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15:44, 1st Jan 2009
Rui: Reports of bad quality. Two 1/5 ratings appear to confirm that. [highlight]Rejected[/code].
Rui: Reports of bad quality. Two 1/5 ratings appear to confirm that. [highlight]Rejected[/code].
(2 ratings)
I did not like it.
-you called it "magic" and i saw almost no magic in it
-In the cinematic were the ships crashes Margret says "...Who i am I?" then in the she suddenly knows here name when that persona asks her
-Tool tips need fixing
-The game says shes a Margret named Kira Star sum thing (forget the exact name)
-Her hero icon sucks
-She recovers from amnesia in 10 minutes, while it is possible in life it don't make good plot
-In cinematic many times some sentences flashed by to fast to read
-creeps way to easy to kill
-Cinematic takes up entire map and is only a few minutes long
-So much empty space
-Main hero starts with nothing, while secondary hero has 2 ok items
leet.firefox and lief1 i recommend you to make your own maps before u judge so harshly trust me its for the best of you...
on-topic: Ill dl and comment latter.!
It isn't necessary to learn how to mapping before judging a person map. That is what I called critique. As long as their critique have valid point and not too hostile, it is fine.
Hmm, I would download and try to have a look.
Here is my opinion after playing it.
The cinematic at Chapter 1 was absolutely awful. All it did was show a boat crossing the river at absolutely slow pace and a character that says "Thank you to xxx author for bla bla bla" and it repeat what it said for the second time.
The shore of the terrain at Chapter 1 have a nothing impress at, it look quite bad and need tremendous improvement.
As for Chapter 2, the cinematic does not even last for 15 seconds. The terrain for this chapter is quite abnormal as well.
I mean, how the hell the ship sailed from ? The beginning of the background was all waterfall from every direction. The main question is ? From which direction the ship was sailed at from the point being ? It seems like the ship have fall off from the waterfall and survive the impact and yet it cannot survive the crash from the rock. lol....
And where did the water from the waterfall came from ? When the background of the mainflow is nothing, but a cliff.
Chapter 3 certainly have a contradiction in the storyline. Madlex called Margret to go to the river to find out who she is. But the question lies here, if Margret cannot recall who she is. How the hell could she remember her name ?
Skill have a nothing to be impress at since it was ordinary warcraft 3 skill, but you did not fix the hotkey for those skill. The hotkey for Bash skill clash with Bladestorm skill.
The Margret icon certainly need to be fix as well, you have forgot to import the dis_btn icon for it or using the wrong path.
Terrain at chapter 3 have an nothing to said either, it was as bad as the rest of the chapter. I mean, come on... How the hell the entire terrain look like a maze ? The scenario supposes take place in real world and the geography should look like a real world and not a maze.
There is an abnormal part in this terrain as well, out of the wilderness area. Just take a look at how you place the bridge.
When the cinematic of the captain speaking to his footman begin. I was wondering what are you doings with the camera when it move to a scenario that have the nothing to do with it. The stories have another contradiction when the knight has been slain. I mean, how the hell can she know Margret was a princess just by slaying the knight ? And the dialog conversation at this cinematic goes soo fast that it was nearly impossible to be read.
Bonus cinematic need improvement as well. The colour of the footman helmet and armor during the cinematic stay at red colour while the footman who was doing the talk was wearing a blue helmet and armor. It seems like you are using the same footman to do all the talk.
You certainly need to fix those typo error in your campaign, there is too many typo errors which are rather obvious. You seem to mistype "cinematic" as "cinamatics".
This campaign quality was way too low to be accepted even for hiveworkshop standard.
1/5 from me.
Chapter 3 certainly have a contradiction in the storyline. Madlex called Margret to go to the river to find out who she is. But the question lies here, if Margret cannot recall who she is. How the hell could she remember her name ?
y me cuz im makeing that the cinamatic scenes dont have a static camera and that to get them to look a little betterWhy sending to greasontim, and not the map-mod, Septimus? >.<
Septimus yes but a critique need to be with a strong point so if someone makes this thing like i did u can defend yourself! And it is NECESSARY to learn mapping to judge a map so u know the basics and the difference between good/bad map.! i mean read & think of the posts above me.
1. See the tiara on the ground after the bandit lord dies? thats how she knows.
2. Didnt notice the footman was red and not blue in the bonus.
3. If you go to a certian place nere the bridge it starts up a 2-4 sec long cinamatic explaining that.
4.Most of the text in cinamatics i can read fast, so thats why i have them on "wait 4.00 sec".
5.Ok... il make it more of a river, il just take out the big waterfall you cant see.
6. English class can gth wayyyyyyy to boring. (I only noticed 2 typing errors)
7. Spells have hotkeys? Like sho actually uses those...
1) There is still a main question, even with the tiara on hold by the bandit. There is no valid evidence indicate the tiara belong to her. It could belong to anybody else as well, this is where the contradiction happen. She could be a maid in the ship or possibly a slave.
4) Able to read the message at quick pace doesn't mean the other could, especially when the text message is in 1 long paragraph.
5) Is not about waterfall, is about the contradiction that occur in the terrain. For example, would you seen a pine tree at desert ?
6) There is more than 2 typo error in your campaign. Use language website to check it out or via dictionary.
7) Hotkey should never clash even if the skill unavailable for the moment. Such a error is simply unprofessional and would just give the player a hard to enjoy the game.
Apart from that, you should have use game cache for a campaign.
1. Ok you make a good argument about that, Do you think it would work if i put another item like "Documents" sayign that shese the princess?
5. Um... I dont relly get how it applys to the terrain around the water fall. Do you mean like that i put trees that look like pine trees on a rocky area?
Whell i personally never use hotkeys because theres to many for me to rember. But i guess if the majority uses them il hafto fix them.
1st cinematic is still too boring. You should tell more about the game, few more typos. 2nd- Skipped captains first line, she just kind of appears on shore. she should be lying down with debris around. Icon still awful. add more camera movement, still bland terrain and abilities, apprentice typo, pause units during a cutscene, dont let creeps sleep, lame document text, add more detail.
Okey I tested it. Here's my advice...
1. First chapter could be much shorter. Now it just says same things many times and it's boring to watch
2. Make better terrain and add more doodads, not only trees.
3. I found many spelling errors. Fix them.
4. Fix tooltips.
5. Camera movement could be better in cinematics. Also some cinematics are going to fast.
6. At first chapter it says that there are lot of cinematics but there isn't very much. Also cinematics were very short and bad made.
1. dont watch it then.
2.Eh when i get time i will.
3.Where?
4.???
5.I barly even know how to make a cinamatic let alone move around everything whell i make it.
6.Bad made w/e, short is better then long 10 min cinamatics, seems like alot to me.
Wow this is my first comment outside my borders! Awesome. I don't really know why did I download this campaign. I mean why this one??...
For a starter (starter?) it isn't bad at all. It looks like my first campaign. Well perhaps mine is a little more advanced (Sunwood Legend series <--- Never uploaded here ;( ). The main problems with this map are:
- We can say there are no custom units.
- No custom abilities.
- No custom items.
- No custom nothing.
- The terrain is filled with ugly 'bugs'.
- You are advertising yourself too many times during the first cinematic.
- The in-game 'teleports' are totally unnecessary.
- The cinematics are boring. You should tell something bout the story instead of repeating contact infos.
What I suggest: read more tutorials about terraining; making abilities and units.
Good Luck!