Need some thoughts

[Vladadamm]

That's a little piece of writing i did 7 months ago for a project i had and that i might continue, so i would like some thoughts about it.

Awakening from Shadows, <Character> looked around him, surprised. Only things that succeeded to reach his still obscured mind were questions, questions and even more questions. What the hell happened there ? Why are there orcs in the wood ? Why are they dead and what has killed them ? What thing could do what have those corpses, if we could still call those like that, been through ? But most importantly, what was he doing there and why was he inconscious just a few seconds ago ? He tried to remember anything from what took place here, but only thing that came to his mind was darkness, Shadows.

(note that the uppercases on Shadows is intentional)

Is the mystery part well highlighted or not ? And how could i improve it ?

 

[neo_sluf]

i can't really understand the paragraph.. i can't get really what is he seeing.. it seems like that the details are not properly arranged or stated.. some sentence don't go along with the shadows that why it is a bit confusing..

 

[GreeN!X]

Awakening from Shadows, (...)

I don't get this part. What do you mean by that? Did he wake up from a hidden area? (Behind a tree covered by its shadows?) but other than that, everything else looks fine. I could picture a scene just by reading your paragraph and most of the paragraph is pretty understandable.