I think maybe this would fit better in the Storyboard, Filmting.
Anyway, initially I thought "what a pretentious prick" when seeing
that you made a read-along of the poem, thinking it might make it
more epic somehow. And then, in the beginning, I thought it was
rough, unrefined and merely too abstract, and not in a good way.
Suffice to say; I was disgusted.
Then came the "happy valentines day" part, and from there and
forth the poem just flowered into beauty. I gave you some hard
words with your previous poem(s), but this, this is good.
I really liked it, and I think you should continue writing!
I am rarely impressed by the poems I see posted here.
And although you have a soothing, though somewhat pompous
way of reading the poem, I would suggest you stick to posting
them in textual form. I just... Well. Like that better.
