[Cinematic] The Fall of Captain Trevor Part1

[arafor]

This is my first cinematic ever and I plan to make it a short series.Please comment and give me feed back on what you liked or didnt like.So thank you very much!Guys comments would be extremely helpful so please leave comments.

 

[arafor]

Guys comeon if you watch the cinematic please leave comments its really helpful.

 

[Ribenamania]

Wow, after watching the cinematic. I'm so dizzy. @.@

[+]I liked the way you move your camera from the city to the park.
[!]
[-]Camera movement too fast.
[-]Some fade mask period are too little and is pointless
[-]Spelling Error , "Im am" should be I'm
[-]Terrain not so good.. please don't use blizzard cliff.
[-]Some conversation speed are way too fast, I can't read them.

^^ At least it's watch-able, hope these comments could help you. GL

 

[arafor]

Thank you so much this info will deffinetly be put in part 2!

 

[Mechmap]

Give it a map description so it doesnt show up as, "Just another warcraft 3 map" in the game.

Cameras need some work as well as fade filters and terrain.

The thing that annoyed me the worst was that the dialogues replay over and over again, why do you do that? Also some grammar errors.

 

[arafor]

Thank you for your comments but repeating the dialogue is something I never encountered unless maybe an animal entered a region or something.

 

[CMarket]

This is really low quality, sorry. It should have a proper name, not just a Just Another...

The terrain should be worked on, add more tile variation, more height variation, more doodads, import some custom doodads, you can actually see the end of the world at one point(when they are pillaging the town), the flag next to the church is flying.

The cameras either go to fast or stand still which isn't good. Try working on some camera angles, you don't want everything to be in melee map perspective.

There are quite a few grammar and spelling errors.

All in all it could be a good map if you take another few hours and work on it to fix all the above mentioned. And try to watch some other popular cinematics to get the idea on how it should be done. I recommend you take a look at my cinematic series, the Sect of the Holy Mother(find it in my signature) and see how I improved my skills from part 1 to part 8. I'm sure you'll love the story and I'm sure you'll get some inspiration.

 

[arafor]

Thanks and these will be fixed and incorporated into part 2 O and for soem reason I can't view ur cines.

 

[CMarket]

What do you mean you can't view them? They don't show in the game or?

 

[arafor]

Yeah they wont up in the game it just shows up as a blank map...I dont know why

 

[Septimus]

Really low quality

The camera, the terrain, the dialog seems to be repeat.

If you post it at map section, it would get rejection right away.

 

[arafor]

ok again ive tested the map and when ive watched it the dialogue does not repeat but thank you for your comments and they will be fixed and be put in part II.