My Song Lyrics

[Kaitech[SanD]]

I don't know if this is the right place for this or not but hey, we'll give it a try and see how it goes!

The Hive Workshop Song

On my first day at the hive a member gave to me, a warm welcome with a few links!

On my second day at the hive a member gave to me, 2 Planned Out Maps and A Warm Welcome With A Few Links!

On my third day at the hive a member gave to me, 3 Complete Requests, 2 Planned Out Maps and A Warm Welcome With A Few Links!

On my fourth day at the hive a member gave to me, 4 Flamed Up Posts, 3 Complete Requests, 2 Planned Out Maps and A Warm Welcome With A Few Links!

On my fifth day at the hive a member gave to me, 5 Green Rep Points! 4 Flamed Up Posts, 3 Complete Requests, 2 Planned Out Maps and A Warm Welcome With A Few Links!

On my sixth day at the hive a member gave to me, 6 Hosted Projects 5 Green Rep Points! 4 Flamed Up Posts, 3 Complete Requests, 2 Planned Out Maps and A Warm Welcome With A Few Links!

On my seventh day at the hive a member gave to me, 7 Paypal Donates, 6 Hosted Projects 5 Green Rep Points! 4 Flamed Up Posts, 3 Complete Requests, 2 Planned Out Maps and A Warm Welcome With A Few Links!

On my eigth day at the hive a member gave to me, 8 Workshop Shirts, 7 Paypal Donates, 6 Hosted Projects 5 Green Rep Points! 4 Flamed Up Posts, 3 Complete Requests, 2 Planned Out Maps and A Warm Welcome With A Few Links!

On my ninth day at the hive a member gave to me, 9 Links To Models, 8 Workshop Shirts, 7 Paypal Donates, 6 Hosted Projects 5 Green Rep Points! 4 Flamed Up Posts, 3 Complete Requests, 2 Planned Out Maps and A Warm Welcome With A Few Links!

On my tenth day at the hive a member gave to me, 10 Anouncements! 9 Links To Models, 8 Workshop Shirts, 7 Paypal Donates, 6 Hosted Projects 5 Green Rep Points! 4 Flamed Up Posts, 3 Complete Requests, 2 Planned Out Maps and A Warm Welcome With A Few Links!

On my eleventh day the hive a member gave to me, 11 Steps To Skinning, 10 Anouncements! 9 Links To Models, 8 Workshop Shirts, 7 Paypal Donates, 6 Hosted Projects 5 Green Rep Points! 4 Flamed Up Posts, 3 Complete Requests, 2 Planned Out Maps and A Warm Welcome With A Few Links!

On my twelth day at the hive a member gave to me, 12 Voice Samples, 11 Steps To Skinning, 10 Anouncements! 9 Links To Models, 8 Workshop Shirts, 7 Paypal Donates, 6 Hosted Projects 5 Green Rep Points! 4 Flamed Up Posts, 3 Complete Requests, 2 Planned Out Maps and A Warm Welcome With A Few Links!

Please leave feedback!

 

[Modo]

It doesn't work very well. It cannot follow the tune of the original and it doesn't flow. You have "On my first day at the hive a member gave to me, a warm welcome with a few links!" whereas the original is "On the first day of christmas my true love gave to me, a partridge in a pear tree." Perhaps if you used something a long the lines of "On the first day of Hive-ing a member gave, posting rules that gave some fear".

I know my lyrics are not much better but the last word has to rhyme with "me". Using poetic licensce, "fear" rhymes with "me". Make sure it flows and it will be a lot better. Overall, it is quite good.

 

[Kaitech[SanD]]

I acctually thaught it fits, I'll count the syllables

On the first day of christmas my true love gave to me, a partridge in a pear tree
20

On my first day at the hive a member gave to me, a warm welcome with a few links
21

Ok, it doesnt fit the best but still!

Thanks for the feedback

 

[Supermj]

WHat about the 13th day?

 

[Modo]

Do you know hot to write music? It is more than copying the syllable count. You also have to copy the rhyming scheme and the stresses. An example of this is Shakespeare's Iambic Pentameter. Every second syllable is stressed. If I wrote in Shakespearean style, without Iambic Pantameter, it wouldn't be Shakespeare. I hope that clears some things up.

Just a thought, try singing it. If it feels the same when you sing it, you know you are close. I tried to sing your song (quielty to myself) and it didn't feel right.

Please know that I am trying to give constructive criticism. If it seems insulting, I'm very sorry as that is not my intention.

WHat about the 13th day?

Since when was there a 13th day of Christmas?

 

[The_wand_mirror]

Don't like it sounds rly kiddy :S

Anyway a song about the hive sucks in any way xD

 

[Supermj]

Since when was there a 13th day of Christmas?

When? Now!
*snaps fingers*

 

[HeretoDLstuff]

Its not very much like a soung but its pretty good for a not-song.