"Angel" The Poem

[Jsprat100]

Why can't you see the angel?
She is sitting in the future,
Her hands hold my heart,
Her face is heaven itself,

Why can't you see the angel?
Her smile warms the world,
Her frown chills the eve,
Her eyes never shed a tear,

Why can't you see the angel?
Her beauty is infinate
Why can't you see the angel?
Her voice is love itself
Why can't you see the angel?
Am I blinded by love?

As promised, the second poem of this evening, slightly better, its about my girlfriend.

 

[mjllonir]

It's very good that you repeat yourself, it emphasizes what you really want to show. Although the ends don't rhyme (they don't have to after all), you should put ressemblances inside the lines, it feels better when you say it. Ill post one of my newest poems so you see what I mean

 

[klishky]

sweet mary mother of god!!!