Elvish Cinematic - Attacked

[Moderator]

09:05, 29th Mar 2013
Orcnet: the cinematic looks very simple and with there are no cinematic scenes that close ups or the scenes that needs to stay near the figure that is speaking, also terrain should be visually beautified when it comes to cinematic to add details on the story, the dialogue seems too low at first I thought the red orcs were winning since looking at the battle scene there are very few elves plus a lot of orcs making you think the elves are overrun then a dialogue saying "Retreat! we are done here" is kinda complicated for an orc to reply and then they all die at the same time

also the movement needs work and how they speak to one another, anyways this is a good attempt but it needs more polishing and stable briefing for each characters involved in the story, I suggest you redirect this in the Map Development thread for improvement and ideas and also help from others good day then

 

[Orcnet]

the cinematic looks very simple and with there are no cinematic scenes that close ups or the scenes that needs to stay near the figure that is speaking, also terrain should be visually beautified when it comes to cinematic to add details on the story, the dialogue seems too low at first I thought the red orcs were winning since looking at the battle scene there are very few elves plus a lot of orcs making you think the elves are overrun then a dialogue saying "Retreat! we are done here" is kinda complicated for an orc to reply and then they all die at the same time

also the movement needs work and how they speak to one another, anyways this is a good attempt but it needs more polishing and stable briefing for each characters involved in the story, I suggest you redirect this in the Map Development thread for improvement and ideas and also help from others good day then

 

[Kenzomaster]

Sooo...
It need better dialog
More characterization?
And more details...

For my defense, the story sre like "fel orcs attack elves, got what they need, then retreats"
Later kathris is going to get back the things and happy ending?

But what would YOU suggest as dor better movement, dialog and envirnment interaction?