The legend of archimodent

[Moderator]

15:28, 23rd Dec 2013
Orcnet: Map Devo.

 

[Binsu]

First of all, at least this is a little better than your last cinematic because you applied some skills that Shadow Fury uses but still not enough for approval.

Reasons? The name for each characters present in the story is pretty much weird except for Sanjans, it looks decent or maybe good to me but Archimotend and Demonisa looks bad. Archimotend looks like just a name based on Archimonde...

Also, the fight scene was pretty much weird. Their fight makes Archimotend and Demonisa look weak. At least, add some action to Demonisa's part instead of making illusions then backstabbing. The appearance of the Firelord also is too soon and I do not even get it, it just makes the story more confusing and maybe weird enough. And you said in your description here that Sanjans DID got angry and killed the Firelord. I did not even saw that in the fight scene but just saw Sanjans talking then suddenly, the Firelord got killed and a Shockwave missile appeared at its position. Pretty much weird.

You also have many grammar mistake mostly the words you say does not even connect to the following words.

Lastly, your description fix it by describing more of the map but not all and use either Kobas' Description Template or VK's Map Description Generator for the work of making a good description for you.

Overall, still considered as WIP and for god's sake, please do stop posting WiP maps at Map Sections instead post here: Map Development

You can spam any of your project here and better you will get nicer feedback here but in here, is really so wrong because this section is meant for finished maps ONLY. Please do understand that and do not commit the same mistakes again!

 

[mohab500]

Ok fine i just didn't understand how to post it there

 

[Orcnet]

Just press the

on MD and your good to go!