WOW YOU HAVE TERRIBLE ENGLISH. Next time you submit a map, at least make sure you spell everything right, and it doesn't look like a brainless cow wrote the dialog. The storyline wasn't that good, but you're right, it is very short. Not to mention boring. Well anyways hope you get better, 1/5. And on you're first comment below, it says, "and please comment beacouse i was wondering to make the second part". It should be like this, "and please comment because I was wondering if I should make the second part."