My Day In A Lobbyv1.01

[Moderator]

17:21, 20th Aug 2011
-Kobas-:
Status: Approved
15:28, 29th Jul 2011
ap0calypse: Rejected (until updated)

The idea is good, but it gets a bit boring, it's too plain, you repeat a scene etc.
Could be approved with less penises and more awesomeness.

 

[ap0calypse]

no terrain because its a lobby,how am i supposed to terrain it?

You could re-create the default TFT lobby? Just a little work with images, nothing hard. And it makes it look legit.

Anyhow, even though I did enjoy it partially, I don't think it's suitable to be here.
The idea seemed good, the Dotard, the troll, the newb and the spammer (95% of Warcraft nowadays?) combined into a single chatroom.
But, you know, too much penises, faggots and such...
And after a few minutes, it gets pretty boring. You repeat a scene twice, not much happens, and the new Warcraft community makes me want to cry, not laugh.

Also, why did you convert some of the triggers to custom text?

 

[Chris-Yamaha]

Thank you for including me, although a parody =P

 

[Assassins-Creed]

To make it RoC is why I made some triggers custom text,thanks for the feedback,and yes I know it is repetitive im not much of a comedy guy but I tried,lol.

 

[Vengeancekael]

Time to review this map. :3
Testing...
edit:

Review:

Terrain:
Some kind of a lobby texture image could have been used, but not important.
Comedy:
The cinematic is fairly funny, it's very classic and fits the warcraft chats perfectly. Although some jokes have been overused, the 2 song transitions for example, but the different characters keep their attitude throughout the cinematic, they're all unique and funny. You've brought a lot of different characters together, which lead to a massive troll-fest.
Quality/Polishing:
You have all of the messages correctly colored, no mistakes. Although sudden ending, at least show the credits. (songs used, map creator, ...)
Overall:
It's a nice idea, you've executed it well, not extremely well, but some of the issues can be fixed, for example add the lobby texture image as a background and add a credits ending. The cinematic would've been more hilarious if it had continued a little bit more, but the length was fine.
Rating: 3/5
Why:
*Sudden ending (-1)
*Some overused jokes (-0.5)
*A bit short (-0.5)

If you don't want to read my feedback:

• Add a credits ending (songs used, map creator, help from other users, ...)
• Extend the cinematic a little
• More jokes at one time

Keep up the good work.


Other:
I've also made a new description for your map:

My Day In A Lobby A Map by Assassins-Creed (MetaDeath) About: The cinematic represents a 'normal' conversation in a warcraft 3 lobby. Other: Length - 7-9 Minutes *No Terrain/Camera Movement - It's a lobby conversation Credits: superthundrag@USEast for allowing me to make him a character Chris-Yamaha@USEast for allowing me to make him a character BiGtOiLeT@USEast for allowing me to make him a character Songs Avenged Sevenfold for their awesome song Bat Country Other sounds/music (Peace and Exorcism is from an unknown source)

How to use it:

[CENTER][table][CENTER][COLOR="RoyalBlue"][B][SIZE="5"]My Day In A Lobby[/SIZE][/B][/COLOR]
[I][SIZE="2"]A Map by Assassins-Creed (MetaDeath)[/SIZE][/I]

[B][U]About:[/U][/B]
The cinematic represents a 'normal' conversation in a warcraft 3 lobby.

[B][U]Other:[/U][/B]
[COLOR="MediumTurquoise"]Length[/COLOR] - [I]7-9 Minutes[/I]
[COLOR="Red"]*No Terrain/Camera Movement[/COLOR] - It's a lobby conversation
[B][U]Credits:[/U][/B]
[LIST][*]superthundrag@USEast for allowing me to make him a character
[*]Chris-Yamaha@USEast for allowing me to make him a character
[*]BiGtOiLeT@USEast for allowing me to make him a character
[/LIST]
[I]Songs[/I]
[LIST]
[*]Avenged Sevenfold for their awesome song Bat Country
[*]Other sounds/music (Peace and Exorcism is from an unknown source)
[/LIST]
[/CENTER][/table][/CENTER]

 

[Assassins-Creed]

@Vengeancekael Hey,thanks for the description,looks really nice and it helps improve the look of the map! I was going to increase the cinematic's length but decided not to due to this being a one day side project to take a break from my main project.Thanks for the review,I am actually surprised to get an approved score,it gets my hopes up to keep learning as much as I can (struggle with MUI :C ).Anyways,thanks again.

 

[Arisato]

This is HILARIOUS omg 5/5

 

[Assassins-Creed]

Thanks,glad you thought so +rep.

 

[DUTY OF RS]

Haha realy funny =D 5/5 bro !

 

[StoPCampinGn00b]

Best cinematic EVAR, 5/5 for accuracy.