Short Story Critique

[WhitePhoenix]

Finished a short story, thirteen pages, approx. 6000 words.

Critique, comment, etcetera.

 

[Devine]

I'm going to read this right now. Hold on.

 

[WhitePhoenix]

I'm going to read this right now. Hold on.

Not only holdng, bracing for impact.

 

[Devine]

It's a bit long but I like it. Didn't really read it thoroughly, I'm afraid, though.
My native language is Dutch, so I'm not going to be able to give feedback on your English and stuff like that.
I thought it was pretty good, though.
Edit: I kinda had a midnight-snack before reading this. Sorry for the wait but I was hungry .

 

[WhitePhoenix]

It's a bit long but I like it. Didn't really read it thoroughly, I'm afraid, though.
My native language is Dutch, so I'm not going to be able to give feedback on your English and stuff like that.
I thought it was pretty good, though.

Thanks for the read at least. As for as length is concerned I'm probably going to keep it as it is for now. Nonetheless, thank you again for the read.