This great warrior was once a human death hunter. While ona quest with his comrads, he came upon a well of blood, greedily, he drank the blood to make him more powerful. He was instantly knocked into a state of uncoscisnous, as he awoke 400 years later, he was a submerged her between a troll, and a Death hunter
Wow...this is....uh something. He's about as demonic and evil as a box full of kittens. If I saw this coming at me, I'd just bust his skinny ankles out and it'd be all over. Remove the ninja mask, the little white skull, and make him beefier. As is I give it a 2 out 5. Keep trying and you can easily get a 4. And work on your english when telling a story.
That is all.
We now return you to your regularly scheduled flaming.