The Risen

[Bugz]

I am gonna subscribe on this, good luck

 

[PROXY]

What do you mean by custom heroes?

Risen? Looks cooool.

Well, just some other heroes than the two protagonists, which can be built at the altar or which can be found like in the rexxar campaign, for example a satyr hero.

 

[indomitable1319]

That's actually a really great idea.
Go ahead! And make some skills, too.

 

[PROXY]

Finally, at home again. Gonna start on the models this evening.

 

[indomitable1319]

Awesome!
I haven't started work because some school things came up, but hopefully I can work on it sometime today.

 

[Orcnet]

hey indomi, are you planning in making up custom units? or any other race? just thinking if I could make monsters or maybe some antagonists if its okay? (

 

[indomitable1319]

Oh, about the race. I've made the race for The Risen.

 

[Orcnet]

how about some enemies or creeps? instead of the standard burning legion, I can make up something that can also be based from them, how about that?

 

[indomitable1319]

I'm also thinking of that, but the player might have a hard time fighting against them if they have new abilities that they don't know how to counter.

Let's just see.

 

[indomitable1319]

Bump! Happy birthday to me.
And as a good notice, would you guys like to see some screenshots on the Interlude? Also, if I feel like it, I might just show you guys screenshots of the fourth map!

 

[MrStormyZ]

Bump! Happy birthday to me.
And as a good notice, would you guys like to see some screenshots on the Interlude? Also, if I feel like it, I might just show you guys screenshots of the fourth map!

Happy Birthday mate!

oh and YES GIME SCREENIES!

 

[indomitable1319]

How 'bout I just re-send the campaign?

 

[Vengeancekael]

Screenshots pl0x C:

 

[indomitable1319]

Interlude. Alriiight.

Interlude 1

In-Game

By the way, from now on, all screenshots I post will be 1680x1050 pixels. At least the In-Game ones.

 

[Arcisal]

First off, I'd like to say...

Open Me!

Now, I'd like to make it up to you by actually being useful in the team! Yay!

I have gone through the prologue and half of Chapter 1. I have found quite a number of corrections and improvements, both gamewise and grammatically.

Let's begin...

Corrections

Correction 1

Why?

The description isn't the best. But it works. Nevertheless, an improvement is always beneficial to something so I suggest you change it to something along the lines of this.

The Burning Legion has been pushed back from whence it came from. Their cruel leader, Archimonde, has been stopped from entering Azeroth and Queen Azshara, their once beloved leader, along with the night elven capital, has been destroyed in the chaos of the war. And for good cause.

But the destruction of the Burning Legion wrought a fiery legacy behind it's entrance to Azeroth. The mystical Well of Eternity as all but gone and Neltharion the Earth Warder has turned rogue against his very brethren, the dragonkin. The Burning Legion may have been cast back into the Abyss, but not with the price of nothing.

Among the many wounds left by the demons, the City of Light (Can be improved to something more traditional) has been left in ruins. All that remains of the City of Light are now left homeless, without a leader. But the City of Light did not receive it's name without a cause. It's people, strong and hardy folk, have resolved themselves with a cause to survive. Already, refugee camps to last the onslaught of the unchecked demons have been made.

Among these refuges, Raven Stryker and Shea Shadowstep form ranks among them. Just like any other day, the duo brought about their already adapted life to the harsh situation, conducting arduous and monotonous duties. But their fate plays games, and with the very last vestiges of what they hold to dissipate right before their eyes, the duo may have to steel themselves before the evil that had changed their live in the first place.

Long I know, just pick and choose whichever you like.

Correction 2

Why?

I don't think there were emergency exits back then. Be creative. Their home is about to be destroyed. I don't think I would be speaking with a clam or bored tone, I'd be panicking. Try changing it to something like this:
Quickly! The Burning Legion is breaking through! Our escape must not be noticed! We can use the Hidden Path to cut through Ashenvale.

Like I said. Be creative, make up names.

Correction 3

Why?

"As Raven and Shea run off to somewhere in the forest, they realize they're getting hungry and tired. They both decide to take a break."

This passage is at the most...awkward. "...somewhere in the forest..." needs elaboration or at least a flair, something to compensate for the vacuum. "...they realize they're getting hungry and tired. They both decide to take a break.". That's not what happen in the quest. In the quest, I found Glaive Throwers, repaired Glaive Throwers, killed undead, satyrs, murlocs, turtles and the occasional frog. If that is by your definition taking a break, I would

• Salute you
• Call Home Defense

Get my point?

Correction 4

Note

By now, you may have already guessed I have loads of corrections, so if I get lazy towards the end, like not provide enough information, then feel free to PM me.

Why?

Oooer...

That sentence is bad. So bad, that it entirely goes out of contrast. It's like in a conversation you suddenly mention something, which can be good or bad. In this case, it's bad. To further clarify how bad it is, I'll give you an example.

Weird Conversation

X: So I was thinking, how about you and me go out for Paranormal Activity 3?

Y: Just the two of us? But I'm pretty afraid. I've never watched the first two!

X: That's why, it's just the two of us.

Y:Oh! X! You're so--

indomitable1319: OMZG! ASDFGHJKL! GUYS! I JUST TOOK A SHIT ALL OVER MY BED! HAHAHA! GET IT? SHEET, SHIT? HAHAHA!

X & Y:

X & Y's Reaction

Yes. It really is that bad.

Correction 5

Another Note before you continue

The following made me fall of my chair in laughter. No offense

Say what?!

Why?

Before you begin...

My reaction upon reading it

You get me, don't you?

There were to many [/hidden]'s and I got confused so here's another box!

Continue by Opening Me!

Correction 6

Why?

This is my moment to shine! After this very two seconds, your map can finally be able to say...

My map is godlike. I am better than you.

Why you say? Before I explain, let me correct it.

You can rephrase the entire passage to this:

Correction

Why? Well, you're in a bit of a conundrum here my friend.

*Next dialogue box*

Know what that means?

*Next dialogue box*

It means you have no choice.

OMG

That was funny but it had nothing to do with the correction

It did, that was

Wait for it

epic

That was all the corrections I have for now. All I have are spastic pictures I took during my game. Enjoy!

Spastastic!

Ghoul Orgy!

Gold!

Finally, my post has come to an end. Hope you enjoyed and learnt something from my corrections!

Good luck to you!

 

[indomitable1319]

Here's an opening picture.

Open me.

As for Correction #1, maybe I'll just use Orcnet's name: Ferodala.

Correction #2: The name was originally the Trade Route, I just don't remember why I changed it. I'll just go back with the old name.

Correction #3: Alright, I'll fix that too.

Correction #4: I'll replace that line.

Correction #5: I'll create a better effect and make the scene more believable.

Correction #6: Yeah, I'll fix that too.

As for the gold, I remember fixing that a long while ago.

 

[Ken-E]

I thought I should give some output. I just played the game, it was great. I would really say that the terraining had the most efforts while everything else was great. The set of characters are likeable and the entire campaign starts fresh. Though I was going to point out some grammar errors but then again, Arcisal did it. Anyway here's few problems.

#1

Should really replace 'girls' to 'sisters', it would sound much better.

#2

*BUG ALERT* It was suppose to allow you to buy units, right? But when I clicked the Ancient of Wonders, all selectable units disappeared. I think it caused some sort of bug when players click the unit too fast or something like that.

#3 Also, the Prologue had that dialogue goes like this "By the Gods", I would suggest that you replace 'Gods' by 'Goddess' since your sticking to the old WC3 lore and night elves do have Goddesses rather Gods right?

 

[indomitable1319]

As for now, thank you for spotting those.
I'll fix them as soon as I can.

 

[PROXY]

Uh, totally forgot the models that I should make for you :O

Full apologize please. If I get time in the next time (uh jeah ^^) I'll try to fullfill your "requests".

Sorry again.

 

[indomitable1319]

It's okay.
You don't have to make the models right away, there are still placeholders.
But of course, placeholders are placeholders, and the real thing would look awesome, especially with your skills.

 

[Vengeancekael]

Any updates on this? C:

 

[indomitable1319]

As for now, the fourth map is under development. It's about 50% complete right now.
I can't show you screenshots, because it would ruin the surprise.

Aaaaand, we still need skill suggestions for Shea. Would you guys mind suggesting some skills that I can actually do?

 

[Vengeancekael]

How about a simple rain of arrows? You could just use the blizzard skill for it C:

 

[Orcnet]

Bump! Happy birthday to me.

oh belated man, I haven't check this project for a long time, might also work with the scripts and character fix and all

also try that Goblin Thinker's second skill, it could be useful

 

[indomitable1319]

@VKael
Well, I want to make everything custom and triggered, so I won't really settle for anything that simple.

@Orcnet
Thank you.
Cluster Rockets?

 

[GunSlinger]

Username:
WE Skill: Trigger, Terrain, Ideas, Lore guy
WE Weakness: Lack of commitment (You know this)
Other Projects: Its all dead.
Icon Wanted as part of team: My avatar
Username Color: LIME!
Username Font: Fixedsys

Special Request:
Can I make the boss fights?
I know I will do great!

 

[indomitable1319]

I'll add you in as soon as I fix the current thread layout.

 

[Ken-E]

Here's an ability idea, its easy to do and I find it the most creative non-triggered spell. This was taken from my map, EchoStorm. Just change the name and description while your at it.

Walking Bomb
Description: Inflicts a target with a powerful nanite machines that would automatically self destruct if its host dies, causing 200 explosive AoE damage upon dying.

Methodology: Use the Parasite ability as your custom spell. Then create a unit that explodes after death (probably equipped it with Goblin Landmines Death AoE), the model of the unit should be an ability, explosion for example. Then set creature duration for 0.01. That way, whenever you use the spell on a unit, it will cause explosion after death. (It's up to you if you wanna give it damage per second, hope this helps)

 

[indomitable1319]

That does sound amazing, but I'm not sure if it fits in with the rest of Shea's spells.
Thank you for your suggestion, though.

 

[Ken-E]

Well, how about Elune's Curse or such. I couldn't come up with better names for a walking bomb.

 

[PROXY]

Inquisitor is nearly finished. Hope you don't mind that I made him a mounted unit?
Anyway, gonna change the helmet most likely (any suggestions)

PS: Name change uh jeah.

 

[indomitable1319]

Well, how about Elune's Curse or such. I couldn't come up with better names for a walking bomb.

It's alright.
I love the concept, though.

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Inquisitor is nearly finished. Hope you don't mind that I made him a mounted unit?
Anyway, gonna change the helmet most likely (any suggestions)

PS: Name change uh jeah.

Now Inquisitor fits the model pretty well. Kinda magical.
Great work!
About the helmet, I was bear head.
But then I realized it would look too weird.

 

[Chaosy]

Username: darkgrom
WE Skill: 3.0 - 3.5
WE Weakness: jass, vjass and spell effects.
What I can provide as a member of the team: Well can do the most triggers in a map expect advanced spells.
Other Projects: Im not in any active project atm
Icon Wanted as part of team:

Username Color: DARK
Username Font: Impact

 

[indomitable1319]

I'll add you in after finally deciding on what the new thread format should look like, I'll add you in.

 

[Orcnet]

another orc member has arrived

 

[rcshaggy]

If you need any testers, I would seriously help you out if you want.

Well anyway I'm looking forward to playing the final project version of this campaign though.

 

[indomitable1319]

Would you like to join now, or play the final version?

 

[Kas]

USERNAME: Kas
WE LEVEL: 2
WE WEAKNESS: Quest-Based Triggers
I CAN: Craft Custom Units, Hero, Buildings, and Spells
OTHER PROJECTS: currently none
ICON:

COLOR + FONT: Green, or Black, W/ AR CENA
PLZ POST A COMMENT ON PROFILE TO SEE IF I QUALIFY!

 

[MogulKahn]

When we can expect final version?

 

[indomitable1319]

Well...
Not any time soon.
School's eating up most of my time these days, and Skyrim's forcibly taking the rest.
But I assure you, this project is not dead.

 

[indomitable1319]

Hello, guys!
I'm back to leave an update.
The project is NOT dead at all. It's just hibernating because school is taking the time I could use to make the maps. I don't want to disappoint any supporter (If there are any).
This time, I would like to recreate the team members to keep everything arranged and in order. Right now, I will only keep the Senior Members in the team, and the rest of the members will be removed if they want to leave the team.
Right now, the current members are GhostThruster [On leave], Fan, and MrStormyZ. I ask these Senior Members to resubmit their application forms and update their information.
Samurai_Gal666, Orcnet, Cryophoenix and Arcisal will be removed if they do not wish to help the project any longer.

As for those who want to help, I direly am in need of a good coder, and someone who can design the dungeons, puzzles, and quests (Preferably more than 1 person to maximize creativity). Also, although it is not that required, I would appreciate a 2D artist to help out to create special icons of skills and stuff.

SUMMARY:

The project is not dead.

To Senior Members [GhostThruster, Fan, MrStormyZ]: Please resubmit your application forms to update the information.
To Previous Team Members [Samurai_Gal666, Orcnet, Cryophoenix, Arcisal]: Please state if you do not wish to help this project anymore.
In need of: Advanced GUI Coder, Level Designer(s), 2D Artist

That's all, and thanks for reading!

 

[Kas]

I can still help out a little
i make tech-trees

 

[indomitable1319]

I'd appreciate your help, though I've already create the custom Risen race.
Do you think that there will be a need for a custom Undead race?

 

[Kas]

i can do something like that, though it will be based on the Human Race more

 

[indomitable1319]

Hmm.
You could make a Human based race then just make Undead equivalents or alternates.

 

[Kas]

Ok then!

 

[indomitable1319]

Alright! Thanks.

 

[PUVer]

Is it Risen?
No!
Risen Here!
http://ru.wikipedia.org/wiki/Risen
And I thought someone was going to do ... my favorite RPG on the engine Wc3...

 

[indomitable1319]

You can make it yourself.

 

[PUVer]

I already do. But do not Risen, and its RPG. See the link in my signature.