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Aloha.

So how the Cyborg Army fares? My characters don't see any cyborgs in the roleplay

Also, would you mind if you take some time to check MegaCraft and read the lore? I would like to know what you think about it

http://www.hiveworkshop.com/threads/megacraft-1.258906/

It's not really an army.
Two dozen troops right now.

I will look at the link in a min.

I see. By the way, if you got nothing better to do, why not include some funny or just random moments between the scientist and the robots?

Kay, thanks.
P.S. be sure to leave your feedback in the thread, no more 420 word limit, also, to help me bump the thread

P.P.S perhaps this too -- http://www.hiveworkshop.com/pastebin/3992e767dbfcd3c2e167552832fe06294537/

Seems like a really messy story. You're throwing names of characters and locations like frisbees.
I would tone that down if anything.

How? By using descriptions more instead of names?

You mean both stories or just the roleplay ones?

Some details may or may not be important to the story and may simply be left out.

What most books do is start with a very small cast 2-3 people and slowly expand it. You mention like 10 names in your little text though. This might not be a large issue if it were only Warcraft names because those are already known to most people.

But you haven't answered my question yet... which "story" do you mean? Both, or either the roleplay or the campaign?

Yeah, in most games, that's the case too. I'll try to see if I can revamp and polish up the summary. I almost forgot that people will get dizzy when they read like ten new names, that happened to me quite a few times.

Should I mention something like "Yuri, the psychic maniac who long for world domination and control the minds..."?

I was talking about the story in the map development thread.

Yuri seems kinda important to the story so he should probably be included. But there are a lot of other names that wont add much to the summery.

As for the linked pastebin, it does not tickle my interest at all ;P