Translation Request

[Septimus]

Hello all, I need all this to be translate since most of it might contain grammar error. Once you improve it, please mark it in green colour to make my job easier. Credit and rep+ would be given for those who help.

Note 1

Kill as many Haosis unit as possible in within 10 minutes, player with the top score after time expired win the match.

-Kill as many as possible.
-Top your opponent score.

Note 2

Kill all Haosis unit, do not let them flood the entire map. If there is 150 Haosis unit before the time expired, the game is over.

-Do not let the map flood with 150 Haosis unit in within 10 minutes.

Note 3

Kill as many Haosis unit as possible in within 10 minutes to top Ralle score in order to win.

-Kill as many as possible.
-Top Ralle score.

Note 4

The game would commence after the host selects the event.

The host has decided not to continue the game, the game would end in 5 seconds.

Cause damage to splash to nearby enemy.

Add On

Note 5

Please wait for the host to make a decision whether to continue the game or not.

Note 6

Kill as many Haosis as possible and rack up to 1,500 points before times run out.

-Reach 1,500 score before times runs out.

Note 7

Congratulation, you manage to reach your target scores before times runs out.

 

[CyberSoft]

Hello all, I need all this to be translate since most of it might contain grammar error. Once you improve it, please mark it in green colour to make my job easier. Credit and rep+ would be given for those who help.

Note 1

Kill as many Haosis units as possible within 10 minutes, the player with the top score after time expired will win the match.

-Kill as many as possible.
-Top your opponent's score.

Note 2

Kill all Haosis units, do not let them flood the entire map. If there are 150 Haosis units before the time expires , the game is over.

-Do not let the map flood with 150 Haosis units within 10 minutes.

Note 3

Kill as many Haosis units as possible within 10 minutes to top Ralle's score in order to win.

-Kill as many as possible.
-Top Ralle's score.

Note 4

The game will commence after the host selects the event.

The host has decided not to continue the game, the game will end in 5 seconds.

Cause damage to splash to nearby enemies.

There you go

 

[~Void~]

Unit's? You mean Units?

 

[communist_orc]

Yup! "Haosis units", their not units that belong to Haosis.

 

[CyberSoft]

true, i fixed that and thanks for pointing it out. I always sucked/suck in English class xD. Although its practically my main language

 

[D a w n]

Kill all Haosis units, do not let them flood the entire map. If there are 150 Haosis units before the time expires , the game is over.

-Do not let the map flood with 150 Haosis units within 10 minutes.

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You made a small mistake CyberSoft

 

[CyberSoft]

fixed it and thanks. Gah im listening to numa numa and im addicted

 

[communist_orc]

Ah Nuna Numa, great taste!!!
If you like numa numa youll probably also luves these babys Secret Song 1 , Secret Song 2 or the live version

 

[3rgytr54]

Notes

Note 1

Kill as many Haosis units as possible in within 10 minutes. The player with the highest score after the time expires wins the match.

-Kill as many as possible.
-Top your opponent’s score.

Note 2

Kill all Haosis units; do not let them flood the entire map. If there are 150 Haosis units (removed space) before the time expires, the game is over.

-Do not let the map flood with 150 Haosis units (removed “in”) within 10 minutes.

Note 3

Kill as many Haosis units as possible (removed “in”) within the 10 minutes to top Ralle’s score in order to win.

-Kill as many as possible.
-Top Ralle’s score.

Note 4

The game will commence after the host selects the event.

If the host has decided not to continue the game; the game will end in 5 seconds.

Causes damage to splash to nearby enemies.

Here you go, four 99.99% corrected, leet 1337 free, notes.

And also, what language do you naively speak?

 

[CyberSoft]

3rgy i think when you put if the host has decided not to continue game it should be
if the host decides not to continue the game.
Yours is in past tense while the statement above is in pretense
EDIT-and you also have "in within 10min." which makes no real sense

 

[3rgytr54]

I took it as two separate statements, both for the same cause. But when I look at the original again, I can see now that it is the "termination" message. There should be both,

The game will commence after the host selects the event. If the host has decided not to continue the game; the game will end in 5 seconds.

A:

The host has decided not to continue the game, the game will end in 5 seconds.

B:

Event (event name) picked!

Ah, my bad I missed "in within" completely.

 

[CyberSoft]

this part is bugging me. "If the host has decided not to continue the game, the game will end in 5 seconds."
Remove the if because we are talking in past tense apparantly. So the if has no place to be there.
EDIT-Also you spelled enemies wrong. there is no such word as enemys. There are also some very minute grammar errors that can be fixed but dont need to. And another part that bugs me is that we put "time" instead of "timer"

 

[Septimus]

If the host has decided not to continue the game; the game will end in 5 seconds.

This is not what I want, if the player click No it would wrote a message indicate the host doesn't want to continue.

 

[D a w n]

Note 5:

Please wait for the host´s decision whether to continue the game or not.

Note 6:

Kill as many Haosis as possible and rack up to 1,500 points before time runs out.

-Reach a score of 1,500 before time runs out.

Note 7:

Congratulation, you managed to reach the score before time ran out.

 

[Septimus]

can you mark what you change in green colour ?

 

[D a w n]

ok added color, but I think there could be done some improvements on my texts aswell

 

[3rgytr54]

Note 5

Please wait for the host to make a decision whether to continue the game or not.


Note 5 is good as is


Note 6
Kill as many Haosis as possible and get 1,500 points before the time runs out.

-Reach a score of 1,500 (removed score) before time runs out.

Note 7
Congratulations! You managed to reach your target score before the time ran out.

 

[CyberSoft]

instead of Haosis(single verb) use "Haosis'" That version is the "grammar correct" one. its like saying haosis units

 

[3rgytr54]

Where?

 

[CyberSoft]

Note 6
Kill as many Haosis' as possible and get 1,500 points before time runs out.

That's where

 

[3rgytr54]

I thought Septimus was using Haosis as a race, or kind like:

Kill as many Americans as possible.

(I wasn't going to offend anyone other than me, myself, I, ..... and a couple million others.)

 

[CyberSoft]

Still the version you used was a single like this
"Kill Haosis" but there is a wide variety of them.

 

[HappyTauren]

Note 6
Kill as many Haosis as possible and get 1,500 points before the time runs out.

Fixed now. There is one HAOSIS. There are two HAOSIS.

 

[3rgytr54]

's is only use when something is plural and ends in s, example:
Jones
Jones's
NOT Jones' NOT