An Egg

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Orcnet

20:33, 18th June 2013

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Review

Map Approved

An Egg (Version 1.1) Rate Score Percent Letter 5/5 91-100 A Rate Score Percent Letter 4/5 81-90% B Rate Score Percent Letter 3/5 75-80% C Rate Score Percent Letter 2/5 70-74% D Rate Score Percent Letter 1/5 50-69% F Overview: Gameplay "An Egg" is a short Cinematic based on the story Andy Weir of creepypasta.com where life is different to what we know. "Its a short and good dramatic cinematic, I love the story and giving it a 3D view on a warcraft scale is excellent but since its cinematic maybe giving some scenes to some climatic dialogues would give more atmosphere to the story, some close ups would be great but all thanks to low graphics of warcraft 3 it may look silly, but still its a shot." Terrain "There's no much terrain visible right now, only just the death of the observer and the fog view of ethereal world, but I can give a fair rating for this since you look more closely in reading the dialogues than view of spheres but my idea of giving scenes to each of it may be better." Management "Overall, it is creepy and well explained but the start and end cinematic has those UI still shown do remove those to give impact on the cinematic setting, also void the background music it evaporates the serious story with warcraft 3's classy soundtrack, either remove it or replace it with a more ambient soundtrack/music that is fitting for this, so for now its useful." Total Score: Rate Score Percent Letter 9/15 80% C

 

[UndeadImmortal]

I probably need a custom map preview. Updated.

 

[AwzomeWulfzz]

omfg dis is stupid as siht lol fgit fite me irl nao......

 

[Daffa]

You sure need a custom preview, also, as long no real religious style in the map, I'm fine
So, what's in it? cinematic?

 

[UndeadImmortal]

You sure need a custom preview, also, as long no real religious style in the map, I'm fine
So, what's in it? cinematic?

Well uhh, it's about death, and what happen after it.

 

[Daffa]

Good enough, consider me checking in
I love death cinematic

Will review later,

Spoiler

wtf, should have check the section when I was at my cousin's house so I can dl this, my net sucks that it can't even connect to Internet :/

 

[Binsu]

Behold! Le review of Hell_Master XD. BTW, I did understood the story in this cinematic and I must say it is quite funny at some point and in some emotional which is a nice mix. Here is my review:

[+] Good Points:
-Terrain is really looking good for this cinematic and fits the situations in the game but to add a suggestions, are you into making the terrain better and HQ? If yes, you could try changing everything to HQ doodadd destructibles and such... including tiles, and all units, it will really make a realistic touch into your cinematic.
-Of course, the grammar is really good..lol :b
-Cnematic really has a deep meaning for me which is really interesting to find out.
-What interests me more is you giving a 1 minute chat after the cinematic ends. This will give the players to discuss the cinematic or random shitz. Nice job really!

[-] Bad Points:
-I can see that it is really a small map but why is the size of the map so big? The heaven part really covers much of the place to be honest. I suggest making it smaller.
-No offense but I think the Minimap Preview is not attractive enough so suggestion is add one.
-The units cannot be really seen at the White fog and together with the strong Transparency. I suggest lessen the tone of the fog or transparency.

[] Suggestions:
-Terrain is really looking good as I say but I do think, this can still be improved which we know that there is no perfect terrain. =)
-You should try lessen the Map Size. Its too big for a short cinematic that only covers two place.
-Make the game attractive and pull more audience and what I suggest is add a minimap preview image on this one.

Overall, I really did like cinematic so much. The terrain is really looking good in each scenarios and the way the story was told is great but I do think this needs more attraction and also a proper transparency for the units. Rated 3/5 and +4 REP!

Voting for Approval! Happy mapmaking and good luck!

 

[UndeadImmortal]

[-] Bad Points:
-I can see that it is really a small map but why is the size of the map so big? The heaven part really covers much of the place to be honest. I suggest making it smaller.

If the map size is smaller, you can see the units and the black edge of the map, which is pretty ugly.

-No offense but I think the Minimap Preview is not attractive enough so suggestion is add one.

On it!

-The units cannot be really seen at the White fog and together with the strong Transparency. I suggest lessen the tone of the fog or transparency.

Well it's heaven, ya' know!

Thanks for the review btw.

 

[Binsu]

No problem, and yes I do agree with your first point about making the map size big so I have come to realize that covering it with Minimap Image will do the trick, good luck!

 

[UndeadImmortal]

Map updated with custom map preview.

 

[Binsu]

Great. =)

Looks more of an attention puller now so 4/5.

 

[GreeN!X]

Ohh.. looks cool. Trying it out right now... Will review later.

EDIT: Hmm.. Pretty cool story. There's no point in rating gameplay since it's just a cinematic and the terrain is just fine for the story. Though I was expecting a cinematic map to be longer I think this deserves a..

Hidden

 

[sonofjay]

Creepypasta...

Oh god, the good old days.

 

[BLazeKraze]

The story is great...

 

[T. D. W.]

holy shit, that was.. ummm.... how to say
i don't know,,,intrestin/creepy/weird/ummm/oh yeah and good / +rep

 

[Daffa]

hmm..... not a bad cinematic, yet no so religious one, which is interesting ^^
well, let's just go to work on the Review shall we?
GOOD POINTS

• Nice Grammar, good job
• Good Visuals for the Heaven
• Nice Story
• Nice Terrain

BAD POINTS

• NONE

for this I vote for 4/5 [since its too short] + Approval + 2 Rep

EDIT :

Well, I guess I can't give the rep, anyway, it has been sent beforehand tho, on the first post, anyway, vote for 4/5 + APPROVAL

 

[Orcnet]

Map Approved, see details on top

 

[~DARK~]

There Is no After that Part Said Free Chat 1 Minute

 

[FRENGERS]

Woow Great imagination you got there @..@
That was Fenomenal!!

+ REPT

 

[I_am_Death]

nice film. 5/5 :3. It's quite funny at some point, like Hell Master

 

[ryouzai]

Hmm, is this a trolling map ?

 

[UndeadImmortal]

Hmm, is this a trolling map ?

What do you mean? This was based on a creepypasta i read a year ago, I just decided to convert it into wc3.

 

[ryouzai]

What do you mean? This was based on a creepypasta i read a year ago, I just decided to convert it into wc3.

so we just like hosting a game, have everyone join in then watch your film , that's all ?

 

[UndeadImmortal]

so we just like hosting a game, have everyone join in then watch your film , that's all ?

This is basically a cinematic map, a map with really no gameplay at all. Is there a problem?

 

[neven1]

I had the same theory as this video ..but if i was there i would kill god..atleast i would try..no reson.I still think all religions are stupid tough..

 

[Daffa]

^no flaming or insulting please.

 

[Shade Da Scout]

Now I will turn you into a chinese girl peasant from 540 AD.wait what?

made me giggle.there are few grammar mistakes but what a heck

this is one hell of a mindf*ck

 

[ryouzai]

This is basically a cinematic map, a map with really no gameplay at all. Is there a problem?

Just wanna confirm if i need to do anything before the "trailer" ends xD

 

[Inflicted]

Woah. Leaves a lot to think about. Very nice.

A few grammar errors, but otherwise everything else was good. Had an eye-opening and thought-causing story, and some fairly good visuals. 5/5 +rep

 

[Mgeterno11]

This map is really nice, the cinematic has a great story.
The grammar is also excellent.
And this story has a lot of meanings, and made me thinking about it, too. 5/5 + rep

My suggestion is that make a hero map based on this story, after he reincarnated.

 

[MushiKeewi]

I like it. It's funny. So i'm a Chinese girl?

 

[Arad MNK]

Wierd cinematic. Only Speeches. No action or Backstory. Not many Camera Movements.
The Terrain... Well there was No terrain at all! But the Part Car crash had a terrain which wasn't great, not Really bad Either.

Anyway, a 3/5 would be Good.

 

[deepstrasz]

Although the philosophical conversation gets you thinking (well, it's kind of silly on the long run), the cinematic itself is pretty much lacking.
3/5.