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Date: 2011/Oct/29 22:51:01
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Comment: Review:
Story&Writing:
You've based your map on true events from the past, about crusaders and christianity being spread all over the world, it's nothing original original, of course not, but still really well executed. You also represent the very brutal violence in some of the scenes, like cavaliers killing small children as well.
The writing isn't fabulous, nothing philosophically written, also a few grammar errors, but overall acceptable.
Camera:
Excellent camera work, you can see everything important in a scene, the movement's smooth, but I would suggest is add some really sudden/intense camera movements, like when a cavalier is about to kill one of those children, move the camera really fast to the unit and maybe add slow motion for his death animation.
Terrain:
Excellent work, the village looks very much like the villages from back then, your house model choice is fitting, the footmen and cavaliers have rather matching armor sets, unless they are all made by one person.
The environment is very natural looking, nice height variation, filled terrain with grass, shrubbery, etc.
But I would suggest is make the scene from the beginning of the cinematic where the narrator is talking very swamp-like with a thick green fog. Or just add some animations to the existing scene, like frogs jumping around, people walking past, a messenger running by, etc.
It would also be nice to add multiple environmental scenes in the beginning, because due to the narrator talking for so long, it can get boring rather fast to look at the same shot the whole time.
Other:
Neat loading screen image and preview image, a well written map description as well.
Suggestions:
*Make the transition titles ('two weeks later', etc.) fade in/out faster
*Make the narrator part in the beginning shorter
Overall:
A very well executed cinematic based on true events from the past, a neat terrain, but there's always room for improvement.
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Date: 2011/Oct/29 22:51:01
Reasons:
Other:
Comment: Review:
Story&Writing:
You've based your map on true events from the past, about crusaders and christianity being spread all over the world, it's nothing original original, of course not, but still really well executed. You also represent the very brutal violence in some of the scenes, like cavaliers killing small children as well.
The writing isn't fabulous, nothing philosophically written, also a few grammar errors, but overall acceptable.
Camera:
Excellent camera work, you can see everything important in a scene, the movement's smooth, but I would suggest is add some really sudden/intense camera movements, like when a cavalier is about to kill one of those children, move the camera really fast to the unit and maybe add slow motion for his death animation.
Terrain:
Excellent work, the village looks very much like the villages from back then, your house model choice is fitting, the footmen and cavaliers have rather matching armor sets, unless they are all made by one person.
The environment is very natural looking, nice height variation, filled terrain with grass, shrubbery, etc.
But I would suggest is make the scene from the beginning of the cinematic where the narrator is talking very swamp-like with a thick green fog. Or just add some animations to the existing scene, like frogs jumping around, people walking past, a messenger running by, etc.
It would also be nice to add multiple environmental scenes in the beginning, because due to the narrator talking for so long, it can get boring rather fast to look at the same shot the whole time.
Other:
Neat loading screen image and preview image, a well written map description as well.
Suggestions:
*Make the transition titles ('two weeks later', etc.) fade in/out faster
*Make the narrator part in the beginning shorter
Overall:
A very well executed cinematic based on true events from the past, a neat terrain, but there's always room for improvement.
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