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Clash of the Elements (Current Project)

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CLASH OF THE ELEMENTS
The beginning of a great adventure...

INTRODUCTION



INTRODUCTION


It began long ago. To a land in the east, far, far away; the like of which, you will not find in the world today. There by the Great Ocean lies the city of Aecor. Its markets known far and wide, full of the bounties of vine and vale, peaceful and prosperous; for this city lay before the doors of the greatest Fortress of Solum: Facilis. Facilis, is the stronghold of Xerxes, King under the Ocean, mightiest of the Aqua-Elven Lords. Now, the Aqua-elves' dedication to their work pleased Xerxes well; and this dedication is what makes Xerxes and Facilis vastly wealthy. Ah... Facilis. Built deep within the ocean itself, the beauty of this fortress city was legend. It's wealth lay in the ocean- in precious gems hewn from rock and in great seams of gold; running like rivers through the land.

But the time of prosperity and joy were not to last. Slowly the days turned dark, and the watchful nights closed in. Xerxes' love of gems and jewelry had grown too fierce, and a sickness in him was formed. It was a sickness of the mind; and where sickness thrives, bad things will follow. His countless piles of gold drew the attention of a fire-drake, a terrifying creature that breathes fire and spits lava, with a roar that is like the sound of a thousand horns blowing against a rabbit's ear; for dragons covet gold with a dark and fierce desire. They did their best to defend themselves, but it was no use. First they saw a flash of light, then they felt this immediate, searing pain, then the next moment they were gone. The fire drake incinerated the city of Aecor. It destroyed most of the oceanic kingdom of Facilis, killing Xerxes in the process. Xierxe, Xerxes' son and the future king of Facilis, tried to save his father before his father's death, but Xerxes wouldn't go with him, for he did not want to leave his precious gems behind; As a result, the dragon took his life. The great city was burned down to ashes, and the great Kingdom was no more. Xierxe and a few warriors were able to escape the dragon's wrath, but they will never be the same again- for they saw the fires of death, smoking above their destroyed kingdom. That day he swore to himself:
He will not rest until the dragon falls.

Robbed of their homeland, the young Elven prince and the warriors that survived took work where they could find it, laboring in the villages they encountered, and living on the road. But no matter how beat he was, the young prince always sought revenge on the dragon that brought a once mighty people down low. He never forgave, and he never forgot. The burning vengeance inside his heart was as hot as the flames of the dragon he hated. But this hate made the other warriors fear him... and they left him alone to avoid his wrath.

He was left alone in a distant village- where he had no friends, no family. He figured that he does not belong in this village; for he belonged in the great city of Aecor that lay before the doors of Facilis. After a few days, he was set on going back to the ruins and rebuild the city. But of course this is impossible because he cannot rebuild a city alone. So he finds everyone he could that would help him in the rebuilding of the ruined city. To do this, he sells almost everything he has; his royal clothing, his long sword, and his other possessions. The money he got in return was enough to pay for a thousand men's work, but he only gathered 50 men for the job. Xierxe estimated the time it will take for them to get to the Ruins from where they are is 2 weeks; on foot.

They took with them 30 carriages, which was very expensive to rent, and the materials for construction were expensive too. Turns out it took them a week and a quarter to get to the ruins, and rebuilding the city took lots of time and effort; but they were successful in the end. It took them 3 months to construct a small village, and another 3 months to populate it. Some took their families from the distant village to the newly constructed Aecor, and some decided to invite their friends to stay in Aecor. To tell you the truth, the 50 men that stayed with Xierxe were actually paid a lot... because his royal clothing were embedded with all kinds of gems and diamonds, not to mention the sword he sold was made from rare metals.

Xierxe was growing old, and his fighting strength has weakened. He was no longer the strong elven prince he once was. I had been 60 years since, and he was ready to settle down. He positioned himself as mayor of the village, and the people grew to know him as a loving man. but deep inside him he wanted the dragon dead, and every day since Aecor was reconstructed he waits and waits for the dragon's location to be revealed.




Part I



The Prince Giveth and the Prince Hath Taken Away
... And this is where you come in. You heard of a job that the mayor of a far-away village was offering. You also heard that whoever completes this task will be rewarded greatly, but will require a great deal of courage, and love of adventure. Luckily you have both. So from place from the other side of the world of Solum, you travel through sea and reach the Island Harbor of Aecor.There you met many people, curious of where you came from and wondered if you could help them with some tasks.

After a few days of knowing everyone, the Mayor calls for you and says you must come by his house the the day after he sent the message. So, curious of the reason of why he called you,(even though you were expecting already that it would be about the job you heard about) you excitedly knock on his front door the said day, but no one answered. You knock again several times until you couldn't wait any longer. You force the door open and you find the Mayor's cold as death body lying on the floor, and you were really shocked by this because there was hardly any blood spilled. You observe the room for any signs of a struggle, maybe signs of the assailant's(s') footprints, but you find nothing. The next thing you observe is the Mayor himself, looking about for any cuts, bruises, particular wounds, until you see his tightly clenched right hand. You slowly make your way to his right side, and slowly open his right hand. You see a letter, and a tightly sealed one at that, and wondered what it could be. The prince has giveth, but what hath he taken away?

Out of curiosity (and you were also really curious to find out what was inside the tightly sealed letter), you just had to take the letter from the cold hand and open it. Upon doing so, you realize that Xierxe was actually killed because he held information about a great amount of gold hidden somewhere in the village. You try to find it, but after days and days of searching you found nothing. So you return to the mayor's house to return the letter. To your surprise the cold, dead body was gone, and the blood stain on the floor vanished too.

After thoroughly searching the house, you went to the door to go resume your life in the village, but as you opened it you heard footsteps. As you look out the window to find out who it is, you see strangely the mayor is alive and healthy again. You feel suddenly an odd mixture of rage and happiness, and rush out the door immediately. You ask him why he's alive, sounding confused as ever.

He tells you that he doesn't know what you were talking about, and asks you in reply why you were in his house. You said that you were called by him that afternoon, and you say in response to his question: "why don't you remember?"

Refusing to tell you the truth, the Mayor went inside his house, and asked you to leave. You on the other hand, refused to do so because you were curious to know the truth. This time the Mayor ignores you and does his regular business like any Mayor in his own house would do. Since now you know that he won't speak the truth, you left the premises.

The night of that day, as you were about to go inside the village Inn to sleep, you see the Mayor. Normally this wouldn't bother you but then you notice that the Mayor was walking rather conspicuously towards the village harbor. Tired as you are, you still wanted to know about what happened to the Mayor earlier that day, and also the curiosity of knowing what really happened in the knowledge that you're the only one that knows about the event drives you more to find out the truth.

You approach the Mayor quietly, hiding behind every wall o every house you pass by, until the Mayor stopped. The Mayor positioned himself in front of the ever-burning fire pit near the village Harbor, looking at the stars and watching the birds fly and the fish swim and the winds sail. As you went nearer and nearer, you notice that he never looks behind, in your direction that is, and that he is always facing front and side. Strangely enough, when you reach the fire pit, the Mayor turns around and says hello.

Shocked to the heart, you try to hide your surprise, and you greet him back. You conversed for quite some time.







About the Map

Terrain: 88%
Triggers:50%
Heroes:25%
Items:25%
Story25%
I will add more to the story once the project has made sufficient progress.
Thanks for reading!
 
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I found a bunch grammatical mistakes and a couple inconsistencies but the overrall story is fairly good :). I feel you could extended a bit. It's too "compressed". The last paragraph looks more like a sequence of events than a story.

A couple of corrections and it'll look great.
Just a friendly review. Good luck with your project!
 
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I found a bunch grammatical mistakes and a couple inconsistencies but the overrall story is fairly good :). I feel you could extended a bit. It's too "compressed". The last paragraph looks more like a sequence of events than a story.

A couple of corrections and it'll look great.
Just a friendly review. Good luck with your project!

Okay! I have now edited it and added a part I
 
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