Dark of Assasin

[Moderator]

02:01, 3rd Feb 2009
Septimus: http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/995481-post8.html

 

[dragor-X]

Scary cinematic? I hate horror things -.-

 

[Hin]

lol =/

 

[Spartan327]

you spelt assassin wrong u spelt it assasin

 

[Hin]

you spelt assassin wrong u spelt it assasin

Where? I checked all and don't find nothing be more specific please.

 

[DredLord2]

The audio could be a little more clear.

 

[Day-Elven]

[+] Nice landscape
[+] Models fits cinematic
[-] Leaks
[-] Bad triggering
[-] Transmissions are too loud

Overall: 3/5
Good luck in improving it.

 

[Septimus]

To Hin : 1) You set the Action-Wait rather long at some scenario, try reduce it. Infact, it was recommend to use precise timing as they are much better.
2) Camera turn 180 degree and move right through the wall, fix that camera.
3) Try add more music, it was the same music all over again.
4) Voice act could be better as it currently kind of.. static... but at least you try to add voice act unlike other cinematic that doesn't have it.
5) Typo error found, you mistype "collapsed" as "colapsed" and "assassin" as "assasin".
6) Storyline contradiction, how the hell did she know which minister should be assassinate. All that guy does was saying "Kill that minister"

Overall was 3/5 and mini-moderator vote was APPROVED

To Day-Elven : Memory leak at cinematic map is alright, provided it doesn't give any lag.

 

[TheBlooddancer]

Wee, im a gyrocopter

Okay, the waits after each line, is way to long.
Try lower it with a second everywhere, and see if it still works.

Also, assassin is spelled assasin in your cinematic, thus the voice reads it wrong.

Also, Power Jump! (Lol! ). Try add crow form, and sue the 'set height over time' and then remove crow form.

 

[ModelTester]

(+) Terrain
(+) Models
(+) Nice Landscaping.
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(-)I really hated the voice actors because they really don't fit the cinematic.
(-)Lots of Grammar mistakes I found in this cinematic
(-) Audio was bad
(-) Bad Triggering..
(-) Storyline does not make sense at all

You spelled Dark of Assasin wrong.

 

[Restor]

Terrain was ok, but the camera movement was very ugly (use apply camera for 0 sec (instead of 0< sec) sometimes)

 

[Rifle-Man]

You know Hin, have you noticed that lots of your dialogues are nonsense? Like in "Camping in the Forest", you said Look a big wolf like thare was a toy wolf. You should say: Aaah! A big wolf! Or in Destiny part 1: A mountain, very beautiful. I just don't get you.

 

[CloudMax]

I didnt get the story line and wow... even i can find some grammer mistakes even if my grammer sucks. The camera moves very ugly to be honest. And the audio isnt that good either.
2/5, sorry : /

 

[Cheezeman]

I'm trying to be constructive in this review, but it is still very negative...
(No, I'm no moderator or even close, this is just what I think)

[+2] Very nice terrain
[+] Nice guitarr music, fits the story
[+] Credits!
[-] Contless grammar mistakes
[-] Contless pronounciation mistakes
[-] I barley understood the story
[-] Very short story
[-] Screaming voice actors/actresses
[-] Bored voice actors/actresses?
[-] Very long delays between voices
[-] Power jump? (make it like knockback instead?)
[-] What happend to the two Footmen? And where is the collapsed bridge?

If you improve the voice acting (and shorten the delays) I will give you 2/5 for this.
If you however improve on all these negative statments, you might even get a 4/5 from me
After all you did a job and posted it, which is far from my skill (I've tried to but my first map just caused a lot of critical errors in war3.exe)

 

[Hin]

My brother made the guitar solo music and i recorded-it and put on, but thanks i'm happy always that it have been aproved.

 

[creyzi4zb12]

Hmmmm....the terrain was good except for the one in the houses were their feets don't show, sometimes camera was bad...terrain was awesome... = 3/5

 

[CMarket]

The terrain, as was mentioned, was pretty good in most places. The cameras are pretty bad though. Most of them move through something or stand still. The grammar/spelling is horrible.

The voice acting was horrible as well. Not only was it spoken by people with a bad pronunciation of English, but it was way too loud and there was static.

However, the spelling/grammar and voice acting sometimes made me laugh. "Power Jump!" takes the cake though, that made me laugh so hard

 

[Hin]

^^ lol here where i live no one speak english is hard to find some one =p

 

[CMarket]

Well I find most of my voice actors across the internet as here people speak English awfully as well.

 

[CloudMax]

^^ lol here where i live no one speak english is hard to find some one =p

Like CMarket said, try to find people on the net that wants to do the voices, maybe you can find people on hive that wants to.

Also, its really, really bad recorded. Its more like a metal sound that hurts my ears then a actual voice.

 

[DPL]

The only think I liked was the models and the music. Voices are bad its like someone is forcing them to speak and when the Minister is ambushed he say ''Shiiit'' like he is going to make it himself. Power Jump! WTF?!
If I was the Assasin I would kill Jack and the other guy and just run. Strange woman...
Rate for the cinematic 3/5

 

[Garfield1337]

ahhahahaha..i really lol'd when minister said "shit!",it was like he doesnt give a fu*k about what's happening around him
Also when others speak,it looks like they're on druggs or what...
But terrain and models were awesome!

 

[Vunjo]

If this is comedy, then i rate it 5/5 cause sound is funny (or really bad)
I guess that it isn't ment to be funny but i won't rate it, cause it would be 1 =)

 

[akrep_ve_su]

+ Good terrain,
+ Good models.
- Voice act is too loud and noisy.
- Dialogues were lame and somehow funny (Aarrgh bad assassin?)
- BG Music; (Sweet Dreams, probably played with nylon accoustic guitar) It didn't fit the concept at all, and was too short and repetitive)
- I am not a perfect English speaking guy, but dialogues contained too much grammer errors.
- Storyline is..uhmm.. weird?..
Overall: 4/10 (Fair)

 

[deepstrasz]

-horrifying voices
-"You will never make me be your assassin!" ... "You leave me no choice, I accept."
-what makes them think she won't just run?
1/5.

 

[Gottfried]

Please i want good reviews, not bad reviews that make me keep on.

Things surely not works the way like this. :O

Where? I checked all and don't find nothing be more specific please.

Map name ^^
PROS:
The voice actors are really bored, but they have an interesting british and russian accept.
Music is fine...
Landscape is really well.
CONS:
Everything else
The pirate model looks like a half retarded zombie. :/
The "battle" and the events can be better.
Grammar is just silly.
Story is quite weird and heavily understandable. (not in a good way)
2/5