Dark Path Retribution

[Moderator]

21:58, 29th Sep 2010
ap0calypse: Rejected

 

[x3GlikE]

Testing it now

[x] Map is to big maybe protect the map to reduce size.
[x] No sound , maybe put some epic music?

Terrain : 5/5
Doodads : 4/5
Texture : 3/5
Custom units : 1/5
Units : 2/5
Spells : 3/5
Special Effects : 5/5
Trigger Leaks : 3/5 ( The more the more leaks).
Total Score :
3/5 Approved
P.S The map is so big why not use a smaller map?

 

[light bolt30]

Map size don't matter if it's a cinematic or campaign.

 

[mckill2009]

I know that this probably wont be approved at first

be a positive thinker

 

[millzy]

Watching

EDIT: it was ok but the spells were very slow and the music realy didnt suit it. not much melee fighting at all.
Terrain : 4/5 it was good but could be better
Camera work: 2/5 it stoped so many times then just spinned around in a circle i kinda got disee
Effects and spells: 3/5 some were way to slow and the repeat of the skulls and holy missles was wrong i liked the lighting missle getting destryed on the way there

well out of all that id have to say 3/5

 

[JGGDMakervb6]

Ratings:
Description 6/10 "Tell something about the story"
The camera 7/10 "Good"
The Story 9.9/10 "The Best!"
Overall : 8.2/10 "Good!, Just edit some stuffs"

 

[The_Olorin]

I liked it.
Ofcourse there where some drawbacks, what was mentioned in earlier posts.

But one thing i noticed and what annoyed me, was that in couple of scenes, some of the characters were in some trees, rocks.

Fix that and i can say, that its a good work. Keep it going.

 

[ap0calypse]

Basic overview: (note that this is not a full review!)

Spoiler warning

Story:
So the cinematic starts with some paladin who clearly needs some anger management.
He tries to tell us a story we know nothing about, but fails to transmit this message because - as said before - we know nothing about what happened, why it happened or what's happening now.
Then some fiends come at him, he easily smites them with some repetitive strikes.
More fiends come at him (because they thought it would work this time?), the paladin does NOT kill them all: instead some just run past him and stay there for the rest of the cinematic.

Then we've got the big boss coming up.
Both start throwing some repetitive spells at eachother, saying things that don't really matter anyway.
The matrix comes up, he breaks free of it and they kill eachother.
The end.


Now as you can see, there are a lot of problems here: there is no story, that's problem number one.
Maybe you thought of one, but then you failed to tell the tale so people who didn't made the story up (everyone apart from you) can easily understand what's happening.
And if it IS what I thought, then it's a lame story: bad guy shows up, tries to destroy humanity, paladin refuses and hunts him.

Everything was extremely repetitive... every spell was casted about 5 times apart from the 'bigger' ones.
Not a single spell was worthy being called eye-candy.
The fiends that do not die are an enormous bug.


Terrain:

I did not like it at all.
The tileset needs a lot of fixing, they were just poorly chosen in general.
Some trees and rocks are present, but everyone just seemed to walk through them.
The fog should be more visible (lower the fog).
Not enough useful doodads, too much random stuff.


Misc:

Every question ends with an exclamation mark, pretty weird as the rest of your spelling/grammar seems correct.
The triggers are very bad, they're filled with leaks and 'silly' things (missiles that use the move-command, which IS visible in the cinematic, I could clearly notice it and I did not enjoy it!)

The special effect when Paladin-dude breaks free of the matrix is positioned wrong (a bit behind the paladin).
The only actual special effect I remotely liked was the matrix actually, although it's quite generic (it would be better if those beacons were moving around, or if you made it in 3D).

My rating at the moment: 1/5 - rejected.
I will not rate it though, just reject it.

 

[Blackhoof]

well, at least everyone but apocalypse liked it.

I must admit though, your comments were fair and i can improve all these things, but how do you suggest I make the missiles move without the move command? I dont see a way, but that might just be my amateurness at cinematics.

By the way, the map is so big because i originally thought that i would need that much space and when i didnt i just never got around to reducing the map size.
Oh well, improving time!

 

[ap0calypse]

Hm, that's one thing I forgot to mention: you've imported a lot of things you never used...


And you can do it with a movement system.
First of all: you must know how to remove memory leaks (extremely important!).
And then just move a unit over X distance every 0.03 seconds and it looks like it's really moving (in a straight line, faster than the maximum speed and far more precise).

 

[Blackhoof]

Good point. I will do that.

How did you like the stuff i changed?