Don't blame video games..

[JarrardKO]

Lawl, like 10 minutes worth I 'spose.

Well, I can admit I'm not the average girl shy nerd,
I don't have pimples and i don't do combovers,
I don't lounge around for hours playin super mario world,
I go out often, I have a job, employed at a fast food restaurant.
So none of you better mess with me you wimpy sun starved geeks,
'cause if you do i'll grab my Nintendo 64, Playstation and Xbox chip,
sharpen the edges of all three consoles with my chisel utensils,
then sword lunge at your head with my super secret imitation of an Elite,
sneakily developed and taught to me by shady Bungie progamming employees.
Damn, these video games have turned me into a violent monster turned hideous,
so I go out, put the key in the ignition, do 100 ks and hit all pedestrians,
I'm going NUTS, your ROAD KILL if I see you in my rear view mirror vision,
the police come shoot out my tires and puts me under arrest, sh*t i'm gonna do life in prison,
next day in court I got prosecuted for hit and runs in my honda and I said "Mario kart did it..."

Comments & Critique is humbly welcome.

 

[Deathell]

W...t...f?? Is this a story about you?? LOL!!

 

[brad.dude03]

It is.... interesting... lol The concept is good, but your rhyming often doesn't work, and I don't think this was a poem (I read it in my head more like a rap) and it didn't rhyme well at all in parts.... either that, or in some of the parts where it did rhyme, you tried to hard tomake it work so it ended up sounding bad anyway.

Keep writing though! Overall it was pretty good for 10 minutes worth of work

 

[Undead_Lives]

I didn't see any rhyme......so I'm guessing this was just free verse.
I laughed at the end.

I'd like to see you do 15 mins of work. Or even 20.