-give modellcredits plz
-n u should add sounds to the special effects cos it's a littl silent - but my first cinematic was without sound as well

(but also without special effects

)
the rest was an average first try i'd say even tho it was a littl short and i did not rly get who hits who when why how
most ppl start with arena/fighting-cinematics as their first step i think n therefore it was ok =) (even tho i dont like arena-cinematics too much)
so everything was ok n u should improve everything as well (watch other cinematics/read comments to get what you could improve)
keywords: camerawork, sound, terrain, story/characters developement
=> first try goes 3/5 =)
PS: now u'll have to watch my latest cinematic ;D