[Cinematic] Please help!

[Blackhoof]

After my first cinematic was so thoroughly rejected (rated 2.5 out of 5) i realised that im no good at cinematics.

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This is the map. Its bad, i know, right? I thought it was fine, but, oh well. Now, i would really like some tips on how to improve it. If anyone can help me, i would really appreciate it, please.

Btw, if im not allowed to do this, please tell me, because i couldnt find any rule that said i couldnt. ok.

 

[LordKalla]

This is a review made by LordKalla. I hope you appreciate it

The Wheel of Time is made by Blackhoof. Its inspired of a book that i havent read, but i will review the cinematic anyways.

[/] The grammer was not very bad, but there were some misspellings here and there.
[-] The Healing Wave spell sound kept on going forever in the rest of the cinematic! Fix this, its annoying.
[-] The Camera was way too static. No movement at all, which made the scenes unattractive to watch.
[-] There was little to no tile variation. It made the terrain boring to look at. Also smooth the hills and stay away from Blizzard Cliffs. They look very bad.
[-] In the first scene, it looked like you just spammed 1 type of house, which also ruined the terrain. Try making a city instead of just the same houses on a line with no tile or height variation

All in all you need to fix all the red things before i would like to approve this. Thank you for reading

 

[Vengeancekael]

• The camera should always be moving
• The camera angles are bad, fix them
• The terrain is empty
• Don't use blizzard cliffs, use the heighten tool
• Stop the healing ray sounds when the spell is finished
• The terrain is flat at some points
• A few typos
• Don't spam cinematic effects
• Use the Ultimate terraining map to make beautiful landscapes etc with thousands of custom doodads/models
• Add custom music, a cinematic can be as big as you want

Do the things I've mentioned above and it may become a little better. Below is the ultimate terraining map.

 

[LordKalla]

And remember you can always use the custom music from the Music section on this site

 

[Blackhoof]

thanks! Did you understand everything that happened? were there things that i should make clearer?

 

[Vengeancekael]

No, I didn't have any problems understanding the story.