How good is my story?

[LordHunter]

hello

I wrote a story for my cinematic, and i'd like to know if anyone can review it? I didn't link it because, well i don't want to spoil the surprise for others ^^

Would anyone mind doing that? It's nothing too long (or boring i hope) and would take like 5-10 min max to read. Anyone who help me will be properly credited in the cinematic ofc

Thanks in advance!

LH

 

[anetherond]

I will do it. Just send it to me or post it here.

 

[LordHunter]

Thx a lot Pm sent

 

[Edhel-dur]

Sure, I would help also, PM me if u need more opinions

 

[brad.dude03]

It would be wiser to post it here instead, it would make it far easier for you and readers.

 

[PainMoth]

Agreed with brad but I would like to check it out as well.