Well, the cinematic is too short. I know, I know, I make long cinematics, but I'm not comparing to that. I mean it is generally too short. Cinematics are on average around five minutes. This was two minutes or something, right?
Anyway, there are some spelling errors. You misspelled forest as "florest" in the loading screen, title and description. You also have a lot of other spelling/grammar errors.
The terrain is alright, you have some tile variation, a few doodads, a humble but cute camp, but it still could use some improvement. Maybe add some height variation?
You had some camera movement but at some parts it completely stood still. You might want to work on that more.
The story itself... well, I can't say too much about it as it was really too short. If you want to create a good story you'll need to add some small talk so the viewer can meet the characters and get to like/dislike them.
Now, the screenplay. I've already mentioned the spelling/grammar errors, but you also use
Cinematic - Send transmission to (All players) from Villager (Male) 0002 <gen> named Joshua: Play No sound and display Let's go!. Modify duration: Add 0.00 seconds and Wait
See the bolded Add? Well, you should always use Set To and set the duration next to it. Some of the sentences, like Let's Go last for five seconds which is annoying and slow. Definitely change that.
You also can't say stuff like "Hey look this sound..." it's both grammatically incorrect and illogical. I mean, you can't look at sound...
I don't know what world this story is situated in, but if that world is Earth, or is based on Earth you might want to put a smaller wolf. It was bigger than the villagers while standing on four legs. Big wolfs on Earth are a little bigger than most humans when they stand on two legs, so... and purple really isn't natural.
All in all, for a first, it's not half bad. But I would really be able to judge it better if it was at least twice the length.
