Storyline for my upcoming RPG

[playallday]

I'm in a bit of a hurry so I will just throw the basics out here for now...

The world was ruled by a cruel king who was overthrown by his people.
Instead of being under rule by another king these people formed a guild called the Tribunal who looked after justice and peace. Since then, (Somehow...not yet written) this king has been brought back...not alive, but here none the less. Now the king seeks to restore his supreme reign through his undead legions.

I know its a bit rough...I could have taken more time and been a bit more detailed which I will...but as I said I'm in a bit of a hurry. Any comments? Sound like a good base? Feel free to bash it all you want lol...this is my first storyline and it just kinda came to me as I was driving home one day.
I dont want it to be cheezy...I also want it to be somewhat original. Not the everyday storyline...comments please!!!

 

[aki15]

I think you should make it bigger and, you should take more time on making it !

 

[playallday]

Lol as I said... I was in a bit of a hurry. But as a general base...what do you think?

 

[aki15]

It reminds me on arthas, it's good enough !

 

[GunSlinger]

How does it remind you of Arthas?

 

[Grey Nightmare]

More like Morrowind... :/

 

[playallday]

Really? Thats the story in morrowind??

 

[aki15]

How does it remind you of Arthas?

Because of kings undead force !

 

[playallday]

Sooo....would anyone mind to answer my question? lol Decent base?

 

[Shimitar]

Decent base, yes. The story could have potential but for that you would have to think carefully about what to add next. A rushed bad story is worse than a late good one.

 

[playallday]

Im very torn about what to do with this...I know what you mean. I want something original but cant really come up with anything...honestly I want to stay away from the undead. I dont want a resident evil feel to it lol.

 

[Grey Nightmare]

Really? Thats the story in morrowind??

Well yeah... Dagoth Ur... overthrown. Religious sect of peace keepers known as the tribunal. Undead/Demonic legions ready to retake his 'crown'.

BUT TO BE FAIR, there are thousands of stories with a similar structure, basics are rarely original. It's the detail that makes it special Best of luck!

 

[Brambleclaw]

Well yeah... Dagoth Ur... overthrown. Religious sect of peace keepers known as the tribunal. Undead/Demonic legions ready to retake his 'crown'.

BUT TO BE FAIR, there are thousands of stories with a similar structure, basics are rarely original. It's the detail that makes it special Best of luck!

Gray is write you dont get original stories anymore on the basics. Thats why there is only 7 plots in existance. But at least yeh the details make the story its own. The basis sounds good for a nice little base and a good story line for quests. Which seems like you would be collecting something for power or something to kill the king Good luck with it