The Order Of The Wolf (TOOTW)

[warman45]

Recently i tried creating a renaissance strategy game based on europa universallis 3. I encountered steep resistance (mainly my inabillity to program Jass and create the map in the detail i wanted.) lead to that project being put on hold (i may start it again after this however this looks more promising.)

So i have begun creation on this new campaighn. I already have a prologue and am begining to work on the 1st map. the prologue is short and has no credits. all of these are coming soon, however i wished for some input into the cinematic while it is still easy to edit.

STORY: I won't get into to much detail but basically this campaighn covers the adventures of a farmer named Sam Wolffang, he lives just outside the village of Bern? (i'm pretty shure i need a new name for this little village.) many of the place names will have wolf/warewolf style names due to the heavy presence in that area (compared to other areas on the world) this is not based on any alternate reallity that i have ever seen, so all new ideas are welcome.
during the farmers adventures more is revealed on Lycanthropy (or the version revealed in the campaighn) and on the lives of the main characters. as well as the Order Of The Wolf that is rumored to help warewolves overcome their affliction.

Progress: at this point the only map good enough to show is the prologue. for simplicity i will just upload the campaighn wich should work just fine. keep in mind all i want is to get to a demo version that is reasonably acceptable (and approvable.) i will continue on this project hopefullly at an accellerated rate (because i have no life.) but no garantees.

KEEP IN MIND I HAVE NOT ADDED CREDITS YET (mainly because i only used the warewolf model.) I WILL DEFFINATELY GIVE CREDIT TO EVERYONE I STEAL..... I mean BORROW from. that's all i can think of for now. we'll time for the onslaught.

 

[Turilli]

You're going to need to put much more effort into things. This seems very rushed.

A list of problems off of the top of my head

-Nearly every line has grammatical error and spelling issues. Clean this up.
-The camera work is poor. The few times it does change, things obscure its vision.
-The music does not compliment the atmosphere, especially in the beginning.
-The sounds are not loud enough. I barely heard that woman dying, and I'm sure the majority of the players will miss it.
-I couldn't tell what happened. One eventful thing happened in that entire scenario. I couldn't even tell what it was. It showed a red blob for a split second. That's all I could gather.
-Your character names are really humorous. I can't take it seriously when I night elf comes in, named something like "Wolfheart Moonsong." Don't create all your names by combining two mythical sounding words. That's WoWsyndrome.
-It's really boring. Like I said. Nothing happens at all. A woman dies. A red thing shows up for half a second. A guy gets captured for a few seconds. One knight comes in and like 30 night elves run away from him. Then the camera follows the guy and gets obscured by trees the entire time.

There's a lot more things, but I just don't have the time to make a laundry list for ya. Just try harder.