End of Time(improved)

[Sephiyr]

^^ Improved, hopefully it'll be better than the other o.0

It is the end of all time
To lose the power,the hope
To be so unreal
It is the birth of all time
To have what I lost
This life unforgiven
It will end with death.

No we're too weak for this once
Another black star will fall again
And its only because we failed

Devils they fell first but Im still here
Withering in pity as they draw near
In hell my masterpiece shall be forgotten

It is the end of all time
To lose the power,the hope
To be so unreal

Greed is the deer that leaps highest
And my hunger its gone so deep
Turn off the light and let me pull out the life

It is the end of all time
To lose the power,the hope
To be so unreal
It is the birth of all time
To have what I lost
This life unforgiven
It will end with death

Death without a face
Life without a prayer
End of love
End of time
End of hope
And the time to rest is silenced(x2)

It is the end of all time
To lose the power,the hope
To be so unreal

It is the birth of all time
To have what I lost
This life unforgiven
It will end with death

It is the end of all time.
To lose the power,the hope

End of all time.

 

[Gausslander]

Song goes between end and beginning of time way too much! Fix that, make the end rhyme with something, like bend or send. Unreal doesn't rhyme with anything, fix that too. Not only that, but the End of all time is kind of a weird subject to base your song off of.

 

[JarrardKO]

Unreal rhymes with;

Bananna peel, Sex appeal, Happy meal, Fat seal, Done deal...

Eh, that's all I can think of. Your song is ok, still don't see the time element though. I only made out the being scared of demons part.

 

[iCrayon]

You do know....real songs can take up to a full year to right. Don't think most artists write songs in 10min >.>

 

[Gausslander]

Here's an example of rhyming that you can work off of:
Their swords are mighty
Our bows are steady
Their axes are sharp
Our men are ready
Their spears are long
Our men are strong
Their men aren't tall
We'll kill them all!
-The book of Scythe Mastery
There, that rhymes.

 

[1)ark_NiTe]

You do know....real songs can take up to a full year to right. Don't think most artists write songs in 10min >.>

Actually many artists do write songs in 10 minutes, especially when they're in the studio with a deadline. Lyrics for songs would never take up to a year to write, lets be realistic here. The most it ever takes me to write lyrics is MAYBE two weeks. Someone with actual talent who can sit down and write a good song will not take long at all.

 

[The_wand_mirror]

I inspire my lyrics from real life now, i would like to mix cruelty together with reality.. Moslty band guys also get inspiration out of just walking true a forest and then suddenly get an idea for a song