Magma Lord v2.03

[Moderator]

15:52, 21st May 2009 by bounty hunter2:
Use Epicwar to upload such low quality maps, Rejected.

 

[-Sh0ck3r-]

Comment and rate please.

 

[Slaydon]

Umm, its cool but a bit short and spelling errors, and you migth improve your terrain. :d

 

[aaron]

nice screen shot and nice model

 

[Slaydon]

And i forgot to say, that the Loading Pic is bugged, its 2x of Ragnaros :s

 

[HFR]

You used that Ragnaros model? It's an WoW rip.

 

[busterkomo]

Magma Lord is a cinematic depicting a battle between an Ice Lord, a Magma Lord, and two Pit Lords.

The below text may contain spoilers.

SPOILERS

The map started off fast, with the two elemental lords engaging it battle. The characters weren't developed beforehand, so it seemed they were just fighting for the sake of it. The battle's scripting was done terribly, with special effect spam, and boring camera work. For a large part of the cinematic, characters were standing in one position, waiting to be struck by their foe. Having characters dodge a few attacks would've been a lot better.

After the arrival of the pit lords, the cinematic became even worse. Apparently the magma lord is unable to turn around, despite knowing the pit lord has just vanished. I for one, would at least take a full 360 degrees look. He's also deaf; being unable to hear the pitlord running behind him. I'm sure anything that size would make a lot of sound when it moves.

The dialog was probably on par with the rest of the cinematic, which isn't a good thing. Grammatical errors and unrespectable dialogue are not exceptable.

Rating: 1.4 and not recommended for approval.

My Recommendations:
Improve the description of the map.
Remove such obvious flaws based on pure logic. This includes instances such as the immobility of the characters, and the illogical actions of the magma lord.
Improve the camera work. It definitely needs more movement. Because of the lack of any form of character development or worthwhile dialogue, the camera work takes a large role. After all, battle cinematics are about the action.

 

[Septimus]

you re-upload this rejected map without fixing what had been told by me.

1/5 (Unacceptable)

 

[-Sh0ck3r-]

Septimus i know you don't like my maps. but i wanna see other people what they say ...

 

[Septimus]

Septimus i know you don't like my maps. but i wanna see other people what they say ...

Not because I don't like your map, but is because

1) You don't read the rules.
2) You don't fix the flaws upon being told.
3) We have map development and cinematic section where you can get feedback for your cinematic.

This section is not for incomplete work or map that are done at under 20 minutes. Want feedback, use the forums. Forums are not for decoration.

 

[-Sh0ck3r-]

And say again what i need to fix on this map please

 

[Slaydon]

Fix the Screen that is where the map is located, longer cinematic, more living terrain

 

[-Sh0ck3r-]

i dont kwow how to fix the screen.i improve the cinematic now the end is in the fire,more living terrain?

 

[Slaydon]

yea, you just got a big rectangle with 3 different tiles. make cliffs, and atleast 5 tiles.
EDIT: I edited the terrain for you:
Size is to big, and when i take some things down the space go up? Ill figure it out...

 

[Azeroc]

WoW Models are NOT allowed to be used.

 

[Slaydon]

He arent using a wow model, thats just the screen, actually, he is using NO custom models

 

[knight26]

He arent using a wow model, thats just the screen, actually, he is using NO custom models

I'd rether like it with WoW models then No costume models.. :S

 

[-Sh0ck3r-]

Slaydon, download the map now to see terrain

 

[Slaydon]

looks way better now 3/5 Since a short cinematic

 

[-Sh0ck3r-]

looks way better now 3/5 Since a short cinematic

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