Some of my poetry - what do you guys think?

[meatfactory]

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[Stefan.K]

Man, that's nice. Too bad this thread doesn't have comments as other ones. Nowadays people don't give a shit for the poetry or school perhaps.

 

[Tickles]

Yep, they're very nice, but this probably would have gotten more attention if it were in this section where people go to look for stories and poems. That section seems to be in need of activity, anyway. It would also help if at least one or more of the poems were included in the post as a reference before going to an off-site link.

 

[Celaquil]

They are wordy, delicate and carefully planned.
And generally good poems. But not great.

I liked the "Mirror of Hatred" poem the most out of those I read,
because at the final line you get that "oh... fuck" feeling.
but generally they are too predictable, too easy to interpret.

The thing about poetry is that it is a kind of art; many people feel like
they can write poetry, when they can't. And many people feel like they
don't have a clue, when they do. Heh. The thing about poetry that few
seem to actually get, is that they are supposed to be cryptic.

When you write a poem, the direct story told should never be the exact
same as the story you want to convey. "Reading between the lines" and
all that, which is what makes a truly great poem good, it can be interpreted
in a hundred various ways and serve to comfort hundreds of more people.

As I stated; They aren't bad writing, they're just not really amazing poems,
because poetry takes more than "skill", it takes an artistic touch. Your poems
remind me more of song lyrics, really, than poems.

Oh, and, considering there are so many, would you mind pointing us to those
few you personally think is your best works? I'd appreciate that.
Interesting site, though, I might have to throw some of my poems at it.

 

[meatfactory]

They are wordy, delicate and carefully planned.
And generally good poems. But not great.

I liked the "Mirror of Hatred" poem the most out of those I read,
because at the final line you get that "oh... fuck" feeling.
but generally they are too predictable, too easy to interpret.

The thing about poetry is that it is a kind of art; many people feel like
they can write poetry, when they can't. And many people feel like they
don't have a clue, when they do. Heh. The thing about poetry that few
seem to actually get, is that they are supposed to be cryptic.

When you write a poem, the direct story told should never be the exact
same as the story you want to convey. "Reading between the lines" and
all that, which is what makes a truly great poem good, it can be interpreted
in a hundred various ways and serve to comfort hundreds of more people.

As I stated; They aren't bad writing, they're just not really amazing poems,
because poetry takes more than "skill", it takes an artistic touch. Your poems
remind me more of song lyrics, really, than poems.

Oh, and, considering there are so many, would you mind pointing us to those
few you personally think is your best works? I'd appreciate that.
Interesting site, though, I might have to throw some of my poems at it.

First let me thank you for the attention. It really brought me joy when saw activity on the thread. Your critique is really accurate and brought up some things to my attention, like the predictability of some, maybe even all of them. However this entire collection(book) of poems is called "Raw Emotions In Simple Words" so that should explain why they are that way.

It's difficult to say which I like most because I judge each one separately by different criteria - like the combination of words, the phase, the rhyme, metaphors and so on. If I have to put one main quality above all maybe that would be the complexity of phrases and in that case some of my favourites are:

Wisdom of Age

Miror of Hatred - this is the last I wrote.

If I have to point out by originality/idea

Divine Love

My Sweet Shadow

My writing has improved over the years, but I think I still have a long way to go before I start writing "amazing" or "great" poetry like these:

Do not go gentle in to that good night by Dylan Thomas

Invictus by William Henley

p.s. share some of yours