved many villages and other very important people like the dragon slayers from their certain doom. When he was invited to be dragon slayer, he accepted.
Fradz's dragon slayer career was indeed excellent. He always knew best tactics to slay dragons. He was perfect soldier. However, he had one bad side: his annoying attitude.

I ran short on time, I'll do the others later and also probably revise these..
--donut3.5--

 

[Aeroblyctos]

Ok thanks very much for these! I will wait for more in future.

 

[donut3.5]

Galeoth, age 58, was born in Terdoom castle. His father was a famous dragon slayer. His family was very rich and Galeoth had excellent training from the best soldiers in the world including his father Vandart.
Galeoth's father died in front of his eyes when he was only 5 years old. His father was killed by a dragon. Ever since, Galeoth had promised to be a dragon slayer and kill the dragon who killed his father.
He trained very hard and he became one of the best dragon slayers ever, like his father. However, he never met the dragon who killed his father.
After the war Galeoth believed that dragons were not killed to extinction. Galeoth had an obsession to find some more dragons. He has been traveling around the world ever since. He has not found any dragons yet, not even a clue.
Now, he is going the Icy Mountains, the only place left where he thinks the dragon could be. After this trip, he plans to end his career and live a peaceful life.

To become a dragon slayer, a person must be a very powerful fighter and also have to be a master of one element(Fire, Lightning, Ice, Heal or Mystic). Training to be dragon slayer takes about 10-20 years.
The dragon slayer's job is extremely dangerous. Their main objective is to kill dragons, the most powerful creatures in the world.
After the war, most of the dragon slayers found other jobs such as guards, since all the dragons are said to not exist.

Dragons are the most powerful creatures in the world. They live almost everywhere, but mostly in quiet places like caves. Dragons can live very long. There have been rumors that dragons can live to be over 1000 years old.
They can use the basic elements (Fire, Lightning, Ice, Heal, Mystic) like humans. Of course, dragons are far stronger using different elements. Sometimes dragons use more than one element. Killing a dragon is an extremely hard task, which is why humans need to be in a group to kill one dragon.
Dragons fight with their powerful magic skills, but sometimes their use their big claws and long tail.
Dragons own many special skills but turning into a human or merging into a human are the most famous and feared skills.
Dragons can easily turn into a human or any other animal. However, when they are in another form, they are weak and can be easily killed. Only the most powerful dragon slayer can see through their disguises.
A merge between a dragon and a human is extremely rare. It needs the will of both, and if they separate, the human will always die. When they are in merged form, the human is in control, but they can speak to each other. The dragon has the power to separate from the human.
Only dragons can go inside humans because they have the skill, humans cannot go inside of a dragon.
When dragon and human are merged, the dragon can heal illnesses from the human such as cancer, poison, and paralysis.

Balgaron is one of the greatest kingdoms in the world of Oelivert. It was founded about 400 years ago. Four little kingdoms joined together to become one great kingdom, Balgaron.
To the north of Balgaron is the Sea of Terra. To the east of Balgaron is the neighboring Saoloth kingdom. To the south of Balgaron is the Icy Mountains. To the west of Balgaron is the Great Swamps.

The war between humans and dragons ended 12 year ago. Many people died, most of them being innocent farmers and other workers.
There is no easy way to tell who started the war, as it has been going on for ages. However, in the last ten years, the humans won the war and the world was peaceful again. The question still remains: How did they win?

--donut3.5--

 

[Killface]

I can still see a lot of mistakes in donut's revisions. If he doesn't see them, I might fix them up latter.

 

[donut3.5]

I was tired for these ones
I'm working on them to fix them up but I'd appreciate it if you would fix it up for me.
--donut3.5--

 

[madcat2]

make "as it has been going on for ages." to "as it was going on for ages." because has been would mean it is still going.

 

[Killface]

Phodom, who is forty-two years old, was born in Michie Village. He grew up with a poor family. The family had earned their income through his father's job as a carpenter in the village. During his childhood and adolescence, he dreamed of becoming the dragon slayer of the tales he had heard of.

When Phodom became an adult, he chose to become a guard in Michie Village. He slowly earned reputation for his deeds that included defending the town against bandit raids and from horrible beasts. Later, at the of thirty, he decided to fulfill his childhood dreams of becoming a dragon slayer.

Phodom was an excellent dragon slayer; he was strong, brave, friendly and kind. He slew many dragons and saved many villages when it seemed all hope was lost. After the war, Phodom retired from his job as a dragon slayer and met Birgitta, whom he married. They made a happy family that had three sons. Their names were Mathias, Dark and Zell.

Twelve years later, Phodom's riches have begun to dwindle. He now needs to become the once great dragon slayer he was and earn money to survive the coming winter...

I'll try to work on the others later.

 

[Aeroblyctos]

Okay thank you very much! Especially you Killface! I hope you can finish what donut3.5 started. I will wait couple of days for the text. Thank you once again. I will put credits for you two!

 

[Killface]

Fradz, who is thirty-two years old, was born in Nacha Forest into the great Wolfieder Clan. A severe brain injury was caused accidentally at birth, and Fradz became mentally retarded. He didn't have the ability to speak or retain certain memories like his own name. Because of his inability to introduce himself, people he encountered simply called him "X".

At twenty-five years old, Fradz and some other members of Clan Wolfier went hunting. They encountered Fradz, a legendary dragon, who appeared sickly and dying. The hunting party couldn't kill the dragon because they pitied the beast, so they tended to it and tried to heal it to its original strength. After the dragon healed, it suddenly vanished from the forest, never to be seen again. When the hunting party returned to the village, Fradz (Also known as "X") began speaking. Fradz's first words were, "My name is Fradz." Ever since, he has been called Fradz.

Only couple of months after he had spoken his first words, Fradz became known in the Wolfieder Clan as a strong warrior. He killed many dragons and slew beasts. He saved many villages and other fellow knights, even mighty dragon slayers, from hopeless battles. Fradz soon became reputable amongst the dragon slayers and they gave him the title of "Dragon Slayer" and let him become one of them.

Fradz's dragon slayer career was a most notable one. He was a great strategist and knew many tactics to slay dragons. He was a perfect soldier. The only imperfection within him was his annoying attitude towards others.

Galeoth, who is fifty-eight years old, was born in Terdoom Castle. He grew up in a wealthy, aristocratic family. Galeoth learned of dragon slayers at an early age, for his father, whose name is Valeoth, told him tales of his own deeds as a dragon slayer. Galeoth was fascinated with dragon slayers and envious of their heroics. He was motivated to make himself the most renowned dragon slayer of all time. Galeoth trained hard with the guards of the Castle during his adolescence. Galeoth was not only motivated by his dreams, but also revenge for his father whom was murdered by a dragon in front of his very eyes when he was but a mere child.

When he became an adult, he searched his the dragon who slaughtered his father. He hunted for it through rumors and sightings of the dragon, but they never led to the dragon's location. He finally gave up his search when the war started. He joined the dragon slayers in their quests during the war.

After the war, Galeoth still believed he and the dragon slayers had not vanquished all the dragons. Galeoth became obsessed with hunting dragons to the point that he kills anything that vaguely looks like a dragon.

Today, Galeoth still travels the world in search of dragons. He has yet to find any real dragons, nor has he found a solid clue leading to one. Now, he is currently in the Icy Mountains, the only place left where he believes the dragons could live. After this trip, he plans to end his career and forget his obssesion with hunting dragons to live a more peaceful life.

Accredit me as Bjorn.Ironsides.

 

[Aeroblyctos]

Ok. So I will give credits to "Bjorn.Ironsides" not "Killface". Thanks again! But I still need the text from Dragon Slayer, dragon, Balgaron and The War. Then everything is perfect! Those texts are in first post.

 

[Killface]

To become a dragon slayer, a person must be a strong warrior with a brave heart and must also have a mastery of magic over one of the elements (Fire, Lightning, Ice, Heal or Mystic). A dragon slayer must also have trained under a master dragon slayer. (The training is long and takes ten to twenty years) The training involved in becoming a dragon slayer can be difficult at times, but the most important thing to remember is to never give up.

Dragons are the most powerful and wrathful creatures in the world. This makes the job of a dragon slayer extremely dangerous and treacherous at times. Their main objective is to slay dragons who wish harm upon humanity.

After the great war with the dragons, many believed the dragons had finally been driven to extinction. Since the dragon threat had been eliminated, most of the dragon slayers retired from their duties and found other jobs such as guards. Some still remained weary of the shadow that the dragons had cast and are still on their guard.

Dragons are the most powerful creatures in the world. They have the ability to adapt to almost every terrain in the world, but most of them prefer to live in quiet places, such as caves. Dragons can live for a very long time. Many have speculated that dragons can live to for centuries, even millenniums. Dragons can control basic elements such as Fire, Lightning, Ice, Healing and Mystic. Dragons are far stronger and have a better mastery at using different elements than humans do. Some dragons can even master more than one element. Dragons mostly fight with their powerful magic skills, but sometimes they may use a more brutish approach by attacking with their large claws and long tails.

Another feat dragons can preform is to fuse with a human being. When a dragon fuses with a human, the dragon can choose to heal illnesses of the human such as cancer, poison, and paralysis. However, this is not a complete fusion between the dragon and the human. A complete fusion between dragon and a human is extremely rare. It requires the will of both in perfect synchronization. When they are in their humanoid form (the form the human and dragon become), the human is in control of the body. The dragon only remains conscious through a mental link with the human. The dragon can communicate with the human and vice versa through this link. If the dragon chooses to, he can separate and break away from the connection with the human. Only dragons have the ability to fuse with the human.

Dragons can can also shape-shift into humans and animals. When they take a shape-shifting form, they are at their most vulnerable form and can be slain easily. Only the most powerful dragon slayer who has trained his eyes and mind hard to see through such disguises can distinguish a shape-shifting dragon's true form.

A dragon slayer must always travel in a group with other dragon slayers if he wishes to slay a dragon. This is the best strategy since fighting alone will most probably result in your own demise. Study the dragon's power and the combat tactics he uses before going to battle with him.

Balgaron is one of the greatest kingdoms in the world of Oelivert. It was created about 400 years ago through the unison of four smaller kingdoms. North of Balgaron is the Sea of Terra. To the east of Balgaron is the neighboring kingdom, Soaloth. South of Balgaron are the Icy Mountains. To the west of Balgaron are the Great Swamps.

The war between humans and dragons ended 12 years ago. Many people died during the course of the war, amongst them were innocent farmers and other workers located in small villages destroyed by dragons. No one knows who began the war. All that is known is the war simply began all over the world with battle between dragon slayers and dragons. The dragons won a great many battles in the beginning of the war, destroying villages, towns and even kingdoms in the process. During the last years of the war, however, hope began to rise for the humans. Many battles were won by them and soon the war ended in victory for humanity. However, there is still one unanswered question remaining. How did humanity triumph so easily?

Would someone be so kind as to make sure all the corrections I made are, in fact, correct?