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Please, I know you guys are EPIC and HELPFUL when helping. I wrote an essay that I'm planning to send to... and maybe win a 1000 dollars! Now, the theme is "My role in Creating a peaceful world", and I wrote the essay. Now, as English isn't my main language, I maybe F***ed up here or there. Please show me the typos you've found, or even better. If you can get some Phrase to be better than the old one, write it down as a comment.
Tell me what you think, and... that's it
AFTER EDIT: I SENT THE ESSAY ALREADY. SO, no need to post here anything.
My role in creating a more peaceful world
The world We live in changes from day to day and becomes a more complex and complicated system. While I’m growing up, I try to watch everything happening in the world as a series of causes and consequences. There are so many questions, so many doubts, so many contradictions. Planet Earth is a beautiful gift from God. Its beauty is indescribable, its wealth of diverse, and everything is in perfect harmony. The sky above us is so wide and endless.
Nevertheless, we have witnessed constant clashes and fights among the people. Misunderstandings, hostility, aggressiveness, anxiety, distrust and dissatisfaction. That doesn’t stop any conflicts and wars. Voice of reason often dies before a human aggression, greed and discontent. This path is the path of no return and the road to self-destruction.
I’m fourteen years old. I already know that peace will not come by itself. I also know that a fight does not necessarily mean violence. On the contrary, violence almost always reveals and shows the weakness and impotence of those who implement it. We take pride in the fact that we belong to the most perfect kind on earth, We have people that are characterized by wit and intellect, then we must show that one each other. We can and must do it at every step. There is inevitably conflict in a family already. If you strive to show tenderness, attention, understanding, dedication, conflicts will be solved. Also, We can solve problems in school. The best way is not doing to others what you do not want someone to do to you. Then you will know how to proceed without faltering. Every man is a story for himself. We are different in many ways. By view of life, the religious and ethnic backgrounds, the skin-color, the mentality. These differences should not be a cause for rejection and hatred, and especially not for the conflict. On the contrary, they may be inexhaustible riches and more reason to know and accept each other. Unfortunately, the reality is often quite different. All the talk about equality, goodness, tolerance and freedom for all and in practical life we do everything possible to thwart the other in order to build your happiness on someone else's misfortune. I am sad because of this hypocrisy. But don’t lose hope. I will build myself as a person who will give at least a small contribution to human’s progress towards the peace in the world. I wonder what I currently can do. First of all, I have to make efforts to get better with it. I love science, I plan to deal with it, and my knowledge should never be used either against people or against the planet on which I live. I will try to do it in a perfect harmony with the welfare of mankind. I love foreign languages. I learn them so I could understand people around the world, meet their culture, their way of life and thinking. I learn to discover the universal language of the human heart. Men, no matter where they came from, have their own desires, dreams and needs. That shouldn’t be affected by color, nationality, or any other difference. So little is needed in order to understand. I want to know the secrets that keep a rich and unexplored bosom of this wonderful planet on which We live, secrets of Amazon, Tibet, Siberia, Alaska, deserts and oases, secrets of the Middle and Far East. I know that knowledge is the strongest weapon in the fight but not against someone, but for someone. If you meet someone who knows more than you, learn what is good, if you meet someone who does not know much, share it with him. Stand on the side of justice, knowledge, protection of the weak, helpless and ignorant. Help people in need! That's what makes us all human beings. That makes us human in happiness and in sorrow.
Here I’m thinking and translating my thoughts to words on this sheet of paper how to contribute to peace in the world. This is my message to all people, that somewhere in Novi Pazar, somewhere in the Balkans, lives a boy who believes in human virtues, love, justice, a boy who harbors the hope that further progress of mankind serves the common human good, that will be addressed in future issues of tolerance and in a peaceful way, that We will unite our forces to one because the survival of human society has become so closely linked, and depends so much on each other’s opinions. We must not allow it.
The world We live in changes from day to day and becomes a more complex and complicated system. While I’m growing up, I try to watch everything happening in the world as a series of causes and consequences. There are so many questions, so many doubts, so many contradictions. Planet Earth is a beautiful gift from God. Its beauty is indescribable, its wealth of diverse, and everything is in perfect harmony. The sky above us is so wide and endless.
Nevertheless, we have witnessed constant clashes and fights among the people. Misunderstandings, hostility, aggressiveness, anxiety, distrust and dissatisfaction. That doesn’t stop any conflicts and wars. Voice of reason often dies before a human aggression, greed and discontent. This path is the path of no return and the road to self-destruction.
I’m fourteen years old. I already know that peace will not come by itself. I also know that a fight does not necessarily mean violence. On the contrary, violence almost always reveals and shows the weakness and impotence of those who implement it. We take pride in the fact that we belong to the most perfect kind on earth, We have people that are characterized by wit and intellect, then we must show that one each other. We can and must do it at every step. There is inevitably conflict in a family already. If you strive to show tenderness, attention, understanding, dedication, conflicts will be solved. Also, We can solve problems in school. The best way is not doing to others what you do not want someone to do to you. Then you will know how to proceed without faltering. Every man is a story for himself. We are different in many ways. By view of life, the religious and ethnic backgrounds, the skin-color, the mentality. These differences should not be a cause for rejection and hatred, and especially not for the conflict. On the contrary, they may be inexhaustible riches and more reason to know and accept each other. Unfortunately, the reality is often quite different. All the talk about equality, goodness, tolerance and freedom for all and in practical life we do everything possible to thwart the other in order to build your happiness on someone else's misfortune. I am sad because of this hypocrisy. But don’t lose hope. I will build myself as a person who will give at least a small contribution to human’s progress towards the peace in the world. I wonder what I currently can do. First of all, I have to make efforts to get better with it. I love science, I plan to deal with it, and my knowledge should never be used either against people or against the planet on which I live. I will try to do it in a perfect harmony with the welfare of mankind. I love foreign languages. I learn them so I could understand people around the world, meet their culture, their way of life and thinking. I learn to discover the universal language of the human heart. Men, no matter where they came from, have their own desires, dreams and needs. That shouldn’t be affected by color, nationality, or any other difference. So little is needed in order to understand. I want to know the secrets that keep a rich and unexplored bosom of this wonderful planet on which We live, secrets of Amazon, Tibet, Siberia, Alaska, deserts and oases, secrets of the Middle and Far East. I know that knowledge is the strongest weapon in the fight but not against someone, but for someone. If you meet someone who knows more than you, learn what is good, if you meet someone who does not know much, share it with him. Stand on the side of justice, knowledge, protection of the weak, helpless and ignorant. Help people in need! That's what makes us all human beings. That makes us human in happiness and in sorrow.
Here I’m thinking and translating my thoughts to words on this sheet of paper how to contribute to peace in the world. This is my message to all people, that somewhere in Novi Pazar, somewhere in the Balkans, lives a boy who believes in human virtues, love, justice, a boy who harbors the hope that further progress of mankind serves the common human good, that will be addressed in future issues of tolerance and in a peaceful way, that We will unite our forces to one because the survival of human society has become so closely linked, and depends so much on each other’s opinions. We must not allow it.
Tell me what you think, and... that's it
AFTER EDIT: I SENT THE ESSAY ALREADY. SO, no need to post here anything.
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