Gloomy Swamp

[FamousPker49]

This is my entry into the Terrain Contest #1. I was hoping for some feedback.

 

[Japut3h]

The pond in the swamp craves for doodads.Lily pads would be perfect,without them its way too empty.

Nice work,but it gives the feeling like its incomplete.All you see is a bunch of water,and a bunch of identical trees.Looks a bit boring.Add a lot of variation,maybe change the water color so that the grass on the bottom gets more noticable.

 

[FamousPker49]

Alright, thanks, I just wasn't really sure what to add, but those are some good ideas. But as far as the trees, what would you suggest?

 

[Gilles]

The eyes are a nice touch. I think the problem with this is the lack of plant. Swamps are usually covered in undergrowth and plants. Add vines in the trees perhaps.

I like it as a start though. The atmosphere is good, although not all that gloomy, but close enough.

 

[Japut3h]

I agree with Gilles.You should add a lot of vines and other plants.It will make the swamp look realistic,and give it the effect of untouched wilderness.

Dont overexagarate though.

Trees would be preety nice if you spiced them up with vines hanging from the branches.This would make give make them look a bit more random,which is exactly what you should need.

Add some color variations too.Blue mushrooms,yellow flowers,whatever you feel would look good.The only color i see for now is green,it also makes it all a bit boring.Again,overexagarating with color variations may make it all crappy.

 

[~Void~]

Bright green water = bad.
Make it more like a turquoise color, it will still look murky, but a little more real.

 

[inverted]

looks great a bit to bright though, other than it i like it

 

[Troubadour]

Hmm, I think the water would be better with a more brownish color, swamps wouldn't really have green or blue water. And the trees seem a little repetitive, maybe use some willow trees too?

 

[Nudl9]

I kinda of like it that way you already have it, but i liked Gilles suggestion add vines on the trees.

 

[DungeonM]

As others said change the fog/water color. I'd suggest a dark blueish gray fog with brownish gray water.

 

[Wolf.]

Looks good, but the water's too green.

 

[Oziris]

It's good but emty!!!

 

[FamousPker49]

Alright, here is an update, tell me what you think nows!

 

[~Void~]

Now it needs a foreground. I doubt the invisible person with the camera would be standing in the middle of the swamp, and although a perspective of a person isn't necessary, it makes it look better imo.

 

[Hawkwing]

This looks awsome but you need to make some patches of land, above the water. Just small little "islands" everywhere.

 

[Nudl9]

I liked the first one best, the only new good thing i see is the vines down from the trees.

 

[thegreatsmite]

having just one flower is a little out of place. eithier get rid of it or add more. the pink contrasts too much with the gloomy setting

 

[FamousPker49]

Another update, Void I think I get what you are saying, but not totally sure. Could you elaborate?

 

[Naze]

Now it needs a foreground. I doubt the invisible person with the camera would be standing in the middle of the swamp, and although a perspective of a person isn't necessary, it makes it look better imo.

I'll quote Void then saying everything he said again.

Well, it is done.

And looks pretty like a terrain for a 1st person shoot game.

Oh, and, about your last update, I don't think that that kind of plants (viny plants) grow underwater. Remove 'em.

 

[Hawkwing]

Woah! That is way better! Good job!

 

[Nudl9]

Pff its just getting worse by each update now!

 

[FamousPker49]

...if that is so, please explain why and how to improve it.

 

[Troubadour]

I think he was being sarcastic, because they definetly aren't getting worse.

 

[Gilles]

I think he was being sarcastic, because they definetly aren't getting worse.

No, I'm pretty sure he is serious. I like it a lot more personally. Although it doesn't seem all that gloomy. It would pass I suppose.

I like the rain. Good touch. The plants help a lot IMO. Although it takes away from the eyes.

 

[Nudl9]

I liked the first one because it was plain and nice and gived the nice impression of gloomy, now its filled with all kinds of different doodads that doesnt even grow in water.
I only support 1 of the suggestions as i said previous, the vines down from the trees or vines around the trees.
The water itself was great and the bottom of the water looked murky and dirty!

 

[FamousPker49]

Hmmm... Idk. I do think that the first was more gloomy, but agree that the last is better and the plants do take away from the eyes... Idk what to do to make it more gloomy though...

 

[Nudl9]

Maybe its the trees that ruins it a bit, im not sure, but they look kind of odd with the leaves and the color on them, doesnt look really gl00my.
Well i would believe the lilly pads could still work just to fill out the empty water a bit...
The idea of the terrain is nice, but UTM lacks of the doodads that you need probably.

 

[Craka_J]

You need to add more tree variation. Adding some vines hanging down and lilly pads probably wouldn't hurt either.

~Craka_J

 

[FamousPker49]

Alright, here's another update on first post.

 

[Gilles]

I think I may like the old one more. Although it still looks bare. Perhaps if you took the old one, with vines in the trees and a few lilly pads. Both are nice though. Good work.

 

[thegreatsmite]

the dark green bush in the corner doesn't mix with the light green plants. it stands out and draws my attention to the corner. try submergeing it or making it grow out of the tree