Wolf's Defense XXX 1.1

[Moderator]

12:55, 8th Jul 2011
-Kobas-:
Status: Approved

 

[light bolt30]

Fix up description,lol. Screenshots will be nice with your description.

 

[irock9645696]

Nicely done. Has potential Terrain is like a X. Same rules applied to Vamp zero or smth(too many vamprism)

 

[MortAr]

Vampirism is better, sorry.

 

[TwentyThree]

Vampirism is better, sorry.

its not that the maps better, you should review this map and give it suggestions on how to increase its weak points... not just say "(popular map name) is better then (your map)"
had to say it...
i'll review this with my friends, promise ^_^

 

[Cweener]

Needs Fix.
It looks nice, sure, but add more info to your description.

 

[light bolt30]

Ahh an update, lol @ description still, it isn't aligned Screenshots are still nice and your description can have an elaboration.

 

[AsXurian]

I shall try the game, it sounds promising besides the typos . I do want to understand one thing though, I could not read the red writing all to well. I saw ship and crashed, unless its a boat on water (is it?) they should have tech to deal with a wolf :/ ..........

 

[human-master112]

the Icon is unreadable (well it is for me)

 

[ap0calypse]

Ahh an update, lol @ description still, it isn't aligned Screenshots are still nice and your description can have an elaboration.

The text wasn't alligned because of the map icon (in the description box top-right).
Because of that, it alligned wrong
I fixed it I guess...

Either way, you should fix the spelling first.
I also noticed some kind of bug: when I was heading towards the gold mine (middle left), the gold mine suddenly dissapeared.
I then created my base there, and the gold mine re-appeared out of nowhere...

Additionally, you should make some more unique features.
This is just a rip of all tag-games, there is nothing in this map which makes it stand out more than the others (the weather event is a nice addition, but too minor).

 

[kaninhot]

I update my description and add screenshot
and my map is better than old version.

 

[PetrKubelka]

good map 5/5 +rep

 

[WherewolfTherewolf]

Dude sorry, but your description mangles the the English language in ways I cannot put into words.

I'd post specific examples, but you pretty much messed up in almost every (if not every) sentence.

 

[drakexx]

nice map 4/5+rep

 

[matej]

it can be fun.

 

[kaninhot]

Thanks for all comment!!

 

[Hemske]

Nice with pornadvertising at the screenshot links! You should really start using imageshack instead

On-topic; Semms a tad interesting, I like survival/vamp maps, so I'll test it out and give you a short review

 

[kaninhot]

^^
^^
Thanks to much sir!!
Now. I fix my screenshot to newest version and new host. lol

 

[FrostScythe]

Created by [T]art ; Uploaded by: kaninhot

Lols i thoughht u stole from tart

 

[Crave.]

Created by [T]art ; Uploaded by: kaninhot

Same person? Get a translator of some sort if you arent english-native. I spotted a few grammar mistakes.

 

[kaninhot]

Yeah same person.

I'm so sorry about my eng.
i will ask my friend how to write better.

 

[Icedrake]

Just tell me all the text you currently have in this map with a PM to me. I will fix up all of the text to make it grammar/spelling error free, and then I will reply to you with the updated text. I can also help you make a better description if you would like.

 

[Icedrake]

I apologize for my double post, but since I really quite like this map, I would like to help the author improve it some more. Here's a new description that I made for ya.

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Reveal the description!

Overview

Overview

The wolves have been reborn in the forest. Can you survive?

Created By: [T]art A.K.A. Kaninhot
Mode: Defense/Survival.
Map Size: 116 by 116.
Terrain: Blizzard's (edited by me).
Players: If there are five survivors, then there will be one wolf. If there are ten survivors, then there will be two wolves.

Features

The Survivors

The Survivors

The human survivors in this map are not all of the same class. There are a total of five classes for the survivors to choose from, which are:

1. Traveler
2. Sportsman
3. Engineer
4. Soldier
5. Thief

Each class is different from one another, and this offers variety in gameplay vs. other maps of this same genre.

The survivors also get another useful feature to use in their fight against the wolf/wolves. Swimming. If you are unable to defend against the wolf/wolves, then you can escape into the sea. There is a catch however: Swimming will drain your HP at a rate of 50 HP per second, so use this feature with care.

The Wolf/Wolves

The Wolf/Wolves

The players that play the wolves are also offered a variety of classes (a total of six). These classes are:

1. Strong Wolf
2. Speed Wolf
3. Baby Wolf
4. Spectre Wolf
5. Wall Destroyer Wolf
6. Invisible Wolf

Once again, each one of these classes has its own unique benefits, which allows for different types of gameplay with each of the wolves.

Weather System

Weather

This map has a nice weather system implemented. There are five different types of weather that you will receive randomly throughout your game. These are the five different types of weather:

1. Rain
2. Snow
3. Sunny
4. Warm
5. Normal/fine

How To Play

The Survivors

The Survivors

What you have to do is quite simple. Survive from the wolf/wolves for 30 minutes, or kill all of the wolves to win. You will receive 60 seconds at the beginning of the game to run to somewhere on the map, where you will build your base. Build towers and walls to defend yourself against the wolf/wolves. If all of the survivors perish, then the game is over and the wolves win.

The Wolf/Wolves

The Wolf/Wolves

No real instructions for you. Just wait 60 seconds to be born, and then go hunting for the survivors. Kill all of the survivors to win. Remember though: The survivors can kill you if their base is strong enough, so play smartly. If all of the wolves die, then the survivors win.

Screenshots

Abandon Ship!

The Forest of the Wolves!

Kill Them All!

Build Your Base!

Changelog

Changelogs

v3.3 to v3.4: Type what's new or changed for version 3.4 here. For future versions, copy the current version number (v3.3 to v3.4), then paste it above the current version number. Then just change the version number itself to what the update is, for example: v3.4 to v3.5.

Credits

Credits

Post your credits in here.

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There, everything is done. Let me know of any problems you have. I've been trying to figure out how I can make it so that the forum will display to you the code without any of the actual formatting, but I can't seem to figure it out. I will copy and paste the whole code into a doc file and upload it as an attachment so you can just copy and paste it.

 

[kaninhot]

^^
^^
Thanks a lot!

I'll use it.

 

[Icedrake]

Anytime. Just replace the header images w/ the ones you have (the header images I put came out looking a little weird).

I'll upload a doc file as an attachment so you can view the whole code for the description that way.

I've attached the doc file, so that you can copy the description from it.

 

[kaninhot]

done! so nice.

 

[Icedrake]

Thanks.
I can fix up all of the text in your map if you would like as well. Just send me in a PM or something all of the text you have in your map, and I can fix them up and make them free of grammar errors. That way your map will look much more well done.

 

[kaninhot]

i'll give it in pm [ Notepad ] but not this time.

I have a trip in this day.

 

[Icedrake]

Np, I have 3 free days this weekend. I've got no tests to study for and no homework to do, so I'm free all weekend.

EDIT: Since I didn't want to make another double post, I decided to edit this one. I think the description really needs a changelog so we can see what you've changed, and maybe a credits section. I will create the sections themselves, but you will have to fill the content in for those, since I don't know what you've changed or who the credits for this map go to.

Okay, here's the link to download the updated description: http://www.multiupload.com/SH36CEVDGZ

 

[kaninhot]

Thanks you Vardix.

Now version 4.4 more change system and gameplay!

And version 4.5 i will change all main item system and new terrain.

 

[FriendlyHost1]

decent map, could be much better
2.5/5

 

[Icedrake]

decent map, could be much better
2.5/5

As in how? You should give some more info to the author so he knows what he should improve.

 

[chilla_killa]

Okay, I decided to start here as a map reviewer.
I tested it only alone.

1. Terrain

The terrain is decent, no special imports, but I think good for a standard blizzard terrain.
It's good that you use the raise/lower tool instead of blizzard cliffs.
I also like the height variation.
Furthermore it's good that you have a good tile variation.
My suggestion on how to improve the terrain is adding some doodads, maybe some custom ones of the UTM.
I recommend some rocks and some shrubs.

2. Gameplay

It's the standard Tag gameplay. Nothing special, but fun to play.


a) Cinematic

The cinematic at the beginning is nice, but needs some imrpovements.
Here are my critics/suggestions on the cinematic.

1. It directly starts after the game started
Please first fade out completly and then slowly fade in again and then start the cinematic.

2. The cinematic is much to fast
Slow it a bit, my eyes were a bit overstrained to follow everything.
I couldn't read it fast enough.
Also fix the timing for the fade out filters.

3. Many spelling and grammar mistakes, bad language
Please fix those mistakes.

4. At the end there is only one worker seen, but he speaks to his captain.
I would add a second unit, the captain.

5. The showing of the gameplay in the cinematic is a very nice idea and well executed.
I like that part.
But I would recommend to Fade in and out between the scenes.

6. The sea is very empty. Add some swimming doodads or birds, so it looks more interesting and natural.

Hmm that was all for the cinematic I guess.

b) Human Gameplay

Everthing was building right, found no bugs.
In my opinion the choice of models is not bad, but could be better.
But I don't have specific suggestions, so you can leave it as it is.

There were two things I didn't understand.
What the hell does Baseball do on a Wolf Island?
In my opinion out of context, but it's your decision
What does killing a sword fish do?
I killed some and didn't see andy effect or result.
But maybe I'm just to stupid

Overall good gameplay, but the variation of towers and walls is in my opionion a bit boring. Find some better tower, maybe with some effects.

I couldn't test the Wolfs yet, maybe I do later, maybe not.

3.) Aestetics

All in all the map looked very nice, but there were some flaws, where the quality was very low.
For example many descriptions were just blank white text, I would like to see custom coloured ones.

For some items a different icon, maybe custom one, would look better.
I like that you use NFWars icons already
There were some faulty descriptions of the items, with the colour codes messed up.
You use some icons to show some stats (Illidan Tower), when you pause the game it gets green, because those icons miss the DISBTNs.
I suggest using a different icon.
Ah yes, the icon for the tent is a farm, which doesn't fit.
I know there isn't a fitting icon in Wc3, but I've got one:
http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/requests-341/where-who-can-make-me-icon-tent-158914/

You have many spelling mistakes.
Please fix them or let someone fix them for you.
For example when a worker has died you write:
"chilla_killa's (Sportsman) has die by Forrest Creep"
You should better write:
"chilla_killa (Sportsman) has been killed by a Forest Creeps"

The loading screen is horrible. In my opinion it's ugly and I can't really see what it is without studying it for 2 minutes.
I just would take a good ingame screenshot instead of the this filtered thing.

The description is now good, but please fix the Screenshots.

3.) Coding

Map seems to be protected, I couldn't see the triggers.
If you want me to review your coding, send me an unprotected version of the map.
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Okay, I guess that was all I can say about this map.
I hope I could help you a bit with my suggestions.
I look forward to see an improved version.
If you have questions or need help by improving it PM me and I'll help you out.

Greets chilla_killa

 

[Icedrake]

Thank you for the generous reputation Chilla Killa. I've offered to fix all of the spelling/grammar errors in the map for the author, but I've received no reply from him regarding that. About the description, what do you mean by "please fix the Screenshots"?

 

[kaninhot]

Wait for few hours Vardix, i'll give you now.
and Thanks Chilla Killa for report bad section.

 

[chilla_killa]

About the description, what do you mean by "please fix the Screenshots"?

Well, you have to click on the links first to see the screenshots, would be better if you can directly see them.

 

[Icedrake]

At Kaninhot: Thanks for the text file. I'm working on getting it fixed now.
At Chilla Killa: Ah, I understand. I thought that having full images might make the page slow to load, so I decided to put thumbnails instead so that viewers could click on them to view the full image separately. I will update the description so that it has full images, rather than thumbnails.

 

[Icedrake]

Once again, I apologize for the double post.
Here's an updated version of your text file Kaninhot: http://www.multiupload.com/GOI2L3UWQ4
I've fixed all of the errors that were in it, and made the text look better overall, but there were a few lines in it that I didn't understand, so if I messed up in changing those, please let me know and I will fix it.

 

[kaninhot]

Thanks again Vardix and Update 4.9

 

[chilla_killa]

I'll check it again.
Okay, the spelling of the cinematic has been fixed, but it's still too fast imo and the fade in/outs don't have the right timing.
I now tested 2 other human classes.
The soldier can summon a helicopter
A little bit unrealistic, but who cares
But in my opinion the used icon doesn't fit the rest.
Also the icon for the grenade.
Ah and the helicopter and the ballon had the name of the Water Elemental, I suggest fixing that.

I also have another suggestion:
Add some fog, maybe green one.
Or really change the weather effects, like clouds, rain, sun.
That would make the atmosphere much more interesting.

Keep on improving!
If you have questions/ need help, PM me!

~chilla_killa

 

[Icedrake]

Thanks again Vardix and Update 4.9

No problem, I'm glad I helped you out. Let me know if you need me to do anything else for you, I'd be happy to help this map improve.

 

[kaninhot]

Update X 5.2. lolz

long time no see

 

[chilla_killa]

I'll check it out!

 

[kaninhot]

oops i'm so sorry for bug (Skip Cinematic and Reveal) I will fix it tomorrow.

 

[Icedrake]

Awesome, an update. I guess I'll just get the new update because of the cinematic bug.

 

[kaninhot]

5.5 Work! YAY

 

[kaninhot]

Updated X5.6-5.7-5.8.

 

[Chu]

really a fantastic map ^^

 

[Magnet199]

map seems interesting will test

EDIT: hmm, map is not bad
sorry but i cant give full feedback because i played alone
keep it up

Map is great
Rate:5/5
Rep: 1+
Vote: -