Day End

[Sephiyr]

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I remember when
The time before the Light
We saw the seas as we travelled
Hot days cold days came to us
We'll watch those who cheer
As we travel around the world tonight


On the blackscreens of a night
Wash our souls
We'll find the blazing sunlight
So far away we went for the Day End
For the lights wasted and gone
We'll feel the pain of a lifetime
Throughout the ending of the days

We'll feel the pain of a lifetime
Riding through the fire and ice
We'll fight for our land
Fight for the peace

On the blackscreens of a night
Wash our souls
We'll find the blazing sunlight
So far away we went for the Day End
For the lights wasted and gone
We'll feel the pain of a lifetime
Throughout the ending of the days

The darkness was alright then
We walked towards the fight
The sympathy of the red moon
I've been told about the long names

On the blackscreens of a night
Wash our souls
We'll find the blazing sunlight
So far away we went for the Day End
For the lights wasted and gone
We'll feel the pain of a lifetime
Throughout the ending of the days

Where out of our town
And onto the wilderness
We watch them as they wave bye
The light watches as we move

On the blackscreens of a night
Wash our souls
We'll find the blazing sunlight
So far away we went for the Day End
For the lights wasted and gone
We'll feel the pain of a lifetime
Throughout the ending of the days

So far away we've gone
And atlast where free from the killing
Party on the sunday
Party on the moonlight

Our hearts will remind our souls
That we've gone so far away
Where the waves never die

On the blackscreens of a night
Wash our souls
We'll find the blazing sunlight
So far away we went for the Day End
For the lights wasted and gone
We'll feel the pain of a lifetime
Throughout the ending of the days(x2)


Uh oh.....:S.

 

[MAP MASTER]

That was pretty good, all I suggest is that you make each sentence end well to make sense, your sound kind of sounded like Bill Cosbies Anti Evil Poems lol

 

[Sephiyr]

Bill Cosbies Anti Evil Poems

LOL! Anti Evil Poems xD! Hmmmm another thing to work on then xP. Thanks for the comment.

 

[Eggy]

>>
On the blackscreens of a night
Wash our souls
We'll find the blazing sunlight
So far away we went for the Day End
For the lights wasted and gone
We'll feel the pain of a lifetime
Throughout the ending of the days
<<

See what i pointed out there? The Syllabels(sp?) are to long there and throw you completley off topic.

Its almost (from what i counteD) 4 or 5 Syllabels off from the rest of the chorus, it makes people lose intrested right away, or those that listen for the lyrics

 

[Sephiyr]

I suck at lyrics ok! Im still trying to get better! Thanks for your comment.

 

[Eggy]

I suck at lyrics ok! Im still trying to get better! Thanks for your comment.

God! im just trying to help you!! GOD!!!!!

You are getting better tho, better rhyming scheme this time

 

[Sephiyr]

God! I know your helping me I wasn't shouting at you!! GOD!!!

 

[Eggy]

God! I know your helping me I wasn't shouting at you!! GOD!!!

I'd hit it.

 

[Sephiyr]

I'd hit it.

*hits it*Yea Im thinking about new lyrics anywhos, ideas anyone? ^^

 

[Gausslander]

Eggy that is the most disgusting signature ever. It makes me want to puke, and to never think of my hot... so babilicious girlfriend... while sleeping, ever again. Well I'm getting tired, I think I'm going to call her.
p.s. don't like song, work on making sense! I SERIOUSLY hope you're not getting rep for this, and if you are I want to write some crappy songs and post it on this site too!

 

[Sephiyr]

Eggy that is the most disgusting signature ever. It makes me want to puke, and to never think of my hot... so babilicious girlfriend... while sleeping, ever again. Well I'm getting tired, I think I'm going to call her.
p.s. don't like song, work on making sense! I SERIOUSLY hope you're not getting rep for this, and if you are I want to write some crappy songs and post it on this site too!

I'm not getting rep from this OF COURSE I wont get rep from this. And thank YOU for reviving this thread <.<. Just to let you know I'M NOT IN THE MOOD FOR THIS. Dont like my songs? DONT EVEN BOTHER TO CHECK THEM!!! Jesus Christ I'm still new to them. DONT CHEW ME OUT OK!