"- First Cinematic Map"
guess this means that it is ur first cinematic map;
is it ur first map overall or did u work on some other yet available maps?
after i was watching ur cinematic my first thought was: are there no variables? special effects spawn and stay etc.
n i had a look at ur triggers and yeah: there are no (but 2) variables
in cinematic maps u'll often work with special effects n most of them dont disappear after usage; so u should allocate every effect to a variable to be able to destroy it
second off ur camerawork aint the best - think properly about what u wanna put in ur focus; what's the message u r wanting to transmit with the pictures;
Example: the first pictures: is illidan the message of the first picture? well then why aint he in the focus of the picture but somewhere in the bottomleft corner?
or "the end": the focus of the last picture for me is the river in the bottomleft and the dirttile on the plateau - but i m quite sure u wanted to show both heros again; right, they're visible but they don't attract attention
- sometimes obstacles or cliffs slightly block the sight
(btw i hope u know that u r able to move and spin ur camera freely by pushing ctrl + holding the right mousebutton)
the next point is; well i love cinematics but i m not the biggest fan of fighting cinematics; there is a lack of story in fighting cinematic. it even shows the title: "fighting cinematic", "another fighting cinematic", "illidan vs arthas", i say a cinematic has to develope a story even tho it's not the biggest or greatest one, no story -> no five points
last point i wanna mention is the terrain, it's rather experimental and "funny" made because well come on there is a ship in a 5x5 meter water - plz keep it reasonable in both ways; either funny or earnest
and i dunno who gave u 5/5 for this cinematic but it's a 150% one of ur friends - cos it's NOT 5/5
but for ur first fighting cinematic it's a praiseworthy and experimental try and it's nice to come here and ask ppl about their opinion
n i hope i was able to be a littl help n feel free to message me at any time
ps: an austere word: don't listen to ppl who give u 5/5 points, it may sound nice to get full points;
but they r lying to you
so work hard n tell me when u finished ur next map
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