This Day Aria

[Moderator]

01:45, 6th Aug 2013
Orcnet: lacks map description and do please read my review

 

[UndeadImmortal]

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Anyway,

• Terrain is too poor. Try reading this: http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/...ials-278/advanced-terraining-tutorial-203428/ or any other tutorials about terraining.
• Grom don't fit Twilight.
• The story might be confusing for those who haven't watched the original song video.
• Hive description is lacking. http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/tools-560/map-description-generator-1-2-a-224558/.
• A map preview? (optional).

Original Video:

This Day Aria

 

[Binsu]

Lol, a pony map.

This pleases Undead_Immortal!

 

[KingSombra]

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• Terrain is too poor. Try reading this: http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/...ials-278/advanced-terraining-tutorial-203428/ or any other tutorials about terraining.
• Grom don't fit Twilight.
• The story might be confusing for those who haven't watched the original song video.
• Hive description is lacking. http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/tools-560/map-description-generator-1-2-a-224558/.
• A map preview? (optional).

Original Video:

This Day Aria

Twilight of the Grom is because of this that, as you might have noticed that Thrall groom and how is Twilight was the sister of Shining Armor, I wanted to find some kinship with Thrall and Grom seemed to me to be the most'

sorry for the spelling errors I just do not speak very well English

 

[Twilight]

Seen both videos and they are nearly the same.
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Rating:
-4/5
Stuff to fix:
-Terrain needs a lot of improvements
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Oh and some of you think that I am a pony fan becasue of the name,
well I am not, first I am a boy, I like the map Twilight eve ORPG, that is why I put the nickname Twilight, not becasue of the pony Twilight.

 

[Orcnet]

MFW seeing Grom as Twilight:

Alright, the whole cinematic is very static or should I say its stiffy, you should at least make up a timer of dialogues to blend with the music, really some people can't hear much of the voices nowadays so subtitles are there for a reason.

Since your building up a song video to a warcraft 3 cinematic, it would be best if you can shape up a different perspective yet it still rhymes with the story:

-Candice should be teamed pink well obviously its her, and for Chrysalis she should be teamed hostile or could be passive if you don't know how to trigger a unit to not attack and vice versa.

-Grom is not fitting I repeat he is not fitting, I know Grom and Thrall has a connection like brothers but there are not related, they are more of a slight bromance than siblings, you could actually replace it with maiev-to-malfurion, or tyrande-to-furion(I'm not shipping here) that way its more appealing.

-Terrain view is too shallow, I mean it looks so tight while it doesn't give a good view as a castle and so fort, same goes to the underground area you just spammed crystals on dirt and nothing more, do please read more about terrain landscaping.

-Give the two Jainas some movement they look like rocks in the cinematic, while standing give it atleast a victory stand, attack, spell slam etc. that way they look like they are talking or moving.

-I can still hear the warcraft 3 background better remove it with triggers.

Overall its a good concept, but do understand were not blind, nor deaf. Goodluck