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16:32, 18th Jan 2010
ap0calypse: Approved
Great prologue.
Good terrain, good story and I couldn't detect any typo's.
Congratulations with your first map!
Update: Re-moderating with review and rating!
ap0calypse: Approved
Great prologue.
Good terrain, good story and I couldn't detect any typo's.
Congratulations with your first map!
Update: Re-moderating with review and rating!
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Overall I was quite impressed with your first work, your managed to deliver a cinematic that is enjoyable, and even tho it is not something we haven't seen before, it was refreshing in it's own way. Terrain and Environment With some parts I was quite enthusiast with other perhaps a little less, it felt a bit as if you did not divide your energy equally over all your terrain, however globally I would say a job well done. The things I'd say you should keep in mind are is the town you made, even tho it felt like a village, I think you could have worked this out a bit further, make distinct roads. Camera and Cinematic Handling Your camera work was neat, keep in mind with emotional scene's to use somewhat more shorter distant clips instead of the camera's that were relatively far off the actual character; I did like the camera from the top and him looking up (very slick). Try to toy around with with different camera speeds tho, most of the camera motion tween were relative to one another. I absolute loved your fade white to the air and fading back into the cloudy background where the title appeared, lovely choice. Other than that, your cinematic dialogue looked quite proper, so that was good, neither too fast or too slow. Story and Character building Even tho your story was quite strong, I felt that the introduction was somewhat cliche, with someone being having to escape cause they want to execute him, come back, find out his parents are dead, and wants to seek revenge (Gladiator for example), so I am dire to see the rest of your cinematic, that twist behind the reason of his fathers execution was nicely worked out tho. The character build was still rather small, I found Lina not exciting at all, trying to be mystique, but which she wasn't again either. Chase is still a rather blunt guy, neither very explosive, very calm, just basic, try to work on his attributes (what makes him distinct, what makes you say, yes this is chase, without even seeing him or pronouncing his name) Animation, (inter)action and effects This is probably a factor that you did not really take into account when you were making this cinematic (might be speculating here), but it's often a forgotten attribute in a cinematic, yet a vital one. A couple of examples with Animation, and interactions
Overall I liked the music that you used, the switched between one track and the next could have been done better. Try toying around with making custom fade filters via triggers or use a software device in which you can let them blend into one another if needed. In conclusion I can definitely say that this stands out with most of the series their first work, nearly gets to the quality of what Zurg and Deamonkillar made, quality wise. I am going to rate it with a 3.9 and vote a 4.0. Keep up the spirit. |