Paths

[brad.dude03]

A bit of... I don't know what that came to me just now. Critique appreciated.

Paths:

I walk unseen
In lands far from comprehension
I don't need your attention
You can let your mind wander
For I walk unseen,
under darkness
through your mind
You don't need to wander
That job is mine
I don't need your attention
Pray, save it for something else
I tread unnoticed
Save from unseen eyes
Those I flee from,
cannot be stopped
Down these paths I wander,
Through your minds eye.

 

[Elenai]

Nice choice of vocabulary, and while I prefer flowing poetry, this monologue as I would call it, is nicely made.

 

[Naze]

That's cool.

 

[I)eadnerzhul]

Tis' the awesomeness that only brad could create! Well done!